Poetry competition CLOSED 8th July 2017 6:53pm
WINNER
MadameLavender
MadameLavender
RUNNERS-UP:
David_Macleod
and Trixareforkids
It's a KNOCKOUT
Anonymous
2 1/2 hours until the deadline
Anonymous
Judging for this round will commence over the next 24 hours. Results and knockouts will be posted around 9pm GMT tomorrow (24th June)
Anonymous
Have you written it?
If it's ready to go I'll allow it, but if it needs time...nope lol
If it's ready to go I'll allow it, but if it needs time...nope lol
Anonymous
Judging hasn't been forgotten, just waiting on the final nod from another judge. Hang fire.
Anonymous
ROUND TWO RESULTS
Please give Whale a massive round of applause for continuing to help me with the judging process. The quality of entries was incredible. Thank you so much, guys.
Same as last time the marks here are out of 30, two judges awarding a maximum of 15 points each on a judging criteria:
MadameLavender - 25
Todski28 - 25
David_macleod - 25
0bs3ss3dp0ss3ss3d - 24
Oxymoronicme - 23
Gahddess_worship - 20
Trixareforkids - 20
Sadly leaving us in this round are these guys. Thank you so much for participating, you have made this an incredibly hard thing to judge! *applause*
Paperstains - 18
Dejure - 17
Lepperochan - 0 (non entry)
Naughtymouse - 0 (non entry)
Please give Whale a massive round of applause for continuing to help me with the judging process. The quality of entries was incredible. Thank you so much, guys.
Same as last time the marks here are out of 30, two judges awarding a maximum of 15 points each on a judging criteria:
MadameLavender - 25
Todski28 - 25
David_macleod - 25
0bs3ss3dp0ss3ss3d - 24
Oxymoronicme - 23
Gahddess_worship - 20
Trixareforkids - 20
Sadly leaving us in this round are these guys. Thank you so much for participating, you have made this an incredibly hard thing to judge! *applause*
Paperstains - 18
Dejure - 17
Lepperochan - 0 (non entry)
Naughtymouse - 0 (non entry)
That’s Why They Call Me….
I noticed you were in a hurry,
and I pondered
your fortune for
being so….
I can walk
in the shadows, you know;
would you like to
see how?
Come touch my hand, and
you’ll….
you’ll see into the room
behind my eyes.
I go there often, to
view the ocean channels where
my submarine once sliced
through dark waters near
Normandy.
They bombed us too, when
we arose from the currents—
and I inhaled their mustard gas,
but only enough
to cause the crackle when
I breathe.
The others weren’t so lucky.
I can walk in the shadows—
I’ve been there ever since.
The Army still feeds me, but
not the one that enlisted me, and
my metal jacket has become skin.
(Run in your pretty clothes—
pretend you don’t see, believe
the worst.
Hurry by,
hurry by
before he snatches your children, for
it’s really the missing ones, scratching
to get out –
rattle-breath, he eats them,
you know…..)
and the cancer keeps growing,
I spit
it out
in chunks; you
can call me “Aqualung,”
bum on the park bench,
just like the rest of them.
(Inspired by Jethro Tull's "Aqualung" https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UCMS-NJ7VxU )
I noticed you were in a hurry,
and I pondered
your fortune for
being so….
I can walk
in the shadows, you know;
would you like to
see how?
Come touch my hand, and
you’ll….
you’ll see into the room
behind my eyes.
I go there often, to
view the ocean channels where
my submarine once sliced
through dark waters near
Normandy.
They bombed us too, when
we arose from the currents—
and I inhaled their mustard gas,
but only enough
to cause the crackle when
I breathe.
The others weren’t so lucky.
I can walk in the shadows—
I’ve been there ever since.
The Army still feeds me, but
not the one that enlisted me, and
my metal jacket has become skin.
(Run in your pretty clothes—
pretend you don’t see, believe
the worst.
