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Autumn Haiku
Autumn leaves
and squirrel's nuts
- autumnal paradise
sea of fallen leaves
two hands holding each other
- dreams fulfilled
a promise
down the autumnal path
- I'll meet you there
and squirrel's nuts
- autumnal paradise
sea of fallen leaves
two hands holding each other
- dreams fulfilled
a promise
down the autumnal path
- I'll meet you there
Published 10th Oct 2010
| Edited 11th Oct 2010
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10th Oct 2010 10:38pm
10th Oct 2010 10:46pm
11th Oct 2010 1:08pm
The first Haiku reminds me of a very popular song in my language, a chart-buster.Soulfully romantic.
Anonymous
11th Oct 2010 1:37pm
I'd recommend changing the "2" to "two," but that's purely subjective. Smashing stuff, Opheliac. As I said to you before, the third one is the best; so mysterious and romantic and lovely.
11th Oct 2010 6:24pm
i appreciate your opinion and i would change it directly!
thank you for the comment it encourages me even more to write haiku :)
