Point The errors In this pOem!
Anonymous
"amatuer scribble"
who are you?
its so easy to be a dismissive prick
and downgrade what other folk share
its difficult enough being honest
fuck you and your silver and gold star system
who the fuck are you to rate peoples observations and experiences.
give me a brown star.
be honest
who are you?
its so easy to be a dismissive prick
and downgrade what other folk share
its difficult enough being honest
fuck you and your silver and gold star system
who the fuck are you to rate peoples observations and experiences.
give me a brown star.
be honest
thebladeartist said:"amatuer scribble"
who are you?
its so easy to be a dismissive prick
and downgrade what other folk share
its difficult enough being honest
fuck you and your silver and gold star system
who the fuck are you to rate peoples observations and experiences.
give me a brown star.
be honest
mate, come back when you're sober!
who are you?
its so easy to be a dismissive prick
and downgrade what other folk share
its difficult enough being honest
fuck you and your silver and gold star system
who the fuck are you to rate peoples observations and experiences.
give me a brown star.
be honest
mate, come back when you're sober!
I've been fishing for that elusive fish rhyme, as I needed something to use with the thyme which is getting wasted in the pantry. May be people have mistaken the vegetarian cockatoo for Kea the New Zealand parrot which has taken a taste for meat and has become a predator hunting other birds etc. Again perception...reality!
Anonymous
I am relaxed and you are blatantly taking the piss out of other peoples work. dont tell me to chill out, I am very chilled. and unless you edit you original thread people will realise you were being blatantly dismissive about there shares.
its ok i saved it all i am a sad bastard.
like i said earlier i would respect you more if you stuck to your initial comments.
but your thread was a blatant downgrade of other folks work.
are you really the person to judge?
To be honest it really fucking annoys me when people take liberties and decide whoes words are worth somthing and sombody elses are irrelivent because they need a spellcheck.
so continue to take the piss about folks verse that unfortunatly does not fit into your paradigm.
verytiredbladeartist
its ok i saved it all i am a sad bastard.
like i said earlier i would respect you more if you stuck to your initial comments.
but your thread was a blatant downgrade of other folks work.
are you really the person to judge?
To be honest it really fucking annoys me when people take liberties and decide whoes words are worth somthing and sombody elses are irrelivent because they need a spellcheck.
so continue to take the piss about folks verse that unfortunatly does not fit into your paradigm.
verytiredbladeartist
there's no words for that kind of stupid. unless I'm gone blind, there's been no piss taking of poetry. all the previous rant is mind-numbingly obsolete.
the only judgement appears to be that of a guy who seems angered at the thought a person could actually wish improvement of their working with words..
the only judgement appears to be that of a guy who seems angered at the thought a person could actually wish improvement of their working with words..
thebladeartist said:I am relaxed and you are blatantly taking the piss out of other peoples work. dont tell me to chill out, I am very chilled. and unless you edit you original thread people will realise you were being blatantly dismissive about there shares.
its ok i saved it all i am a sad bastard.
like i said earlier i would respect you more if you stuck to your initial comments.
but your thread was a blatant downgrade of other folks work.
are you really the person to judge?
To be honest it really fucking annoys me when people take liberties and decide whoes words are worth somthing and sombody elses are irrelivent because they need a spellcheck.
so continue to take the piss about folks verse that unfortunatly does not fit into your paradigm.
verytiredbladeartist
I see you have an issue with the thread itself, none is forcing you to read it.
The point that this thread is about taking a piss out of what other's share is I find blatantly accusatory and wrong. Unfortunately it is not that. And more unfortunately it is your perspective that you see it that way. If you are really chilled and relaxed then go and read my response to you where I unreservedly apologised if it came across you that way.
You cannot force or impose on me your perspective and vice versa.
I see you have issues people denigrating other people's works/feelings which they express the way they know. I am with you 100%. Read my first statement in Author's note- "it is for friends who have asked for honest criticism and havent recieved"
None is shoving down anyone's throat the right way. It is for those who want it and for those who asked and didn't get it or those who want to join in reminding ourselves the common errors. If you're none of the above, then this does not apply to you. Has anyone held a blade at your throat to join in this convo?
I am neither diminished nor raised by your respecting or not respecting me. I am not a poet- keep it in for your records. I requested many a times not to make it personal either for you or me or anyone. You're barking up the wrong tree bro. You got right gripes but this even remotely, ain't the right thread for that. Why don't you start your own convo if you've got such strong views and have issues to discuss/express.
its ok i saved it all i am a sad bastard.
like i said earlier i would respect you more if you stuck to your initial comments.
but your thread was a blatant downgrade of other folks work.
are you really the person to judge?
