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The mourning dew turns to rain
From ashes spread we rise again
The sun has cast an evening shade
Our mortal life will never fade
This distant pang of subtle defeat
The end of light -the death of conceit
Darkness greets with a neutral stain
A blackened void where purity reigns
Spoiled innocence from our first scar
The curse of sight stems from a star
The mourning dew turns to rain
From ashes spread we rise again
From ashes spread we rise again
The sun has cast an evening shade
Our mortal life will never fade
This distant pang of subtle defeat
The end of light -the death of conceit
Darkness greets with a neutral stain
A blackened void where purity reigns
Spoiled innocence from our first scar
The curse of sight stems from a star
The mourning dew turns to rain
From ashes spread we rise again
Published 16th Apr 2013
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16th Apr 2013 10:20am
16th Apr 2013 9:06pm
This distant pang of subtle defeat
The end of light -the death of conceit
Darkness greets with a neutral stain
A blackened void where purity reigns
Breath-taking write, I can feel the rhythm
pulsing a steady beat. This poem has got life!
The end of light -the death of conceit
Darkness greets with a neutral stain
A blackened void where purity reigns
Breath-taking write, I can feel the rhythm
pulsing a steady beat. This poem has got life!
16th Apr 2013 10:15pm
Thank you both. The reoccurring lines to me while I was playing around on my guitar the other day, and I decided to write an entire song a few days ago. I'll have it posted later in the week if anyone would like to hear it. :)
17th Apr 2013 5:58am
24th May 2013 1:47am
12th Jun 2013 3:23pm
A piece of beautiful poetry which stands strong in the fields of rhyme for managing to take the reader along without the next word being the expected one. A triumph in writing term. Loved it ty syn
12th Jun 2013 6:45pm
Thank you kindly. I'm glad you didn't find my rhyming scheme to be cliche in any manner. This Poem has a very complex and deep theme that I don't think any human being could hope to grasp. Just ponder as I do . Cheers.
