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The Stories it could Tell...
Oh the stories the mirrors upon the wall
could tell, if one would listen to it all
Mirror, mirror, set on her wall
Watch how her defenses fall
Legs wide open, an inviting sin
All while catching her naughty grin
Mirror, mirror, I wonder do you see
How the pleasure is consuming me
Mirror, mirror, watch in awe
at the erotic pleasure of it all
Our legs entwined, we are locked
passions invited, two lovers rocked.
Mirror, mirror, I see you as you watch me
as I enjoy eating n' pumping this wet pussy
Mirror, mirror can you smell our molten heat
you're a witness to her pink, my meat beat
Heaving n' moanin' releasin' in ecstasy
Oh how I love to clean a very wet she
Mirror, mirror set upon her wall
Quietly see, as two have now spent it all...
could tell, if one would listen to it all
Mirror, mirror, set on her wall
Watch how her defenses fall
Legs wide open, an inviting sin
All while catching her naughty grin
Mirror, mirror, I wonder do you see
How the pleasure is consuming me
Mirror, mirror, watch in awe
at the erotic pleasure of it all
Our legs entwined, we are locked
passions invited, two lovers rocked.
Mirror, mirror, I see you as you watch me
as I enjoy eating n' pumping this wet pussy
Mirror, mirror can you smell our molten heat
you're a witness to her pink, my meat beat
Heaving n' moanin' releasin' in ecstasy
Oh how I love to clean a very wet she
Mirror, mirror set upon her wall
Quietly see, as two have now spent it all...
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Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 2:15pm
Damn that is way to hot for me to reading at work...I loved it, especially the first stanza :)
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 2:48pm
Lol oh u truly love knowing u had pleasure reading this n seeing as how naughty you are, I beg u found an interesting way to 'release' that agony lol thank h precious friend...truly appreciate u! :)
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 4:56pm
Mmmmmm we both love the same thing! lol
Thank you babydoll I appreciate you :)
Thank you babydoll I appreciate you :)
Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 3:44pm
I imagine a mirror holds a multitude of secrets. Nice imagery and write Poetikmind.
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 5:08pm
I Imagime ur right lol but lets hope
they keep their 'glass' shut lol
Thanks my dearest lady :)
they keep their 'glass' shut lol
Thanks my dearest lady :)
Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 5:51pm
Since you’re open to honest critique I’d like to offer some. I rather liked the premise of your piece, that being if mirrors could tell their stories. It falls in line with “The Silent Series”, some things I’m currently doing. My feed back might be that rather then handle your subject content by the use of raw and common words, I believe you possess the skills to present the same theme in a more elegant manner. Not trying to be a prude but I think you could improve your work by elevating the vocabulary and at the same time create a more sensual context. I will say this, it definitely grabbed my attention and I may resort to covering the mirror whenever I stay at a hotel.........
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 7:55pm
I couldn't agree with you more IF I haven't previously shown I
have the ability to speak/write in that manner lol
This was simply a decision to dispense with the 'pretty talk'
n just out it out in a somewhat RAW manner... I thank u for ur time n thoughts dude :)
have the ability to speak/write in that manner lol
This was simply a decision to dispense with the 'pretty talk'
n just out it out in a somewhat RAW manner... I thank u for ur time n thoughts dude :)
Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 6:35pm
I like the fluidity this piece rhythm lulls you as if hypnotized really liked this one.
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 7:56pm
Aaaaawww thank u sweetie pie in my eye! lol
appreciate u n glad u enjoyed it :)
appreciate u n glad u enjoyed it :)
Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 8:00pm
The mirrors and walls talk too damn much! lol... Telling all the dirty, freaky, sneaky, naughty little secrets. hahaha.....
Me Likes.....xo
Me Likes.....xo
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 8:09pm
Tru dat! I think from here ill just do it in the bushes outside! lol
thank u precious one, adore you! :)
thank u precious one, adore you! :)
Re: The Stories it could Tell...
Anonymous
15th May 2013 9:19pm
Just glad my mirror is in the other room right now...
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
15th May 2013 10:54pm
Lmao oh yea? N why might that be!? lol
thank you sweetheart for ur thoughts n support :)
thank you sweetheart for ur thoughts n support :)
Re: The Stories it could Tell...
16th May 2013 9:15pm
Mr. poetikmind that was an Awesome piece bro.
Great pen and read!
Ink on!!
Sir Lancelott
Great pen and read!
Ink on!!
Sir Lancelott
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re: Re: The Stories it could Tell...
16th May 2013 10:43pm
Sir Lance, I graciously thank you! :) happy to know you enjoyed, I will be heading ur way soon to return the favor! really appreciate it bro.