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what's your greatest weakness when writing poetry?

butters
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Ahavati said:What is this 'weakness' you speak of? I have no 'weakness', great or small!

Oh, wait, this isn't the narcissist thread, is it?  My bad. . .carry on.


poet Anonymous

I probably don't care enough about it to pursue edits and re-writes

I over use the same words and phrases

I often think I'm so clever with something and it makes me more guilty of over writing

I tend to use a hammer to craft everything when a scalpel would be a better tool even though it feels awkward and clumsy

Shutting me up is also an issue i go on and on and on...

Typo's appear frequently

I have no polish its either multicoloured vomit or illegible tripe....

I guess stringing words together in general is my greatest weakness

JohnnyBlaze
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Little Exercise

( After Elizabeth Bishop )              
               
             —for Clewless and those suffering anxiety                
               
Poison oak grows beautiful on the vine
its lush leaves inviting to the touch,
think of this as life, at times: biting.
 
Behind that velvet green lies a subtle itch—
its urushiol blood birthing blisters that will not last,
yet, stake their claim in pain nonetheless.
 
For everything there is something—
nature ensures that,  Calamine eases
the stinging of rash, Moringa a restless fever.
 
For everything there is something—
including that wasp’s nest expanding its hive
in your chest, the heart now a mangled roost;
 
your bloodstream, an angry swarm of drones
stampeding from all contact, seeking survival
in pocketed passages of isolated capillaries.
 
For everything there is something—
brown bag of L-theanine curbing hyperventilation
of your vascular organ, balancing blood pressure;
 
Passionflower hypnotizing nervousness into submission,
Lavender’s anti-inflammatory Shamans
sacredly shrouding fathoms of doubt with scent.
 
For everything there is something—
Nature being the conduit, soiled hands
embracing her thick trunk, bare feet
 
sinking into dirt and grass, breathing in time
with her natural algorithm, whispering,
“Think on this little exercise—repeat:
 
For everything there is something;
emotional uprisings are defeated by relief;
its war party poised to strike any given moment.”
             
~
Written by Ahavati
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butters said:
*slap*


Seriously.

It does not come as natural to me, even after 16 something years.

I have no problem with arranging words into rhythms or making use of their sounds ( consonance, assonance, alliteration, etc ) and using all this to encourage the reader into associating it with a personal experience ....

But to actually use words to paint the pictures I want to promote? Like Ahavati for example in her latest -

"For everything there is something—
including that wasp’s nest expanding its hive
in your chest, the heart now a mangled roost;

your bloodstream, an angry swarm of drones
stampeding from all contact, seeking survival
in pocketed passages of isolated capillaries."



Uhhh ... no. I still struggle.




Ahavati
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butters said:
*slap*


Indeed.

David_Macleod
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I am my own worst editor - not sure why when I am editing my own work it can sometimes be so poor - errors, typos etc; I suppose the only solution is to spend more time on edits and rewrites.

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Michael Parker
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Edit, edit, edit. I always read my own work and critique it so much that I will scrap great pieces soon followed by regret.  

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Michael Parker
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Sometimes I miss the you're and your, there to their, and so on. I miss them because I usually edit for clarification and flow trying to catch the grammar errors as I go along.  I read things approximately 10 times just to be sure but still to human is to error.

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