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Like a Needle. Like a Nut.
Like a needle, he said;
The pain is in the first bite.
Short sting that never lasts.
Then, after penetration,
The healing, the pleasure,
Both in abundant measure.
Like a nut, he said;
What’s hidden inside
Is the sweetest!
What’s outside is pretty,
Lovely, behovely;
But what’s inside
Is the yummiest!
You understand?
Yes, I said. ‘Tis okay now.
But, Dad, added I,
Why, then, does mama often cry
When you do it with her?
The pain is in the first bite.
Short sting that never lasts.
Then, after penetration,
The healing, the pleasure,
Both in abundant measure.
Like a nut, he said;
What’s hidden inside
Is the sweetest!
What’s outside is pretty,
Lovely, behovely;
But what’s inside
Is the yummiest!
You understand?
Yes, I said. ‘Tis okay now.
But, Dad, added I,
Why, then, does mama often cry
When you do it with her?
Published 29th Apr 2013
| Edited 6th May 2013
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29th Apr 2013 12:43pm
29th Apr 2013 1:50pm
? My assumption is that you have left this up to individual interpretation, each person will read/understand something different.Interesting...
Red
Red
29th Apr 2013 1:56pm
They say that, in literature, what the audience usually interprets from an author's work most of the time he never intended. Anything can go, it is evinced by the work.
29th Apr 2013 1:56pm
Very well written- that twist at the end was powerful, and extremely unexpected.
29th Apr 2013 1:59pm
29th Apr 2013 2:13pm
Excellent experiment Demo, inquisitive mind indeed!!!
a wonderful write!!!
a wonderful write!!!
29th Apr 2013 2:26pm
Thanks, Soul. For finding time to read and comment. You are very encouraging.
29th Apr 2013 4:10pm
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Anonymous
29th Apr 2013 7:24pm
nice experimental write
29th Apr 2013 7:40pm
30th Apr 2013 7:20am
The title definitely caught my attention from the start, especially in the dark category. Cleverly done!:) xo
30th Apr 2013 9:55am
7th May 2013 10:23pm
Experiments always taught me to never assume an outcome....I was left wondering from this wonderfully written imaginative dark poem. Excellent!
G
G
8th May 2013 11:31am
Cheeky...but it is the mind that corrupts the word and not the converse. Funny and enjoyable read.
8th May 2013 3:52pm
