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My off the cuff.

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Anonymous said:<< post removed >>

My pleasure anytime thank you for reading
Yo/,No is Japanese for the Chinese Yin/ Yang
It's the balance between the Dom/ sub relationship

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Bluevelvete said:whimsy shines
winning the dark's devine
insightful pride
became
her truest guide
to peel back the
facade
revealing all the odd
under skins
of those biggest grins


Love this poetic sister🥀

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Ingredients said:

*Sigh* I'm not sure what I am supposed to tell you. Apparently I can't give a critique which is information which might help a fellow poet in this thread which is fuckin' dumb ass shit.

It flowed ok, but it made me feel as if your rhythm was not totally on point. I feel like a better choice of words using an understanding of flow could increase your ability? Specifically in one place I feel contains a word that rhymes with lame, rashad, and bins.


If you would kindly take back your rude criticism directed at  the rules to my thread I would appreciate
If I need to point it out I'm referring to your comment which stated that not being able to critique is "fucking dumb ass shit"

There is a reason which I really don't need to explain but I will
We post impromptu as Velvet said
We share our dark thoughts and rough draft pieces here
We are considered a family or fruit from the same tree  
To tell someone they should have used different words to convey their thoughts is not what we do here
This is a thread not a group

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Anonymous said:<< post removed >>

That's also one opinion of a Dom/sub dynamic. I agree you don't have to be in love with your Dominant. However I do not agree that being a submissive means that you cannot love your Dominant.

That entering into a relationship with an established Dominant with an understanding between the two of their similar wants and needs is not breaking some sort of an idea of how a Dom/s relationship should be. I know what works for me. Period. No one else.
There's no 'one way' no instruction manual.
If I prefer to develop a vanilla relationship with my Dom first and he's in agreement, and it leads to love then that's what I need.
I agree, that if you ONLY have the Dom/s dynamic occurring and that's it, you're not in a fully committed loving relationship with him, then projecting love into that dynamic is only asking for trouble.
My point= Submission Can Be Love.
The sub is a pillar of strength, who's personal choice to relinquish her control and willingly hand it over to her Dom is nothing more than herculean. It's a need, sure but it's also a desire to please and find a particular freedom. I have learned that I can only feel the intensity I need with a Dom who I'm extremely connected to. That I do indeed love. I don't believe there's one iota wrong with that either.
Just my opinion
I don't fault other's for theirs.
💜
B

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You constantly ignore the fact that I asked if they wanted me to and they said they had agreed to hear them.

I refuse to retract my truthful statements, I am following ideals handed down by you personally and will be voicing my opinions about them until you retract your even more previous statement where you inferred I was harassing one of our posters.

Despite pointing out fallacies in your argument you ignored me. I fail to see how you consider that to be very familial.

There is the offending post.

https://gyazo.com/559e6977eb3cd5c7e9178932813adcda

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Valeriyabeyond said:

Love this poetic sister🥀


💋🖤💋
Ty

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Bluevelvete said:

That's also one opinion of a Dom/sub dynamic. I agree you don't have to be in love with your Dominant. However I do not agree that being a submissive means that you cannot love your Dominant.

That entering into a relationship with an established Dominant with an understanding between the two of their similar wants and needs is not breaking some sort of an idea of how a Dom/s relationship should be. I know what works for me. Period. No one else.
There's no 'one way' no instruction manual.
If I prefer to develop a vanilla relationship with my Dom first and he's in agreement, and it leads to love then that's what I need.
I agree, that if you ONLY have the Dom/s dynamic occurring and that's it, you're not in a fully committed loving relationship with him, then projecting love into that dynamic is only asking for trouble.
My point= Submission Can Be Love.
The sub is a pillar of strength, who's personal choice to relinquish her control and willingly hand it over to her Dom is nothing more than herculean. It's a need, sure but it's also a desire to please and find a particular freedom. I have learned that I can only feel the intensity I need with a Dom who I'm extremely connected to. That I do indeed love. I don't believe there's one iota wrong with that either.
Just my opinion
I don't fault other's for theirs.
💜
B


I think we pretty much agree it's just hard to get our point across when we feel we have to defend our beliefs
I think our only difference would be I'm not a monogamous thinker and have been burnt by love so I do try to avoid it or deny it as an unhealthy way to protect myself

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Valeriyabeyond said:

I think we pretty much agree it's just hard to get our point across when we feel we have to defend our beliefs
I think our only difference would be I'm not a monogamous thinker and have been burnt by love so I do try to avoid it or deny it as an unhealthy way to protect myself


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and this reply too

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Anonymous said:<< post removed >>

Anytime
Much Love V

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Hot Mess

I was racked with distortion, the putrid
alleyways were
embossed with her indellible score, chiseled
into  brick and mortar
in my brain.

Her scent, a hint of stale Pall Mall and that
sweetness  that would
run down my chin.

She  peeled  back my facade  left me unsheathed drove me
to hardness.
My mast flew high
for her .
Without her I was a
hot flaccid mess

I had to regain some
sense of myself
dripping with memories
of the way she flowed through my veins  

I had to purge out,  
transfuse this methodical
madness, this state of
eagerness left me dumb struck

I could hear her whispers
the throaty groans  she would make when she
would  give in.
The outline of her
tight ass body
engraved onto my
eyelids.

Unable to shake the
feel of  her thick nipples caressing my bare skin
Like demons she flooded my ears engulfed my
mind into a soupy swamp

We were doomed in our
salacious spree
for wanton lust

Street life without authority
is what got her high.
I had fallen in love with
the impossible

Left to hold my bone
like an abandoned dog
in search of a master with one question left unanswered

Could we have been  
more than sloppy
wet sex

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Only the bare feet survive
as a shroud of night drips
weakening the eyes
screaming verses of I

Howling on death's carousel  
as hell's calliope steams
smoking the embers
of the devil's enema

Sired by the twilight
born of cloven womb
festering in the gobshite
of stringed bassoons

With the sweet chill of pale
moving across the earth's shell
only the bare feet survive
screaming verses of I







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adagio said:Only the bare feet survive
as a shroud of night drips
weakening the eyes
screaming verses of I

Howling on death's carousel  
as hell's calliope steams
smoking the embers
of the devil's enema

Sired by the twilight
born of cloven womb
festering in the gobshite
of stringed bassoons

With the sweet chill of pale
moving across the earth's shell
only the bare feet survive
screaming verses of I










Damn Adagio
Love your choice of words
🖤

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Thank you

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