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the5thRiddler said:“Fun Facts”

Sometimes, if I get a bit too worked up over something I see on DU
which causes me to drink tea excessively
I’ll sometimes have to tick
the essentials at the shop before pay-day
Anyway, Andy does take the piss
because I quite clearly say “Ricky”
but he puts Vicky in the book
so I call him Bilbo
although, he’s bald, I don’t care
he’s still short

Hilarious.

the5thRiddler
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Let’s hope no one holds a grudge towards you, for saying that.
Not me. Just saying it’s how it is with other hypodicks; because they don’t like me, you shouldn’t respond.

Timagination543
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So, how do you write?

Something I read on another site once stated: "Write well. In the end, good writing trumps all."
 
Has anyone ever advised you to re-word lines in your poem, making you feel uncomfortable? Do you write as you please or do you follow stringent methods that have become second nature to you?  
 
There are various reasons people sign up to free writing sites. Not everyone is concerned with rules like punctuation, meter, form, and other factors.    
 
How many just want to spill their unhappiness on the page?  
How many are loners who want to talk even if there's no answer?  
How many have their own reasons for writing the way they do and would rather not get suggestions from others?  
And how many wrote poems with obvious spelling errors and have still received favorable reviews?    
 
Would someone, intent on releasing their feelings in one sitting, void of revisions, perceive the fact that the rhythm is off in his/her poem? Notions and attitudes of what poetry should be, don't always pan out when browsing around the site.  
 
If you consider yourself a vehement spokesman for rules, happy to show results of having such knowledge...good on you. There are many similar-minded individuals who study poets and understand the structure and mechanisms behind what they write. They help keep the integrity of a long-standing art intact.  
 
However, there's no doubt you've seen many individuals who are not interested in such discipline. Formatting, metaphors, and grammar mean little when their main interest lies in emotions and expressing them in any way that avoids counting syllables, accents, lines or any method of study. Imagine then, offering suggestions under the assumption that they want to learn or be corrected. How determined do you think they'll be to correct any errors you point out?  
 
Intentions and assumptions have the potential to lead to unintended consequences. I learned this lesson when I offered advice plus another version of someone's poem I thought might give it more rhythm. I did this through a private message some time ago. I intended to help. I falsely assumed they would be grateful...I was wrong. They replied with an angry tone, uninterested in any future ideas I may offer.  
 
I was naive.  
 
Pointing out spelling mistakes in someone's title seems fine. But go farther than that without being asked and you run the risk of wasting your time. You cannot assume they've been waiting for someone to come along and solve their writing problems.  
 
Case in point. Have you ever seen the message "ignore the grammar and spelling" in the author's notes?  
Does that mean, I don't care about the technical side of writing, I just want to know if you liked my story?  
Does it mean, I'll learn the technical side after I know I affected people with my poem first?  
Does it mean, I'll learn all that grammar stuff later?  
And why is it written at the end and not the beginning as a warning to any unsuspecting reader?  
Despite this, some are able to get agreeable comments regardless of any errors.  
 
People who aspire to be good writers fill the site, I'm sure. And they don't mind critiques. They are willing to take advice without feeling insulted and may even desire the information they think will further their skills.    
 
What about those who assume they've written a good piece of poetry that's sure to be noticed, only to discover the opposite? The answer may lie in the fact that people don't know what to say in a review, or the writer didn't wait long enough before posting. Therefore, he/she may miss the mark and fall short.  
 
Many leave because they think they're no good. The lack of feedback is another reason.  
Would you like to hear someone say....Your metaphors are striking. I see symbolism in this piece, let me explain....?  
Would you rather hear....this is really good?  
Or would you be content to hear nothing at all?    
 
I think the majority of people want to hear good things about what they've written. Make no mistake about that. They want someone to enjoy, relate, or just expound on how much they like what they've read. Notice I said the majority. Some, simply don't care what others opinions on their writing is. They have their own reasons why. Sometimes they won't even respond. So be it. They may be content with no reviews.  
 
So how do you write?  
 
