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Oh No You Didn't!
A poem is asked for a woman
that on the surface I only know about
too intense I fear
will end up with her serious pout
So I will start with what I do see
a smile with so full lips
curves that can make a man drool
so wanting to touch those hips
But when I did a little reading
something more not at a loss
when dealing with players or deceivers
this is not a woman to cross
Get the feeling she can fight and tumble
if she thinks you aren't legit
even with no body parts
she knows how to hit
So if you plan to mess with this lady
play sincere or don't try it at all
because my bet will be on her standing
not even a ten count before a canvass fall
that on the surface I only know about
too intense I fear
will end up with her serious pout
So I will start with what I do see
a smile with so full lips
curves that can make a man drool
so wanting to touch those hips
But when I did a little reading
something more not at a loss
when dealing with players or deceivers
this is not a woman to cross
Get the feeling she can fight and tumble
if she thinks you aren't legit
even with no body parts
she knows how to hit
So if you plan to mess with this lady
play sincere or don't try it at all
because my bet will be on her standing
not even a ten count before a canvass fall
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Re: Oh No You Didn't!
Anonymous
9th May 2013 4:49pm
wow..a woman after my own heart, LOL
this is really well written, Mr. Jazz...well done, indeed!
this is really well written, Mr. Jazz...well done, indeed!
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re: Re: Oh No You Didn't!
10th May 2013 1:16am
Sometimes the "mama bear" mentality is hard to miss! Thanks, the closest I have come to in writing anything with a pre-write idea in mind.
Re: Oh No You Didn't!
9th May 2013 6:19pm
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10th May 2013 1:17am
Re: Oh No You Didn't!
Oh No You Didn't! Oh yes you did, write another Great piece Jazz!
Nice! xo
Nice! xo
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re: Re: Oh No You Didn't!
10th May 2013 1:18am
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10th May 2013 1:20am
Thanks, the subject was married for 22 years and has three boys, from age 17-24. Hopefully the write fits a mom who doesn't mess with fools.
Re: Oh No You Didn't!
10th May 2013 3:26pm
Having encountered a woman that fits this description,its hard to miss the point. Even more is the skill you displayed in putting this together,making it easier to carry one along. Thanks Jazz,nice write.
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10th May 2013 4:57pm
Re: Oh No You Didn't!
11th May 2013 2:32am
Tis woman sounds like a no BS Lady. Wish I learn that. Lol! You say you wrote it for someone you don't know? Doesn't feel that way. :)
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re: Re: Oh No You Didn't!
I think unconsciously pieces of my mom and maybe my sister in law, who share the same birth month are in the words. However I did it originally for a lady I met at the store. She challenged me to write something for her and I didn't want it to sound generic. Basically I took what she put in a profile. It was like less then two weeks ago when we first talked and haven't really had time to chat at any length, with her getting ready for proms plus a loved one who has terminal cancer. (in addition to all the other things moms do)
Re: Oh No You Didn't!
11th May 2013 5:16pm
Yeah screw La Gioconda to the wall and she will give you cement burns. Mind you I have known a few extant ones like that as well! [Husbands were builders] Nice write young man.
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re: Re: Oh No You Didn't!
11th May 2013 5:41pm
Thanks---having done a bit of coaching and with my brother making a career of it, it is also very easy to see the just how different physical play on the men side is from that of the women.
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12th May 2013 2:44pm
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13th May 2013 1:46pm