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the sequel to the day the clock stopped
her eyes are fixated on
the hands of the clock
on the wall
unlike her racing thoughts
time seems to have stopped
a feeling of loneliness
runs through her veins
as she wonders if
she has crossed over
the line to insanity
gripping her rosary
she begs for God's mercy
pleads for her salvation
things move in slow motion
as she realizes
her prayer was answered
she lifts herself up
and slips out of bed
ready now to face the world
the hands of the clock
on the wall
unlike her racing thoughts
time seems to have stopped
a feeling of loneliness
runs through her veins
as she wonders if
she has crossed over
the line to insanity
gripping her rosary
she begs for God's mercy
pleads for her salvation
things move in slow motion
as she realizes
her prayer was answered
she lifts herself up
and slips out of bed
ready now to face the world
Published 8th May 2013
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Anonymous
9th May 2013 1:22am
Everything fits together perfectly in the sequel, Faith. I like the comparison between "time seems to have stopped" & "things move in slow motion." Life can certainly seem/feel like that, sometimes. I Love the ending, in particular. When a person senses a healing - from whatever ailment - they are, indeed, "ready now to face the world." Excellent work & a pleasure to read both fine poems! :)
Carlene
Carlene
9th May 2013 5:03pm
Many thanks, Carlene. I appreiate your wonderful remarks so much. :)
Faith
Faith
9th May 2013 1:26am
This is really good because it takes the reader to a pace where almost everybody has been at one time or another in their life.. I know i sure have been!
Keep up the great and feeling work Faith!
Cheers!Scot.
Keep up the great and feeling work Faith!
Cheers!Scot.
9th May 2013 5:05pm
Thank you very much, Scot. I really appreciate what you have said. :)
Faith
Faith
9th May 2013 9:37am
I believe prayer acts the same way as affirmations, the belief, desire and will can be miraculous.
A great addition Faith. :)
A great addition Faith. :)
9th May 2013 5:04pm
9th May 2013 3:58pm
Really good work faith i always thought the first part could do with a sequel
great stuff as always dearest
Marcus
great stuff as always dearest
Marcus
9th May 2013 5:06pm
