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Brought to light
Eyes stapled to the wall, blots of colour sheen over
my focus in a bitter display of mechanical philosophies.
Questions revive in the springtime, enveloped in dust.
The hollow hunt for answers grinds to life once more,
rusted cogs pressured into movement by obligation.
Mind whirling into paradoxes, I struggle with tangled
webs of knotted threads that squirm in their hast
to be set free. Each one leads to understanding.
Sleep is both a curse and a blessing,
neon bolts through my veins.
Lips tremble at the taste of freedom of thought,
the shackles around frontal lobes breaking.
Irises contract with the sudden burst of light;
in this fragile skeleton with my blood running weak,
I've never felt this powerful.
In the spring, all is brought to light.
Entered in 'The winds of change' competition.
my focus in a bitter display of mechanical philosophies.
Questions revive in the springtime, enveloped in dust.
The hollow hunt for answers grinds to life once more,
rusted cogs pressured into movement by obligation.
Mind whirling into paradoxes, I struggle with tangled
webs of knotted threads that squirm in their hast
to be set free. Each one leads to understanding.
Sleep is both a curse and a blessing,
neon bolts through my veins.
Lips tremble at the taste of freedom of thought,
the shackles around frontal lobes breaking.
Irises contract with the sudden burst of light;
in this fragile skeleton with my blood running weak,
I've never felt this powerful.
In the spring, all is brought to light.
Entered in 'The winds of change' competition.
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Re: Brought to light
23rd Apr 2013 10:05pm
A thinking write indeed Dear Scribbler:)
Your poems carry much walkabout!!!
Your poems carry much walkabout!!!
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re: Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 5:52am
Re: Brought to light
23rd Apr 2013 10:56pm
nice scribbs. the second stanza is def my favorite but still consistent here throughout.
well done mam...
well done mam...
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Re: Brought to light
23rd Apr 2013 11:50pm
This is an amazing piece scribbler. It's odd how profound epiphanies come and go as such. There is so much I can relate to in this poem , that I don't even know where to begin. All three verses have so much insightful ,and serene content. Thanks for the read dude.
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re: Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 5:53am
Re: Brought to light
Anonymous
24th Apr 2013 00:01am
Love these lines, in particular:
The hollow hunt for answers grinds to life once more,
rusted cogs pressured into movement by obligation.
Lips tremble at the taste of freedom of thought,
Good title, finishing lines & enjoyed the read, Scribbler! :)
Carlene
The hollow hunt for answers grinds to life once more,
rusted cogs pressured into movement by obligation.
Lips tremble at the taste of freedom of thought,
Good title, finishing lines & enjoyed the read, Scribbler! :)
Carlene
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re: Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 5:54am
Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 2:43am
"Mind whirling into paradoxes, I struggle with tangled
webs of knotted threads that squirm in their hast
to be set free." Loved that part!
webs of knotted threads that squirm in their hast
to be set free." Loved that part!
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re: Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 5:56am
Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 3:28am
Awe-inspiring write! Sublime!
Your ink is so captivating to me!
No favorite lines because the entire poem was Incredible!:)
Pen Respect~
Your ink is so captivating to me!
No favorite lines because the entire poem was Incredible!:)
Pen Respect~
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re: Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 5:57am
Re: Brought to light
Anonymous
24th Apr 2013 10:04am
Indeed, Scribbler! In spring one feels so much vital new energy floating through your whole system...Great poem, much enjoyed, as always!
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re: Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 3:23pm
Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 3:28pm
A provocative competition piece. As ever, you present a snapshot of vivid imagery with your words.
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24th Apr 2013 3:39pm
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re: Re: Brought to light
24th Apr 2013 5:31pm
Re: Brought to light
Anonymous
24th Apr 2013 10:37pm
Well I've read this piece more than twice and it gets better every time I read it. You described a trip/trance with so much depth.... very liberating and free on the last paragraph..... truly felt it.
Time for a hit lol
Time for a hit lol
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Re: Brought to light
26th Apr 2013 00:04am
re: Re: Brought to light
27th Apr 2013 9:38pm
Re: Brought to light
27th Apr 2013 7:03pm
This is absolutely astonishing Miss Scribbler, it appears you're famous on this site :) goodluck with whatever competition you enter/win, as i know this has to win! :3
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re: Re: Brought to light
27th Apr 2013 9:39pm
Re: Brought to light
27th Apr 2013 9:40pm
Lovely Scribbler i'm sorry I missed this one..it is stunningly beautiful..peace Crim :)
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re: Re: Brought to light
27th Apr 2013 9:42pm
Thank you, Crim.
I'm catching up on entry's now,
I seem to miss thousands :)
I'm catching up on entry's now,
I seem to miss thousands :)
Re: Brought to light
28th Apr 2013 6:18am
Re: Brought to light
29th Apr 2013 1:03am
You stole this idea from one of my poems, you did a better job with it, but I'm still calling you a thife!
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re: Re: Brought to light
29th Apr 2013 4:08pm
A thife, huh? That sounds terrifying :)
Feel free to send me a link to it,
I'm pretty sure I haven't read like this :)
Feel free to send me a link to it,
I'm pretty sure I haven't read like this :)