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Photograph
Picture me in my room of mirrors
Sitting, standing, laying or strattling
You ask me for pictures
From every angle I can give
I snap a shot here and I snap one there
Sending them to you one by one
You reply with a voice text "Yes, sweet baby"
Oh how I love the sound of your voice
I know your looking at my eyes, lips and thighs
I know the hold I have on you
I feel it too I gotta have you
Bring yourself to me
I'll have my camera ready
Waiting for you to come play
Sitting, standing, laying or strattling
You ask me for pictures
From every angle I can give
I snap a shot here and I snap one there
Sending them to you one by one
You reply with a voice text "Yes, sweet baby"
Oh how I love the sound of your voice
I know your looking at my eyes, lips and thighs
I know the hold I have on you
I feel it too I gotta have you
Bring yourself to me
I'll have my camera ready
Waiting for you to come play
Published 19th May 2013
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19th May 2013 2:13am
19th May 2013 2:15am
19th May 2013 3:35am
19th May 2013 3:38am
Hey, ok this is a nice foundation, you've a good setting to show off your sensuality. A Lady working the camera can be quite ..moving
I think you should play more on you, small descriptions, not overdone, suggestive, evocative ie:
Picture me, in my room of mirrors ( the comma after 'picture me' dictates a nice pause where we can take in all that entails)
(sitting, standing, laying or stratling) <~ here is where I'd encourage some description, maybe a line for each position.
The latter half is pretty good too, 'I know the hold I have over you' Its a two way thing, I think if you can hone in on the sensual at the top, and the confident centerfold type Lady in the latter half, you'll improve this a gteat deal.
..all my opinion only, hope it helps a little. Nice one, shine on
I think you should play more on you, small descriptions, not overdone, suggestive, evocative ie:
Picture me, in my room of mirrors ( the comma after 'picture me' dictates a nice pause where we can take in all that entails)
(sitting, standing, laying or stratling) <~ here is where I'd encourage some description, maybe a line for each position.
The latter half is pretty good too, 'I know the hold I have over you' Its a two way thing, I think if you can hone in on the sensual at the top, and the confident centerfold type Lady in the latter half, you'll improve this a gteat deal.
..all my opinion only, hope it helps a little. Nice one, shine on
19th May 2013 4:33am
19th May 2013 4:14am
I love play time!!
but picture, they get me into
trouble sometimes lol
good job tommie
but picture, they get me into
trouble sometimes lol
good job tommie
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