To be honest it really fucking annoys me when people take liberties and decide whoes words are worth somthing and sombody elses are irrelivent because they need a spellcheck.
so continue to take the piss about folks verse that unfortunatly does not fit into your paradigm.
verytiredbladeartist
I see you have an issue with the thread itself, none is forcing you to read it.
The point that this thread is about taking a piss out of what other's share is I find blatantly accusatory and wrong. Unfortunately it is not that. And more unfortunately it is your perspective that you see it that way. If you are really chilled and relaxed then go and read my response to you where I unreservedly apologised if it came across you that way.
You cannot force or impose on me your perspective and vice versa.
I see you have issues people denigrating other people's works/feelings which they express the way they know. I am with you 100%. Read my first statement in Author's note- "it is for friends who have asked for honest criticism and havent recieved"
None is shoving down anyone's throat the right way. It is for those who want it and for those who asked and didn't get it or those who want to join in reminding ourselves the common errors. If you're none of the above, then this does not apply to you. Has anyone held a blade at your throat to join in this convo?
I am neither diminished nor raised by your respecting or not respecting me. I am not a poet- keep it in for your records. I requested many a times not to make it personal either for you or me or anyone. You're barking up the wrong tree bro. You got right gripes but this even remotely, ain't the right thread for that. Why don't you start your own convo if you've got such strong views and have issues to discuss/express.
lepperochan said:there's no words for that kind of stupid. unless I'm gone blind, there's been no piss taking of poetry. all the previous rant is mind-numbingly obsolete.
the only judgement appears to be that of a guy who seems angered at the thought a person could actually wish improvement of their working with words..
you left me speechless there Craic! [can I send you bromantic e-hugs]?
Thank You!
the only judgement appears to be that of a guy who seems angered at the thought a person could actually wish improvement of their working with words..
you left me speechless there Craic! [can I send you bromantic e-hugs]?
Thank You!
I am currently participating in a challenge in which in depth critique is involved. I encountered a rather simple poem that possessed an unnecessary comma making for a confusing statement.
Shit like this matters to writers who are trying to become better writers. Better writing results in poems that are read more than once because they were well crafted, rather than because they were a confusing mess
Shit like this matters to writers who are trying to become better writers. Better writing results in poems that are read more than once because they were well crafted, rather than because they were a confusing mess
some people like classical some people like thrash metal but both must be formed with all cells intact to be a functioning organism
my poetry personally is more akin to tumours in this respect but i do clip the fingernails growing out of the teeth
my poetry personally is more akin to tumours in this respect but i do clip the fingernails growing out of the teeth
Let's begin
with a grin off to a good start tbh
an excercise wouldn't of knowed w/o spellchecker but that is INCORRECT MY FREN
in criticize grammar thrown to the four corners for the sake of a rhyming couplet is not shakespeare, savvy?
The challenge is thrown
with ego much grown. inconsistent full stop
I dare you find a fault inconsistent prosody
not bringin' flow to halt with the toe of my boot i will
count them down
make me frown use ur capitals correctly or not @all
how many flaws?
inside ya claws? two question marks?? really?? antagonistic tho nice
shred it,rip it tear it apart *cough* comma *cough*
Ready, for post mortem *large cough expunging black cigarette bile* COMMAS FUCKIT FUCKYOU COMMAS* ALSO post-mortem is usually a compound word but since language is in entropy
in the name of art the elongated pause would be better suited before 'art' imho
all in all a fairly boring poem with some obviously deliberate errors chucked in, an unimpressive offering with little to no sentimental involvement (to ease the criticism)
thats what this thread is for you gowls have at it
with a grin off to a good start tbh
an excercise wouldn't of knowed w/o spellchecker but that is INCORRECT MY FREN
in criticize grammar thrown to the four corners for the sake of a rhyming couplet is not shakespeare, savvy?
The challenge is thrown
with ego much grown. inconsistent full stop
I dare you find a fault inconsistent prosody
not bringin' flow to halt with the toe of my boot i will
count them down
make me frown use ur capitals correctly or not @all
how many flaws?
inside ya claws? two question marks?? really?? antagonistic tho nice
shred it,rip it tear it apart *cough* comma *cough*
Ready, for post mortem *large cough expunging black cigarette bile* COMMAS FUCKIT FUCKYOU COMMAS* ALSO post-mortem is usually a compound word but since language is in entropy
in the name of art the elongated pause would be better suited before 'art' imho
all in all a fairly boring poem with some obviously deliberate errors chucked in, an unimpressive offering with little to no sentimental involvement (to ease the criticism)
