Poetry competition CLOSED 26th August 2013 9:08am
WINNER
HadesRising
HadesRising
RUNNERS-UP:
Balefulmalevolence
and Carpe_Noctem
Oh My Angel
FishCake said:Wings white and pure
Sent down to lure
All of the demons
Wanting freedom
She came back
They didn't give a crap
And sent her away
Shooting all the way
She fell
She went straight to hell
Without time to confess
her mission was a success
Thats for entering fishcake, but please title your work
Sent down to lure
All of the demons
Wanting freedom
She came back
They didn't give a crap
And sent her away
Shooting all the way
She fell
She went straight to hell
Without time to confess
her mission was a success
Thats for entering fishcake, but please title your work
Cannaballester said:http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/93714-an-angel-misplaced/
Thanks for entering... But can you please post the poem on the thread itself
Thanks for entering... But can you please post the poem on the thread itself
It's kind of lengthy but I think you'll like it
UNDERNEATH THE MOURNING STAR
(THE TRADEGY OF GOD-CROSSED LOVERS)
I spied Faith sitting upon a rail.
Fair hair in the wind,
Watching the ships set sail.
Whispers from her wonder if
She’ll ever see me again,
As I sail off into the rift.
Gone to fight in God’s own war
Clad in celestial armor,
I go to break the door.
Of things so vile and beneath
Us, the holy army.
We will crush them under our feet.
In Heaven, God looked upon Faith.
And saw that without me,
She was but a wraith.
And sadness filled His heart.
Between the battles, I dream of her.
Sitting there so lonely,
Drawing her picture in the dirt.
Falling leaves remind me of the time
Of splendors and apples.
Before sin was a crime.
Here in His kingdom sat one so blind
To the love that shone
But then Faith was still mine.
A forbidden affair in His home.
In the heat of Battle I threw down their King.
Their morale was broken
And enemy horde felt the sting.
I proclaimed my victory for God’s glory
And headed for home
To Heaven, to tell the story.
Word spread to the Lord of my win
But He was full of envy
For in His house Faith and I sinned.
In His eyes there were many.
So He called Faith into the throne room,
Sat her down in comfort.
Then told her about my doom.
She wept upon the shoulder of the Lord.
But to him it was just
Another player knocked off the board.
There she stood on top of the stairs
And the air was so thick with despair.
Her stricken heart set to un-tune her,
And grief poured forth to consume her.
With one last pull of the heart strings
She cast herself from the spire
And the cold night air was lit up with fire.
God was then struck with a rage
And barred me from the chamber floor.
I was to be condemned in a cage
And I looked into the face of mistrust
Once filled with just, but nevermore.
Cast me, Father, as you cast her out!
Throw me from your heart!”
And thus, I lashed about.
“I have lost Faith to her doom!”
Them, I, The Morningstar
Cursed God from Heaven to distant moons.
And He said,
“Her pride for you kept her so fair.
Your death by my word led to despair.
I cast you out, into the dark.
Let the lash of her death leave a mark.”
And so I fell
Through fire and earth.
To rule beneath
A new rebirth.
And still a search
For where she burned.
I have looked afar,
From Hell to Earth.
I am still The Mourning Star.
UNDERNEATH THE MOURNING STAR
(THE TRADEGY OF GOD-CROSSED LOVERS)
I spied Faith sitting upon a rail.
Fair hair in the wind,
Watching the ships set sail.
Whispers from her wonder if
She’ll ever see me again,
As I sail off into the rift.
Gone to fight in God’s own war
Clad in celestial armor,
I go to break the door.
Of things so vile and beneath
Us, the holy army.
We will crush them under our feet.
In Heaven, God looked upon Faith.
And saw that without me,
She was but a wraith.
And sadness filled His heart.
Between the battles, I dream of her.
Sitting there so lonely,
Drawing her picture in the dirt.
Falling leaves remind me of the time
Of splendors and apples.
Before sin was a crime.
Here in His kingdom sat one so blind
To the love that shone
But then Faith was still mine.
A forbidden affair in His home.
In the heat of Battle I threw down their King.
Their morale was broken
And enemy horde felt the sting.
I proclaimed my victory for God’s glory
And headed for home
To Heaven, to tell the story.
Word spread to the Lord of my win
But He was full of envy
For in His house Faith and I sinned.
In His eyes there were many.
So He called Faith into the throne room,
Sat her down in comfort.