I say you should write the way you want. And if you're successful in getting noticed, perhaps you've found a niche in writing as well as a style that's all your own. If not, keep trying.  
But most of all, keep writing, don't forget to revise and check you spelling. :)
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People feeling numb
I’d have tried my best to come and slap ‘em
Give some sort of feeling back
it’s up to them if it’s gonna happen

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I’d prefer going to a church with black people
at least they’re more joyful when singing
and more passion when receipting scriptures
Go to a church full of white people it’s like
“fucking hell, who’s dog died?”

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“Ricky’s Therapy Sessions”

From what I’ve put up
it’d be interesting to see who knows
what about me and my life so far.
Nervous veterans wouldn’t step forward
and I’d only assume that
ignorance is bliss for their answer.
There’s living a quiet life
watching trash tv
and not participating in writing too much of that nonsense;
who’s then fading away more?
Sharing a paragraph or a quote by someone else
to belittle a person younger because you’re feeling small
not actually writing anything yourself
that’s a bitch move.

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They’ll have to find it first
for anything to be done about it
so for skating away and laughing
it’s gonna be so fast
So far, I’ve got 132 bars
It’s the only way I could grab their voice
to include it in my parody
Play their video and record as they’re talking

# my YouTube freestyle and my heads up on who not to bother with

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There really are people that just won’t
go away, no matter how many times you say no
I wrote some lines just for jokes
She knew I was going to HMV that morning
Put her underground album on show
that being titled “Panty Sniffer”
Thought the mother fucker really is crazy
next time sort of be smart
and be landing quicker
if she didn’t wear a parachute out of a plane

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At that particular time
to make sure no demons try and get through
for the whole witching-hour
I’m listening to the TeleTubbies theme tune
What can I do but not have a laugh too
because smart and gifted is Mathers Marshall
only ever had read one book in his life
which is L.L Cool J’s “I Make My Own Rules”
Every day for him really is a lazy day
read between the lines, nothing is there
I mean, he just has to say the craziest shit hoping someone takes the bait

# dipsy

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Embarrassing relationships in public


It was at Abington Park
that she stood ever so slightly out of a tree
shook her fist sideways at her boyfriend
“Are you calling me a wanker?”
“No. I’d have grasped your dick and made the movement under this shelter, you tosser.”
“Well, some other signal would have been better and although you might be a believer
Men aren’t fooking mind readers.”
“Forget it. You just killed the moment.”

PoetsRevenge
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A bathtub is one big shallow end,
Plus, you can see every glaring
defect through the water,
even your own skin cells.
It's not very cleansing
everything else floats
whilst you just sink..

the5thRiddler
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Some people get annoyed at companies randomly ringing
answer the call and tell them to take their number off their database
I don’t
for a few seconds just make sex noises and then hang up

That part of the female body is what I love the most
and they just happen to rhyme with “Ricky’s”
so although they’re on her body, they’re mine...beautiful titties

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the5thRiddler said:Let’s hope no one holds a grudge towards you, for saying that.
Not me. Just saying it’s how it is with other hypodicks; because they don’t like me, you shouldn’t respond.


Worry not bro... others are responsible for their own actions. I enjoy the write i express my view... knowing it's not gonna hurt anyone

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Breaking down long words
and have it rhyme with the amount of syllables for another word on the next line
no one knows how much I drive myself crazy with it
Is being a closet case wicked?
Supposed to be an ego boost if a man finds you attractive
regardless of not being bisexual
so ______________________
Please tell me why that line is missing

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The Good Nights Await Hotel
actually came from a nightmare
Actually driving down a motorway and seeing the grey building clear as day
So if you were me
I’d wear a coat before sleeping
because within these dreams you might catch a chill
Now for Thirteen Ghosts
I’m sure that competitor hurt the most
once I had the film
and that “fuck off” was actually a
“I can’t write back until I’ve taken a viagra pill.”
Taunts about Anna, doesn’t want to know how Reemiss feels
it being a mess and she doesn’t at all see my spill
claims I’m not a threat but won’t send me her address
out of fear of being killed
but why’d a serial killer be so open about it
Tired of morons

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