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.:ex-Rose:.
she abused, used
used to be a rose, full bloom...now blown
now, un-grown
you know that's how it goes
when the funk between the toes creeps out
with the undertones now being fully grown
they leaps out
polished yet nailed; bad it smelled
reflections of that hell
that inevitable withering on the vine
scorched
and the mind races
gone on towards it's…voided conclusion
the scorn of it's own thorns
can't make restitution and the pricks
they’ve taken advantage
its a disadvantage being yesterday's favorite fragrance
now perceived as a vagrant
a rose
by any other name
certainly becomes still.
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photo: Elisaveta S
Published 26th Apr 2013
| Edited 30th Apr 2013
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26th Apr 2013 12:59pm
26th Apr 2013 6:05pm
Anonymous
26th Apr 2013 8:46pm
This is poetic. . .sigh. . .
27th Apr 2013 1:37am
27th Apr 2013 11:19pm
wah wah!
now that is succinctly beautiful if there is something so.
you're stealing places... though something might replace this in the future...
bcuz im totally land and water about this lol.
now that is succinctly beautiful if there is something so.
you're stealing places... though something might replace this in the future...
bcuz im totally land and water about this lol.
28th Apr 2013 2:12pm
28th Apr 2013 00:16am
Well done poem. You certainly follow your image (metaphors) consistently. I especially like the line: "its a disadventage being yesterday's favorite fragrance . . ." remember the it's instead of "its." Ok? You are a remarkable poet who has a story to tell and sticks to the story without digressing. Remarkable job.
28th Apr 2013 2:18pm
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Hey marcella.. appreciate the compliment. I'll try to remember to keep those itz separate too! lol
thanks for the feed
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Hey marcella.. appreciate the compliment. I'll try to remember to keep those itz separate too! lol
thanks for the feed
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8th May 2013 4:35pm
a rose
by any other name
certainly becomes still.
Damn K.
No matter the desecent, they ascend into our consciousness, and always remain a bloom to some degree.
Life can disfigure delicacy, turn the most sanctimonious angels into shadows clad in the abscence of light.
its not darkness, its more like death.
That stillness at the end was very much felt.
by any other name
certainly becomes still.
Damn K.
No matter the desecent, they ascend into our consciousness, and always remain a bloom to some degree.
Life can disfigure delicacy, turn the most sanctimonious angels into shadows clad in the abscence of light.
its not darkness, its more like death.
That stillness at the end was very much felt.
8th May 2013 6:30pm
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ha. Dr. M.
So winnerfull to see & read your comments again. seriously
Your take is always so provocative
So interesting.. more often than not hitting on
what I've tried to convey
thank u
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ha. Dr. M.
So winnerfull to see & read your comments again. seriously
Your take is always so provocative
So interesting.. more often than not hitting on
what I've tried to convey
thank u
.
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