Then told her about my doom.
She wept upon the shoulder of the Lord.
But to him it was just
Another player knocked off the board.
There she stood on top of the stairs
And the air was so thick with despair.
Her stricken heart set to un-tune her,
And grief poured forth to consume her.
With one last pull of the heart strings
She cast herself from the spire
And the cold night air was lit up with fire.
God was then struck with a rage
And barred me from the chamber floor.
I was to be condemned in a cage
And I looked into the face of mistrust
Once filled with just, but nevermore.
Cast me, Father, as you cast her out!
Throw me from your heart!”
And thus, I lashed about.
“I have lost Faith to her doom!”
Them, I, The Morningstar
Cursed God from Heaven to distant moons.
And He said,
“Her pride for you kept her so fair.
Your death by my word led to despair.
I cast you out, into the dark.
Let the lash of her death leave a mark.”
And so I fell
Through fire and earth.
To rule beneath
A new rebirth.
And still a search
For where she burned.
I have looked afar,
From Hell to Earth.
I am still The Mourning Star.
deadwolf said:Man, maybe I'm high, or just a dork; However, I do not see an image there, just the rules, Course could just be drunk also... Does anyone else see what I am not seeing... o.0
I don't know why but it used to show.
but anyways here's the link for the picture.
===>> http://static.tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pub/images/Fallen_angel.jpg
I don't know why but it used to show.
but anyways here's the link for the picture.
===>> http://static.tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pub/images/Fallen_angel.jpg
Raped
Lover:
Oh My Angel
Your perfect downcast face
The world burns with your presence
This, my heart, is your place
Arise; raise your countenance
Oh My Beautiful Angel
Such woes have befallen you
I will heal the sorrow you keep
Inside, Outside, Forever True
The world will see and weep
Transcendence of time is yours
Beloved:
Such sorrow grows like a disease
Malignant it soars throughout all
It started as a seed
This is my end; this is my fall
You could never understand
My chalice has broke
A million fragments fly through space
Time will assist this choke
The grip of death in this place
I desire nothing more save grace
Lover:
My Heart, so you are
Broken, alone, confused
Attend to my words; please hear
Let this black rose be transfused
With perfect love
I see this demon
Entangles your being
Open this door to freedom
Let truth be seen
Fall into my embrace
Beloved:
Can I trust him?
Is such transformation possible?
Not of my own
Is this hatred permissible
I long for this death grip to die
My Lover, such as this is
I am enrobed with a curse
It stifles, all is amiss
Can I exit this moving hearse?
I long to be in your arms
-------------------------------
From Light she fell
Into Black abyss
Claws of pain
Wrapped in poison
Sank into her heart
Rampant it ran
Up, down, she fell into a trance
Of fire and smoke
A voice of soothing
A voice of cooling
Wafted in like a spring breeze
After the stillness of winter
“Oh my Angel”
It began to break
The clouds of darkness
Like the morning sun
Could hope dawn?
Would endless groping be done?
Seeking solace in memories passed
Can be a thing of the past
Healing can come
Healing will come
Listen closely
Hear your lovers cry
Those tears he weeps
Come from places where death
Has no grasp
And death itself may die
-------------------------------
“Oh, my Angel…”
Lover:
Oh My Angel
Your perfect downcast face
The world burns with your presence
This, my heart, is your place
Arise; raise your countenance
Oh My Beautiful Angel
Such woes have befallen you
I will heal the sorrow you keep
Inside, Outside, Forever True
The world will see and weep
Transcendence of time is yours
Beloved:
Such sorrow grows like a disease
Malignant it soars throughout all
It started as a seed
This is my end; this is my fall
You could never understand
My chalice has broke
A million fragments fly through space
Time will assist this choke
The grip of death in this place
I desire nothing more save grace
Lover:
My Heart, so you are
Broken, alone, confused
Attend to my words; please hear
Let this black rose be transfused
With perfect love
I see this demon
Entangles your being
Open this door to freedom
Let truth be seen
Fall into my embrace
Beloved:
Can I trust him?
Is such transformation possible?
Not of my own
Is this hatred permissible
I long for this death grip to die
My Lover, such as this is
I am enrobed with a curse
It stifles, all is amiss
Can I exit this moving hearse?
