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It is not
the system
out there
which is wrong
it is
the system
within our thoughts
that destroys
the system
where we once
belonged
the system
out there
which is wrong
it is
the system
within our thoughts
that destroys
the system
where we once
belonged
Published 20th Apr 2013
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20th Apr 2013 6:34pm
hello from a newcomer. all i want to say is wow. concise, bang on, passionate. really enjoyed it.
20th Apr 2013 7:20pm
4th Dec 2014 7:09pm
That makes sense, though I want more detail. I want to know more. I am pretty sure you wanted the poem this condensed but I would love to see more, if you know what I mean.
Great write,
Jaimee-Leigh
Great write,
Jaimee-Leigh
5th Dec 2014 10:38am
