Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 7:59pm
18th Jan 2025 7:59pm
spell on the air
Sadistic offerings my lust is peaking
salacious need moves with your energy
you love it when I cut you with my tongue
watch me work the whip
devious desires entertain
you're the object of my affections
little need to express myself
entertaining the dark
as we speak they are coming in with a driving force
with a pounding energy
that says enough said
I counter, I have something on my mind
cultivating sin my pink blush speaks for me
saying too much
it's your hard looks that stir me
and when I take note ...
salacious need moves with your energy
you love it when I cut you with my tongue
watch me work the whip
devious desires entertain
you're the object of my affections
little need to express myself
entertaining the dark
as we speak they are coming in with a driving force
with a pounding energy
that says enough said
I counter, I have something on my mind
cultivating sin my pink blush speaks for me
saying too much
it's your hard looks that stir me
and when I take note ...
#lust
63 reads
6 Comments
Baldwin
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 6:02pm
18th Jan 2025 6:02pm
Her Yes
Her yes
once said to me
so fervently
with promises
of heated yeses yet to come
and multiplied
are buried now within the past.
And yet,
it lies inside my memory
as song.
and still
despite my wish
my will,
a culling embering
once said to me
so fervently
with promises
of heated yeses yet to come
and multiplied
are buried now within the past.
And yet,
it lies inside my memory
as song.
and still
despite my wish
my will,
a culling embering
#memories
47 reads
0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 12:56pm
18th Jan 2025 12:56pm
She is my Getaway…..driver
She is my Getaway…..driver
She’s a pickpocket
Stole my heart from my locket
She seems so shady
But she gets me Baby
I’m a dark alleyway
She is my getaway…… driver
She is a bandit…but
When I spank her….she says
Do it harder….is that all you got
When I see her….i just freeze
Like my hand is caught in her cookie jar
She’s a jewel thief…..she gets my jewels
And is gone in a blink of an eye
She comes back for more
But my jewel is still in her socket
She’s the pirate of...
She’s a pickpocket
Stole my heart from my locket
She seems so shady
But she gets me Baby
I’m a dark alleyway
She is my getaway…… driver
She is a bandit…but
When I spank her….she says
Do it harder….is that all you got
When I see her….i just freeze
Like my hand is caught in her cookie jar
She’s a jewel thief…..she gets my jewels
And is gone in a blink of an eye
She comes back for more
But my jewel is still in her socket
She’s the pirate of...
#erotic
#love
#obsession
#passion
#seductive
54 reads
0 Comments
AverageJoe
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 12:25pm
18th Jan 2025 12:25pm
Confluence
As the dawn light's strands
Filter soft through the blinds
Past shadowed trees and over dusky fields
You
Quiet beautiful
Lay
Lost in the last of nighttimes dreaming
Unstained
By waking world's worries
As I drape my arm
Across all that gives my life meaning
Ambered moment
Fined grained
In the merge of light and dark
My view
Holding the warm beating heart of you
But a moment more
A moment more
Then to rise
Do you understand me so well
As deep I seek the truth of you
Veiled as...
Filter soft through the blinds
Past shadowed trees and over dusky fields
You
Quiet beautiful
Lay
Lost in the last of nighttimes dreaming
Unstained
By waking world's worries
As I drape my arm
Across all that gives my life meaning
Ambered moment
Fined grained
In the merge of light and dark
My view
Holding the warm beating heart of you
But a moment more
A moment more
Then to rise
Do you understand me so well
As deep I seek the truth of you
Veiled as...
#love
70 reads
6 Comments
Wordsmith
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 9:01am
18th Jan 2025 9:01am
Black Rose
Yes, she says...
She swears by the moon; the stars: the sea
Her love as endless;.... as eternity.
She paints her words... in colors so bold
Promises spun.... like threads of gold
She’d fight the storms; she’d face the night
Trade her shadows for his light...
But when the world catches a glimpse
The truth unfolds... the story limps.
And when you take it out to the open
You see her vows were softly spoken.
She only wants to be adored
To hear sweet words... like "You’re my reward."
Never chose him… oh no, not...
She swears by the moon; the stars: the sea
Her love as endless;.... as eternity.
She paints her words... in colors so bold
Promises spun.... like threads of gold
She’d fight the storms; she’d face the night
Trade her shadows for his light...
But when the world catches a glimpse
The truth unfolds... the story limps.
And when you take it out to the open
You see her vows were softly spoken.
She only wants to be adored
To hear sweet words... like "You’re my reward."
Never chose him… oh no, not...
#abuse
#FallingInLove
#relationships #UnrequitedLove
#relationships #UnrequitedLove
69 reads
3 Comments
Koulouri
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 5:30am
18th Jan 2025 5:30am
Folded Clothes
I picture such a vivid future for us,
my dear.
A place of my own,
made into our own.
I can see a whole life,
laid out on my bed.
It is neat and folded,
like the outfit I plan to wear tomorrow.
I want to take you with me.
I want to learn you.
I want to lay with you.
I want to share my life with you.
It scares me,
something so perfect.
Because nothing perfect,
ever lasts.
I want this to last.
I need it too.
I am not so strong.
I don't think I could try again.