Hurry by,
hurry by
before he snatches your children, for
it’s really the missing ones, scratching
to get out –
rattle-breath, he eats them,
you know…..)
and the cancer keeps growing,
I spit
it out
in chunks; you
can call me “Aqualung,”
bum on the park bench,
just like the rest of them.
(Inspired by Jethro Tull's "Aqualung" https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UCMS-NJ7VxU )
Lunch Break
I noticed you were in a hurry
By the way you ate your lunch
Coleslaw, cheese and crackers
Red and green grapes in a bunch
It only took five minutes
For you to eat your lunch
Sat next to me on this here bench
I listened to your crunch
It’s not that I am nosey
I can see your diet is frugal
Lunch should be more substantial
They have recipes on Google
It is clear to see you reasons
You’re slim and watch your figure
You worry about your ass size
You don’t want it getting bigger
So beautiful to look at
Such a sexy wink and smile
Without really knowing it
You have the power to beguile
You have absolutely no idea
How you fed my erection
After all, you sat next to me
Not my normal, random selection
I fantasised about you
In that torture place
Scalpels and power tools
Cutting off your pretty face
You really haven’t a clue
Just how close you came
As I re-sheathed my blade
Your lucky day, I proclaim
Victims sure come easy
In this my favourite park
May we never meet again
Especially after it gets dark
I noticed you were in a hurry
By the way you ate your lunch
Coleslaw, cheese and crackers
Red and green grapes in a bunch
It only took five minutes
For you to eat your lunch
Sat next to me on this here bench
I listened to your crunch
It’s not that I am nosey
I can see your diet is frugal
Lunch should be more substantial
They have recipes on Google
It is clear to see you reasons
You’re slim and watch your figure
You worry about your ass size
You don’t want it getting bigger
So beautiful to look at
Such a sexy wink and smile
Without really knowing it
You have the power to beguile
You have absolutely no idea
How you fed my erection
After all, you sat next to me
Not my normal, random selection
I fantasised about you
In that torture place
Scalpels and power tools
Cutting off your pretty face
You really haven’t a clue
Just how close you came
As I re-sheathed my blade
Your lucky day, I proclaim
Victims sure come easy
In this my favourite park
May we never meet again
Especially after it gets dark
Anonymous
Just under 48 hours to the deadline folks!
Anonymous
24 hours until the deadline and 5 of you yet to enter...
Tick tock tick tock
Tick tock tick tock
Pink Pigtails
I noticed you were in a hurry
your bright hair bouncing
along side your down turned face
calling for the attention
you so obviously need
Thin frame shrouded
like mirrors at a funeral
covering the pain of seeing
the light from reflecting
off the scars of your
latest autopsy
I recognize you
little necromancer
defying death
crying for a semblance of life
before the rot spreads
and necessary pieces of you
fall away
I watch you approach
consider stopping you
or fighting my own decaying body
to stand and walk with you
talk with you
You look up from your baby doll shoes
our eyes meet in a heart stopping moment
of recognition
until you stumble in your rush
to put me behind you
I hold my tongue
as you squint over your shoulder at me
yes, take a good look boy
let my presence alone tell you
all I'm now too breathless to say
You will survive
it is not death you seek
merely
reincarnation
May she be
all that you imagine
I noticed you were in a hurry
your bright hair bouncing
along side your down turned face
calling for the attention
you so obviously need
Thin frame shrouded
like mirrors at a funeral
covering the pain of seeing
the light from reflecting
off the scars of your
latest autopsy
I recognize you
little necromancer
defying death
crying for a semblance of life
before the rot spreads
and necessary pieces of you
fall away
I watch you approach
consider stopping you
or fighting my own decaying body
to stand and walk with you
talk with you
You look up from your baby doll shoes
our eyes meet in a heart stopping moment
of recognition
until you stumble in your rush
to put me behind you
I hold my tongue
as you squint over your shoulder at me
yes, take a good look boy
let my presence alone tell you
all I'm now too breathless to say
You will survive
it is not death you seek
merely
reincarnation
May she be
all that you imagine
