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Lord_Raven
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I am very curious as to , if what I write is any good, I know oddout I had some scrambles but for the rest... how are they? honest thoughts … lol be brutal or as blunt … I appreciate flat out truth... please and thanks

Tallen
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Maybe post some ink here:

https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/groups/poetry-medics/discussion/

and ask for the critique You seek

poet Anonymous

.(under construction).

Lord_Raven
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Haha , lol , thanks 🤣🤣🤣

Ingredients
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Emoji's aside I've looked through a couple of your poems and Free-Verse is one of the things I've come to realize is much more subjective than a rhymed piece. People will either resonate with your work or not, and if they don't... then the reasons why can fluctuate so hard because prose does not have the same foundations which rhyme do which you can work off of. Save for a few things. The theme, tone, and flow. If you feel like your work isn't getting as much attention as you believe it should I would advise looking at what you write about, how you write it, and how people read it.

Lord_Raven
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Thank you , now that gives me something to think about .... though would be nice with an example,  that way I can adjust accordingly

adagio
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I am very interested in knowing, how many people like "dark" in writing?

Bluevelvete
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adagio said:I am very interested in knowing, how many people like "dark" in writing?

You know me,
I'm a total lover of the 'darkness' ... I like the shadows.
They comfort me and you learn a lot from lurking and watching from afar

adagio
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I do my best lurking with a pen, filled with macabre ink.

Ricky-sJournals
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I’m trying to get as dark as other poets.
They get likes, I don’t.
Think my stuff is more singing
“Fuck all of you in auto tune.” lol

Timagination543
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From what I've glanced at, it seems that you are the subject of each of your poems. Count the times you mention the word "I," in each one. Is that good? Do you think maybe you could find other subjects to write about? I've noticed this in my own writing so I'm not critiquing, It's Just a thought.

Ricky-sJournals
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How many accounts do you want to be on?

adagio
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How many am I on?

Ricky-sJournals
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Nah, I was asking Tim, if he was responding to me lol

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Ricky-sJournals said:Nah, I was asking Tim, if he was responding to me lol I have one.

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