The...
my dear.
A place of my own,
made into our own.
I can see a whole life,
laid out on my bed.
It is neat and folded,
like the outfit I plan to wear tomorrow.
I want to take you with me.
I want to learn you.
I want to lay with you.
I want to share my life with you.
It scares me,
something so perfect.
Because nothing perfect,
ever lasts.
I want this to last.
I need it too.
I am not so strong.
I don't think I could try again.
The...
#FallingInLove
#love
#lover
#relationships
#romantic
64 reads
0 Comments
Ljdynamic
Poem Published
18th Jan 2025 3:01am
18th Jan 2025 3:01am
Vanished in Your Void
Hit with splintered shards
cast from the piercing darkness
settled in your stare.
Invoking spells with hushed tones
that snake, coiling as shadows
with ardent effort.
It is neath this gaze
where my screams become silent
and I am no more.
cast from the piercing darkness
settled in your stare.
Invoking spells with hushed tones
that snake, coiling as shadows
with ardent effort.
It is neath this gaze
where my screams become silent
and I am no more.
#dark
#haiku
#relationships
13 reads
7 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 9:58pm
17th Jan 2025 9:58pm
plea
keening deep within
melodic pain plays quietly
the victim stirs
a casualty of fate
designed to fail in time
the body withers away
and inside I break
there is no reprieve
my delsuions carry me away
my heart can't face the news of today
thoughts darken then grow bright
let strength find me
give me succor in my time of need
I'm in shock and don't know how to cope
carried away on a river of tears
sighing within feelings like I might faint
my husband is my life
I'm no good on my own ...
melodic pain plays quietly
the victim stirs
a casualty of fate
designed to fail in time
the body withers away
and inside I break
there is no reprieve
my delsuions carry me away
my heart can't face the news of today
thoughts darken then grow bright
let strength find me
give me succor in my time of need
I'm in shock and don't know how to cope
carried away on a river of tears
sighing within feelings like I might faint
my husband is my life
I'm no good on my own ...
#grief
#husband
#love
79 reads
6 Comments
Casted_Runes
Mr Karswell
Mr Karswell
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 3:07pm
17th Jan 2025 3:07pm
Death of a Big Fish
for David Lynch
The strangeness inherent in you
was not disturbing, in the end,
not in a sense that prophesied flames, at least,
but opened up a strange vista,
one terrifying in Radcliffe’s vision
of what defines terror:
expanding your soul, not annihilating.
A woman in trouble. Wrapped in plastic.
Bipedal bunny rabbits in human clothes.
Dennis Hopper huffing gas.
Laura Dern with weird stretched-out smile.
Or LAX in brightest day.
The sentimental turned
to sinister. Black Lodge. Dwarf.
These painterly...
The strangeness inherent in you
was not disturbing, in the end,
not in a sense that prophesied flames, at least,
but opened up a strange vista,
one terrifying in Radcliffe’s vision
of what defines terror:
expanding your soul, not annihilating.
A woman in trouble. Wrapped in plastic.
Bipedal bunny rabbits in human clothes.
Dennis Hopper huffing gas.
Laura Dern with weird stretched-out smile.
Or LAX in brightest day.
The sentimental turned
to sinister. Black Lodge. Dwarf.
These painterly...
#admiration
#art
#LifeCycle #PopCulture
#LifeCycle #PopCulture
50 reads
2 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 2:03pm
17th Jan 2025 2:03pm
Keep it alive
Love, in its essence, is an eternal flame
burning bright through the corridors of time.
In the quiet moments it whispers secrets
shared between souls like the rustling of leaves.
It is the meeting of hearts, unspoken understanding.
A gentle touch that speaks louder than words.
Love transcends the physical, reaching into the depths
binding us together in an unbreakable bond.
It is the comfort in the storm, a refuge.
The silent strength that holds us when we falter.
In its presence we find our truest selves.
Reflected...
burning bright through the corridors of time.
In the quiet moments it whispers secrets
shared between souls like the rustling of leaves.
It is the meeting of hearts, unspoken understanding.
A gentle touch that speaks louder than words.
Love transcends the physical, reaching into the depths
binding us together in an unbreakable bond.
It is the comfort in the storm, a refuge.
The silent strength that holds us when we falter.
In its presence we find our truest selves.
Reflected...
#art
#dance
#happiness
#kindness
#love
82 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 11:39am
17th Jan 2025 11:39am
Imprisoned
When sorrow fills the void
I torment those who I adore
An homage for the living lost
I cannot hide anymore
I torment those who I adore
An homage for the living lost
I cannot hide anymore
#dark
#death
#FeelingLost
#love
#sadness
51 reads
10 Comments
Pete_25
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 8:07am
17th Jan 2025 8:07am
Interlace
Souls interlace
Flowering shoots
Allow me to taste
Those hidden fruits
Your heart an oasis
Lies within
Body embraces
Delicate skin
Senses transmit
In too deep
A perfect fit
This love unique
Flowering shoots
Allow me to taste
Those hidden fruits
Your heart an oasis
Lies within
Body embraces
Delicate skin
Senses transmit
In too deep
A perfect fit
This love unique
#emotions
#love
82 reads
12 Comments
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