I long to be in your arms
-------------------------------
From Light she fell
Into Black abyss
Claws of pain
Wrapped in poison
Sank into her heart
Rampant it ran
Up, down, she fell into a trance
Of fire and smoke
A voice of soothing
A voice of cooling
Wafted in like a spring breeze
After the stillness of winter
“Oh my Angel”
It began to break
The clouds of darkness
Like the morning sun
Could hope dawn?
Would endless groping be done?
Seeking solace in memories passed
Can be a thing of the past
Healing can come
Healing will come
Listen closely
Hear your lovers cry
Those tears he weeps
Come from places where death
Has no grasp
And death itself may die
-------------------------------
“Oh, my Angel…”
A Fallen Angel There
I thought I saw Lucifer fall from the sky
God said it was time for him to go
He was disappointed that the angels didn't tell him goodbye
Placed eternal damnation on his soul
But that was kind of old
These days he's causing confusion
He's changed his name to satan but I call him the loser
No one can be higher than the Lord
I don't care if you try it
You'll reap the compensation for it
A fallen angel in the storm
Crashed down into the ground
What followed was the fire and a thunderous sound
Forever stuck dwelling under clouds
He hides among the crowds
The shadows on the wall
Apparently survived the fall
Abomination to us all
I knew I saw Lucifer fall from the sky
Disappointed that the angels didn't tell him goodbye
I thought I saw Lucifer fall from the sky
God said it was time for him to go
He was disappointed that the angels didn't tell him goodbye
Placed eternal damnation on his soul
But that was kind of old
These days he's causing confusion
He's changed his name to satan but I call him the loser
No one can be higher than the Lord
I don't care if you try it
You'll reap the compensation for it
A fallen angel in the storm
Crashed down into the ground
What followed was the fire and a thunderous sound
Forever stuck dwelling under clouds
He hides among the crowds
The shadows on the wall
Apparently survived the fall
Abomination to us all
I knew I saw Lucifer fall from the sky
Disappointed that the angels didn't tell him goodbye
Anonymous
"Pure Utopia"
(A Character Poem about a Fallen Angel)
On
gossamer-wings,
she flitted,
she floated,
told sweet-beautiful
stories about
eternal-paradise,
pearly gates,
sound judgment,
and just-rewards.
But,
deep down inside,
she really
hated herself
for telling
such Goddamned lies,
those delusions-of-grandeur tales.
So,
she punched a hole
through Heaven,
fell back to Earth
to let some leaven in,
singing to us mere mortals,
"Let the sinning begin,
this ain't no Hell,
it's pure utopia!"
(A Character Poem about a Fallen Angel)
On
gossamer-wings,
she flitted,
she floated,
told sweet-beautiful
stories about
eternal-paradise,
pearly gates,
sound judgment,
and just-rewards.
But,
deep down inside,
she really
hated herself
for telling
such Goddamned lies,
those delusions-of-grandeur tales.
So,
she punched a hole
through Heaven,
fell back to Earth
to let some leaven in,
singing to us mere mortals,
"Let the sinning begin,
this ain't no Hell,
it's pure utopia!"
All entries were absolutely fantastic, unfortunately they can be only one winner.
The winner for this challenge is
Hadesrising.
Congratulation, I really felt your poem, it explained to me.exactly what happened to that poor angel.
In other words, the.background story.
Runner-ups.
Carpe_Noctem.
Balefulmalevolence
Very well done every one!!!
I loved all entries.
Till the next comp.
(^,..,^}
Darker
The winner for this challenge is
Hadesrising.
Congratulation, I really felt your poem, it explained to me.exactly what happened to that poor angel.
In other words, the.background story.
Runner-ups.
Carpe_Noctem.
Balefulmalevolence
Very well done every one!!!
I loved all entries.
Till the next comp.
(^,..,^}
Darker
PsychicApocalypse said:[quote-219810-FishCake]Wings white and pure
Sent down to lure
All of the demons
Wanting freedom
She came back
They didn't give a crap
And sent her away
Shooting all the way
She fell
She went straight to hell
Without time to confess
her mission was a success
Thats for entering fishcake, but please title your work[/quote]
I did. I put it on the area that always says re: Re: something or other competition
It's called Shooting though, sorry.
Sent down to lure
All of the demons
Wanting freedom
She came back
They didn't give a crap
And sent her away
Shooting all the way
She fell
She went straight to hell
Without time to confess
her mission was a success
Thats for entering fishcake, but please title your work[/quote]
I did. I put it on the area that always says re: Re: something or other competition
It's called Shooting though, sorry.
