Poetry competition CLOSED 2nd December 2014 11:06am
WINNER
HadesRising
HadesRising
RUNNERS-UP:
Quill-in-Heart
and RalfTheNose
MÅNE,LA LUNA,LADY MOON
Anonymous
It has been most interesting to see the results of the fellow poets I asked to assist.
THANK YOU FELLOW POETS
LADIES;
Jessica Jennifer Ashton (Kou-Indigo)
Yekaterina Mikhailov (-shadoe-)
Atakti
Pishashee
GENTS:
MysticStones
Jasper Silence
Case28
RESULTS
WINNER....HADES RISING
(Most chosen poem)
Runners up
TONY PENA
RALPH THE NOSE
Most fellow poets had great original comments,Id like to post a few
THANK YOU FELLOW POETS
LADIES;
Jessica Jennifer Ashton (Kou-Indigo)
Yekaterina Mikhailov (-shadoe-)
Atakti
Pishashee
GENTS:
MysticStones
Jasper Silence
Case28
RESULTS
WINNER....HADES RISING
(Most chosen poem)
Runners up
TONY PENA
RALPH THE NOSE
Most fellow poets had great original comments,Id like to post a few
Anonymous
Yekaterina wrote
1. hades ~
his poem was flawless. the narrative was wonderful & easy to follow, the imagery vivid thanks to rich language & personally, i love the almost victorian gothic feel to his entry.
2. uma ~
i adored how both macabre & beautiful imagery conflated in her piece. her vocabulary also leaves me in awe.
3. grace ~
not much needs to be said about a pagan themed tribute to the moon... they go hand & hand and grace did a beautiful job bringing together the Goddess, the elements and moon.
Anonymous
MYSTIC STONES wrote
1. “ Moonlit Rooms”
The poem demonstrated a new take on the moon. Less magical, more realistic. A way of looking at Lady Moon through a window but not just a framed of wood and glass but that of the stages in life. The first room gives you the birth, the childhood, the lullaby. The second room gives more of view of living life. The day to day steps, witnessing reality. The promising of what comes with life but all the time “the venetian blinds” , the slats of that blind letting in just what needs to be seen. The third room finding the near end to life. The last stage the remembrance of life and all that was or could have been, “ Through a thick pane of glass”
Nice imagery moves through the poem. Dividing the poem into 3 separate rooms makes the poem effective…makes the reader carry the new born thoughts on to the next room or stanza such as in life. At each window, in each room, her moon looks in just as , one can look out… each seeing the constant of life, her moon.
2. “Roaming Moon”
The poem brings on the mystic. The poem gives qualities to Lady Moon. Personifies Lady Moon as one would expect. The lines of the poem take the reader. Taking the reader on a journey, a private invited journey, as if Lady moon were the guide.“ She roamed where I could not…“ as if it were a journey forbidden yet for one moment the access the all knowing is at hand. The poem gives clues as to what is found on the journey. The idea of a treasure maybe a promise no matter how long the journey gives to “ an enigma with nothing to explain” and “ a captivating mystique” . Yet with all this wisdom of treasure, still the reader finds no understanding and will never be will never be privy to all that of Lady Moon.
The poem provides imagery that requires thought. The poem gives the reader emotion through the use of adjectives and descriptions.
The poem invokes the essence of Lady Moon.
3. Akh-Tamar (O’Tamar)
“Come to Me”… The beginning brings on a calling, as if a prayer. The poem brings on new imagery, “curious beams carved with the breeze”. The poem also provides that mystic of Lady Moon giving the reader the impossible “ blinded destiny“, all of the qualities of Lady Moon. The rhythm of the poem and the verses provide the elements of the prayer or a spell. The poem format gives to reason how Lady Moon is looked upon. She is asked to give. She is asked to help. She is asked to heal. Once again the all knowing of the moon and her powers. But at the same time she grants her power “ …icy silvery moon, indifferent to the cries of a broken heart”. Powers which are never fully understood. So words and prayer will always be offered up to the wonders of those powers. The poem engulfs the qualities of Lady Moon with each stanza read.
1. “ Moonlit Rooms”
The poem demonstrated a new take on the moon. Less magical, more realistic. A way of looking at Lady Moon through a window but not just a framed of wood and glass but that of the stages in life. The first room gives you the birth, the childhood, the lullaby. The second room gives more of view of living life. The day to day steps, witnessing reality. The promising of what comes with life but all the time “the venetian blinds” , the slats of that blind letting in just what needs to be seen. The third room finding the near end to life. The last stage the remembrance of life and all that was or could have been, “ Through a thick pane of glass”
Nice imagery moves through the poem. Dividing the poem into 3 separate rooms makes the poem effective…makes the reader carry the new born thoughts on to the next room or stanza such as in life. At each window, in each room, her moon looks in just as , one can look out… each seeing the constant of life, her moon.
