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How Much Should Critique Affect You?

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JohnnyBlaze said:

Never hurts to set an example that everyone can benefit from.

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/366667-the-narrowing/
that's quite true. so glad i'm not a mod any longer.

i've visited his two poems and left some advice, though given it in a more direct form applied only to the poem as a piece of writing as preferred to his own, abrasive style. there are some good elements to it but it's marred by poor punctuation choices and excessive wordage.

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As a general comment, I see poetry as artistic self-expression. I look for beauty, authenticity, freshness, simplicity, the unexpected. I'm not fond of showy language meant to impress.

I understand the commenter's opinion, who might associate big words/flowery language with style-over-substance - I myself am not very fond of that. It doesn't mean you weren't genuine in your writing or that it didn't have substance - everyone has their own style. And some people are more sensitive to "showy language" than others.

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Cool, you both rock.   ...you rock more, Butters.  when he gets back hes gonna be so happy and grateful to you both. proper Christmas miracle  stuff  going on here, well done

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lepperochan said:Cool, you both rock.   ...you rock more, Butters.  when he gets back hes gonna be so happy and grateful to you both. proper Christmas miracle  stuff  going on here, well done



Thanks!


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lepperochan said:Cool, you both rock.   ...you rock more, Butters.  when he gets back hes gonna be so happy and grateful to you both. proper Christmas miracle  stuff  going on here, well done *raises eyebrow

no, just giving him the benefit of the doubt for the moment as i can't decide if he's simply trolling, someone who believes his own writing way above its actual level, or somewhere on the autistic spectrum where he REALLY doesn't get it (the poems) and doesn't use the same filters as others when replying. probably a blend of the first two, but i'm open to possibilities.

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I’m.... amused...

I rate him 0 as a critic and about 5.5 (out of 10) as a troll. He overuses the words “pointless” and “tedious”

These are my favorites:

“Ahh pornography.Good to see its alive and well and living in poetry.There is nothing more tedious than writing pornography except pornography itself.Waste of my time”


“This is offensive.I hate the word "cuz".Its not English and should never be in a poem.To describe a person as a skinny bitch is not even funny by accident. Its just plain wrong”


Listen, a woman loves when you call her a “skinny bitch”. It means you thought she was skinny.

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"Judging from your moronic critique I think that nothing will make you a better writer"


That's what he thought of your critique., Blaze..




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Nothing justifies being rude when critiquing. This person is at least middle aged. No need to pamper a Bull.




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lepperochan said:"Judging from your moronic critique I think that nothing will make you a better writer"


That's what he thought of your critique., Blaze..





That's okay!

It was meant to be an example of a constructive critique for everyone to learn from.

:))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

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Magdalena said:Nothing justifies being rude when critiquing. This person is at least middle aged. No need to pamper a Bull.





i'm sure he already got a warning pm from a moderator when the blatantly rude comments were originally discovered many hours ago by a moderator.










I could be wrong.


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JohnnyBlaze said:

i'm sure he already got a warning pm from a moderator when the blatantly rude comments were originally discovered many hours ago.










I could be wrong.



He reminds me of that other guy who was the best ever writer on the planet. Waste of energy really.

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JohnnyBlaze said:

i'm sure he already got a warning pm from a moderator when the blatantly rude comments were originally discovered many hours ago by a moderator. could be wrong.



you're never wrong, Blaze. it's funny sometimes when you pretend you can be

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Rachel_Lauren said:I’m.... amused...
Listen, a woman loves when you call her a “skinny bitch”. It means you thought she was skinny.

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lepperochan said:

you're never wrong, Blaze. it's funny sometimes when you pretend you can be




You're beautiful. Thank you.


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lepperochan said:

you're never wrong, Blaze. it's funny sometimes when you pretend you can be


made me lol 😂

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