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Tip Of The Tongue
She barely makes a sound
effortlessly enters the room
she is the breeze ever refreshing
I start to speak but can't
it is on the tip of my tongue
Unwinding from a day's stresses
the will that reinforces less certain creatures
is unguarded, less dubious of the surroundings
I tell her what I am thinking
yet stop because the word is on the tip of my tongue
She caresses and smooths the impressions
made by the day
not certain if my selfish demands should be voiced
the naughty nature of a beast starved
just on the tip of my tongue
As if a mystic she redirects the caressing
to my anatomy, what a healing sensation
as if her energy is renewed
finger from her honey region to mine
examining the tip of my tongue
South and north, north and south
either direction feels divine
and mutual contentment, party on
for she loves being on the tip of my tongue!
effortlessly enters the room
she is the breeze ever refreshing
I start to speak but can't
it is on the tip of my tongue
Unwinding from a day's stresses
the will that reinforces less certain creatures
is unguarded, less dubious of the surroundings
I tell her what I am thinking
yet stop because the word is on the tip of my tongue
She caresses and smooths the impressions
made by the day
not certain if my selfish demands should be voiced
the naughty nature of a beast starved
just on the tip of my tongue
As if a mystic she redirects the caressing
to my anatomy, what a healing sensation
as if her energy is renewed
finger from her honey region to mine
examining the tip of my tongue
South and north, north and south
either direction feels divine
and mutual contentment, party on
for she loves being on the tip of my tongue!
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27th Apr 2013 6:34am
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27th Apr 2013 6:45am
Thanks: the funny thing about this is my original intent was about a press conference in which a state department spokeswoman sounded like she had something she really wanted to say but just couldn't about first Syria and then the investigation into the Boston bombings.
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27th Apr 2013 7:50am
You are so sexy with a pen sir!
"As if a mystic she redirects the caressing
to my anatomy, what a healing sensation
as if her energy is renewed" <--smh.....LOVE!
"As if a mystic she redirects the caressing
to my anatomy, what a healing sensation
as if her energy is renewed" <--smh.....LOVE!
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28th Apr 2013 1:15am
Thanks---I guess the challenge is to make sure the pen doesn't run out of ink!
Re: Tip Of The Tongue
27th Apr 2013 2:53pm
What I love most about your writing is how you make it so effortless to read and discern. You are easy with the pen.
The erotic nature of this poem is not bare, or overly bold; you are careful with your words; yet the message still hits home with a rare profundity and irrepressible satisfaction.
Good work, Jazzmanor!
The erotic nature of this poem is not bare, or overly bold; you are careful with your words; yet the message still hits home with a rare profundity and irrepressible satisfaction.
Good work, Jazzmanor!
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28th Apr 2013 1:28am
Well thanks for the comment---not really sure about being careful. If so it isn't planned. Loving music my tendency is to create a consistent rhyme scheme- however as we all know, sometimes rhyming doesn't work. I am probably the worst at proof reading, which is why often I will send a first draft of something to a fellow writer before publishing.
I deeply appreciate you taking some time to construct such a thoughtful comment!
I deeply appreciate you taking some time to construct such a thoughtful comment!
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28th Apr 2013 3:55am
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29th Apr 2013 00:39am
Spoken like a "connoisseur" of fine pearls ; )
Elegantly juxtapositioned on the "tip of the tongue"
Elegantly juxtapositioned on the "tip of the tongue"
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re: Re: Tip Of The Tongue
29th Apr 2013 1:30am
Thanks---as you well know pearls aren't as easy to find as many people think.
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30th Apr 2013 8:31pm
absolutely gorgeous.. this is sexy yet endearing honest yet dreamlike and witty and clever combined ...loved it tyvm syn
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