I have been on here for a while now and have been wondering how good my poems are. So I'd like you to rate them for me please, I welcome all honest critique, feedback and advice you can give me that you think could help me become stronger as a writer. This would be very much appreciated.

~Julie~ (i_like_blue_eyes)

Well....they need work. Who are you reading? Who is your reader? What is it you feel seperates your work from other people on here writing on the same topics? Where in your poems do you create a picture in the reader's mind?

I would suggest you try to write without the word 'I' in your works...try to write something about all of us...

And, this type of writing...

"....miss each other sooo much
But I have only known you for a couple of days
I smile everytime I read your message they are soo sweet"

...is appalling. You need to find a writers way to ecplain the 'sooo' stuff to us. make us care, through relating an experience we can relate to...

My two cents.

[font=Verdana]I can only echo hemihead. What you've written so far are statements, not poetry. Art as I understand it is supposed to connect with us through how beautiful it us. Take this poem by Robert Frost:

Stopping By Woods on a Snowy Evening

Whose woods these are I think I know.
His house is in the village though;
He will not see me stopping here
To watch his woods fill up with snow.

My little horse must think it queer
To stop without a farmhouse near
Between the woods and frozen lake
The darkest evening of the year.

He gives his harness bells a shake
To ask if there is some mistake.
The only other sound's the sweep
Of easy wind and downy flake.

The woods are lovely, dark and deep.
But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.

The images - deep woods, snow, horse shaking harness bells - are clear; they tell a story which the reader feels deeply. Drawing out words like you did with "so" in the passage hemihead quoted doesn't show us anything. It creates no images, tells no story.
If you wish to connect with your readers then focus your work. Create short simple images which tell a clear story. Think of a moment or idea, like eating dinner, standing at a window, watching TV, or stopping by woods on a snowy evening as Frost did, then describe it without ever straying too far away from that one thing.

I wish they would put a 5 star rating for each poem on here, I would also like to know how good my poems are. I have tones of views but no likes or comments

yore poems R AWESOME
keep on truckin

Saralynn said:I wish they would put a 5 star rating for each poem on here, I would also like to know how good my poems are. I have tones of views but no likes or comments

it sounds like a good idea, but such a system is often brutally abused when it comes to unhappy people spitefully 1 Starring the poems of people they dislike.

Read poems and offer comments and you will receive reads with comments.

You can always submit a poem for critique in the Honestly Crafted Critique Group. Be sure to read some of the existing critiques to understand what Honest Critique consists of.

https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/groups/honestly-crafted-critique/discussion/

Keep writing like anything you need to exercise that poetry muscle ... things will fall into place easier and easier eventually ... I thought they were good though need a bit of polishing and care ... Bless and love ...

Have never read any of Your spills
(i guess now You'll be getting a ton of traffic, right?)

I am not in favor of star rating shit.  It will intimidate the shy writers
and it will make it even more difficult for me to get them and  the
newbies to be more active and spill..spill.......spill.

Have You joined the Poetry Medics Group to get feedback to improve?

Tallen said:Have never read any of Your spills
(i guess now You'll be getting a ton of traffic, right?)

I am not in favor of star rating shit.  It will intimidate the shy writers
and it will make it even more difficult for me to get them and  the
newbies to be more active and spill..spill.......spill.

Have You joined the Poetry Medics Group to get feedback to improve?


Tallen, you realize this thread is almost eight years old?  The poster hasn't been online here in two years.  Not complaining; just letting you know you probably won't get an answer.

Ahavati said:

Tallen, you realize this thread is almost eight years old?  The poster hasn't been online here in two years.

aaaah shucks  

I didn't pay attention
Don't worry - I didn't go and read any of her spills.
I figure if someone needs to be public like this to find out if what they're doing is worth doing
it's not really worth my time reading.

thanx for cluing me in  -- I'm embarrassed but inebriated and so not that red in the face.

Tallen said:

aaaah shucks  

I didn't pay attention
Don't worry - I didn't go and read any of her spills.
I figure if someone needs to be public like this to find out if what they're doing is worth doing
it's not really worth my time reading.

thanx for cluing me in  -- I'm embarrassed but inebriated and so not that red in the face.



hahaha. I edited to let you know I wasn't complaining - just wanted you to know you probably won't get an answer!

Ahavati said:

hahaha. I edited to let you know I wasn't complaining - just wanted you to know you probably won't get an answer!

In these forums
often I don't expect a comeback or comment
but I still bow to You and thank You gracious Sister