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Seeing the red
Under a universe of scrunched-up ink-belittled papers,
I cling to the theory of expansion, wishing for red stars.
The chimes wail to glorify the god-knows-how-many-th hour passed.
Eyelids propped open with diesel soaked matchsticks
watch exhausted hallucinations play out their parts.
The figures live out tragedies, lighters in hand.
Although I clap, I don't call for encore.
They introduce themselves as the four humours,
sanguine, choleric, melancholic, and phlegmatic.
I'm in grave danger of melancholic overflow:
"Write it out" they murmured,
handing me a pen.
Eventually, I saw the red.
I cling to the theory of expansion, wishing for red stars.
The chimes wail to glorify the god-knows-how-many-th hour passed.
Eyelids propped open with diesel soaked matchsticks
watch exhausted hallucinations play out their parts.
The figures live out tragedies, lighters in hand.
Although I clap, I don't call for encore.
They introduce themselves as the four humours,
sanguine, choleric, melancholic, and phlegmatic.
I'm in grave danger of melancholic overflow:
"Write it out" they murmured,
handing me a pen.
Eventually, I saw the red.
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Re: Seeing the red
5th May 2013 6:31pm
Astounding! I'm glad you informed me of this poem, well written miss Scribbler :)
I especially like the line of "Although I clap, I don't call for encore"
xox
I especially like the line of "Although I clap, I don't call for encore"
xox
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6th May 2013 8:15am
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Anonymous
5th May 2013 6:44pm
Amazing write, the four humours, sometimes I think Im all of them, sometimes only one, or none....Much enjoyed this poem!
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6th May 2013 8:16am
Re: Seeing the red
5th May 2013 8:48pm
pure excellence written in Scribbler, this is the type o write I would fancy curled up in middle o the night perusing!!!
love it!!!
love it!!!
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6th May 2013 8:17am
Re: Seeing the red
Anonymous
5th May 2013 9:57pm
Brilliantly inked, Scribbler. Loved the read & these lines, in particular:
I'm in grave danger of melancholic overflow:
"Write it out" they murmured,
handing me a pen.
Eventually, I saw the red.
Superb work! :)
Carlene
I'm in grave danger of melancholic overflow:
"Write it out" they murmured,
handing me a pen.
Eventually, I saw the red.
Superb work! :)
Carlene
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6th May 2013 8:19am
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6th May 2013 8:23am
Exactly, Mr Vortex,
though I'm more of a fan of blue;
thank you kindly, for your comment :)
though I'm more of a fan of blue;
thank you kindly, for your comment :)
Re: Seeing the red
6th May 2013 8:19am
Write it out lovely Scribbler..this is a poignant poem written with genius..peace Crim
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Re: Seeing the red
Anonymous
6th May 2013 11:31am
Oh my gosh....what a image AWESOME!!!!!:)
Fires, red, chilled, exhausted imagination...and the four humours( thesaurus hehe ) wow!! I still find there's darkness though....hmmm.... and a little contradiction....
( making a fool of myself here hehe. )
Fires, red, chilled, exhausted imagination...and the four humours( thesaurus hehe ) wow!! I still find there's darkness though....hmmm.... and a little contradiction....
( making a fool of myself here hehe. )
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Anonymous
15th May 2013 7:07pm
I'm impressed with your ability to be original while staying relatable. The muse is not always easy.
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