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i love all that colors, that's why you should two
over rated and nothing gets eaten
red dots as remanence of this
staining these words
an unreadable tone.
the sky and the water
are the same shade
and there isn't even
the slightest of wave
...
okay that was a lie
there actually is
but only a real little bit.
you'll excel
land lover
excel well.
the swan took off
a mixture of sand
and water dropped
onto this page
when i explained
a fixture to you.
great, real expectations
elephant
narrow.
the sun comes through
the salt comes on.
blue
nothing
sky.
purple everything
people in noisy kinks
and what a beautiful morning it was.
red dots as remanence of this
staining these words
an unreadable tone.
the sky and the water
are the same shade
and there isn't even
the slightest of wave
...
okay that was a lie
there actually is
but only a real little bit.
you'll excel
land lover
excel well.
the swan took off
a mixture of sand
and water dropped
onto this page
when i explained
a fixture to you.
great, real expectations
elephant
narrow.
the sun comes through
the salt comes on.
blue
nothing
sky.
purple everything
people in noisy kinks
and what a beautiful morning it was.
Published 19th May 2013
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Anonymous
19th May 2013 10:18pm
I think this poem has a good potential to it, when you wrote about the swans, and further,then, I felt the poem took itself off....Write on, write on!!!
20th May 2013 8:02pm
Is the title meant to be 'too'?
I definitely agree with Mourganna,
the swan bit is excellent, and I liked the:
elephant
narrow.
bit, it's a very sunshine-y write,
much enjoyed! :)
I definitely agree with Mourganna,
the swan bit is excellent, and I liked the:
elephant
narrow.
bit, it's a very sunshine-y write,
much enjoyed! :)
20th May 2013 8:04pm
20th May 2013 10:36pm
21st May 2013 8:24pm