2. “Roaming Moon”
The poem brings on the mystic. The poem gives qualities to Lady Moon. Personifies Lady Moon as one would expect. The lines of the poem take the reader. Taking the reader on a journey, a private invited journey, as if Lady moon were the guide.“ She roamed where I could not…“ as if it were a journey forbidden yet for one moment the access the all knowing is at hand. The poem gives clues as to what is found on the journey. The idea of a treasure maybe a promise no matter how long the journey gives to “ an enigma with nothing to explain” and “ a captivating mystique” . Yet with all this wisdom of treasure, still the reader finds no understanding and will never be will never be privy to all that of Lady Moon.
The poem provides imagery that requires thought. The poem gives the reader emotion through the use of adjectives and descriptions.
The poem invokes the essence of Lady Moon.
3. Akh-Tamar (O’Tamar)
“Come to Me”… The beginning brings on a calling, as if a prayer. The poem brings on new imagery, “curious beams carved with the breeze”. The poem also provides that mystic of Lady Moon giving the reader the impossible “ blinded destiny“, all of the qualities of Lady Moon. The rhythm of the poem and the verses provide the elements of the prayer or a spell. The poem format gives to reason how Lady Moon is looked upon. She is asked to give. She is asked to help. She is asked to heal. Once again the all knowing of the moon and her powers. But at the same time she grants her power “ …icy silvery moon, indifferent to the cries of a broken heart”. Powers which are never fully understood. So words and prayer will always be offered up to the wonders of those powers. The poem engulfs the qualities of Lady Moon with each stanza read.
Anonymous
CASE28 wrote
Roaming Moon
By Mikimoondancer: 1st place
Miki's poem is brilliant in concept and delivery. I love the way Miki has totally nailed the theme La Luna, Lady Moon, writing about her beauty, mystery and freedom to do as she pleased. There's a subtle metaphor too that the moon she describes comparative to a mother figure or perhaps reflective on ones life, a drifter, caring at times, but unemotional and disconnected and free to roam as she pleases. The subtlety and depth are the keys to this poem, it shows much restraint and great skill of the poet, leaving so much to the interpretation to the reader, yet clear enough to be a beautiful poem about the mystical moon.
The Wanderlust You Find
By Cape Noctem: 2nd place
Cape Noctem's poem has taken a unique approach to the challenge and used the metaphor of the orbiting moon and a traveler chasing love and life. I like the simplicity and positive vibe of the poem and the way he has focused on one quality of the moon to make his point. The poem has a nice flow and really loved the lines "not all who wander, should be considered lost", for me, that's a great message and sentiment, which is stated powerfully in a poem all about the wanderlust of the moon.
Blood moon
By CraicDealer: 3rd place
Craic's poem immediately stood out for me, the poem is powerful visually and well written. The opening stanza is captivating with it's imagery of the light of the moon forced through the branches, touching the bodies is so haunting. I like the darkness of the poem and the concept of the story has depth, in that the moon yields such power to influence the lunatics that sacrifice their children in her name, yet she is powerless to stop them. The chant to the ceremony was a cool touch too.
Roaming Moon
By Mikimoondancer: 1st place
Miki's poem is brilliant in concept and delivery. I love the way Miki has totally nailed the theme La Luna, Lady Moon, writing about her beauty, mystery and freedom to do as she pleased. There's a subtle metaphor too that the moon she describes comparative to a mother figure or perhaps reflective on ones life, a drifter, caring at times, but unemotional and disconnected and free to roam as she pleases. The subtlety and depth are the keys to this poem, it shows much restraint and great skill of the poet, leaving so much to the interpretation to the reader, yet clear enough to be a beautiful poem about the mystical moon.
The Wanderlust You Find
By Cape Noctem: 2nd place
Cape Noctem's poem has taken a unique approach to the challenge and used the metaphor of the orbiting moon and a traveler chasing love and life. I like the simplicity and positive vibe of the poem and the way he has focused on one quality of the moon to make his point. The poem has a nice flow and really loved the lines "not all who wander, should be considered lost", for me, that's a great message and sentiment, which is stated powerfully in a poem all about the wanderlust of the moon.
Blood moon
By CraicDealer: 3rd place
Craic's poem immediately stood out for me, the poem is powerful visually and well written. The opening stanza is captivating with it's imagery of the light of the moon forced through the branches, touching the bodies is so haunting. I like the darkness of the poem and the concept of the story has depth, in that the moon yields such power to influence the lunatics that sacrifice their children in her name, yet she is powerless to stop them. The chant to the ceremony was a cool touch too.
Anonymous
I have added these comments so that each of you can receive any credits given
ALL ASSISTANCE highly appreciated
bROTHERS AND SISTERS OF THE PALE FOREST
require now to your tents and your dreams
(jim morrison)
THANK YOU ALL
LE FAY
ALL ASSISTANCE highly appreciated
bROTHERS AND SISTERS OF THE PALE FOREST
require now to your tents and your dreams
(jim morrison)
THANK YOU ALL
LE FAY
Anonymous
Thanks for the comp, Fay
And my appreciation to the judges who helped
A big high five to those who commented on my poem, truly more than I expected
And to the winners, many congrats on the great pieces.
And my appreciation to the judges who helped
A big high five to those who commented on my poem, truly more than I expected
And to the winners, many congrats on the great pieces.
Anonymous
Thanks for a great comp Mourganna and for the opportunity to explore on something beyond the norm.
Much appreciation for the judges input and congratulations to all the winners.
Much appreciation for the judges input and congratulations to all the winners.
Anonymous
THANK YOU ALL,all participants...
It was not an easy choice,most people had their own approach to how they picked their favorites
It was not an easy choice,most people had their own approach to how they picked their favorites
Anonymous
phishashee
RalfTheNose
When I saw the haiku, I thought in no way could it compete with the fuller pieces. This piece in its simplicity is striking to say the least. It captured the moon in all its beauty as the silver light is encircled by the darkness; there are details, unsaid, in its movement across the night sky, and that same detail in force will raise the tide of the next line. Very nice. I Loved it. I couldn’t believe that a haiku was #1 with me, but there are the elements that spoke to play with the mind.
HadesRising, THE QUEEN OF NIGHT
It told a story that kept my attention gracefully throughout the poem. A tale of how the animal might see the moon in its primal belonging. It ranked # 2 with me. Beautifully thought through and nicely written.
“The moon sparkles and glows” Waterviolet
It’s in the natural flow of the poem; it’s pleasing to read and the details to follow are painted nicely with key words such as: Lights, Grasping, Shadows, Illuminated, & Lighting.
These words set the moon as the center piece. There are misspellings that might be intentional, I never know nowadays. I don’t understand intentional misspellings unless it can be taken another way and so “following” should be corrected, and as a personal preference; I like punctuation.
This is definitely one of my favorites, and although the poet is clawing a way to doom, it’s a lovely casting with beautiful potential. I don’t know why I’m picking it as # 3, I guess because I’m drawn to the perfect length and its potentiality; it really flows nicely.
Vee, Akh-Tamar
She did a great job on this piece in its entirety, and so I don’t want to seem like I’m picking on it, but my eye could not help but to pick out these lines:
[Come to me,
in the light of the bewitching,
A lullaby ascents,
in the stillness of the night;
the icy silvery moon, indifferent
to the cries of a broken heart.]
RalfTheNose
When I saw the haiku, I thought in no way could it compete with the fuller pieces. This piece in its simplicity is striking to say the least. It captured the moon in all its beauty as the silver light is encircled by the darkness; there are details, unsaid, in its movement across the night sky, and that same detail in force will raise the tide of the next line. Very nice. I Loved it. I couldn’t believe that a haiku was #1 with me, but there are the elements that spoke to play with the mind.
HadesRising, THE QUEEN OF NIGHT
It told a story that kept my attention gracefully throughout the poem. A tale of how the animal might see the moon in its primal belonging. It ranked # 2 with me. Beautifully thought through and nicely written.
“The moon sparkles and glows” Waterviolet
It’s in the natural flow of the poem; it’s pleasing to read and the details to follow are painted nicely with key words such as: Lights, Grasping, Shadows, Illuminated, & Lighting.
These words set the moon as the center piece. There are misspellings that might be intentional, I never know nowadays. I don’t understand intentional misspellings unless it can be taken another way and so “following” should be corrected, and as a personal preference; I like punctuation.
This is definitely one of my favorites, and although the poet is clawing a way to doom, it’s a lovely casting with beautiful potential. I don’t know why I’m picking it as # 3, I guess because I’m drawn to the perfect length and its potentiality; it really flows nicely.
Vee, Akh-Tamar
She did a great job on this piece in its entirety, and so I don’t want to seem like I’m picking on it, but my eye could not help but to pick out these lines:
[Come to me,
in the light of the bewitching,
A lullaby ascents,
in the stillness of the night;
the icy silvery moon, indifferent
to the cries of a broken heart.]
Anonymous
To the other poets,you all helped making the choice,I just posted the longest comments
I absolutely loved reading all the submissions to this competition. What a great prompt Miss La Faye. But I do have one concern, Hades really has been putting out some hot stuff as of late. His contribution to this challenge is an example. I'd have to conclude, that Hades is on fire, with creativity.
Someone please hose him down, before he burns DU to the ground!
Someone please hose him down, before he burns DU to the ground!
