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Indie (Miss Indie)
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In Hindsight

poet Anonymous

Poetry Contest

Instructions below...

Prompt- When I met you, what I should have said was...

give me 50 words (give or take a few) based on that prompt

title your work

MAX 2 entries per writer

one week-be creative




Indie
Miss Indie
Tyrant of Words
Australia 34awards
Joined 3rd Sep 2011
Forum Posts: 3209

Tactfulness Required

When I met you, what I should have said was
Hello, instead of, Your fly’s undone
pointing out the pink lacy underwear
that I later found out was your girlfriends

Maybe then we could have been friends
instead of you being the man that wears pink lacy underwear
and me the accidental pervert that looked

poet Anonymous

Great work, Miss Indie-thank you for getting us going!

MadameLavender
Guardian of Shadows
United States 86awards
Joined 17th Feb 2013
Forum Posts: 5594

,,,

lonewolf00
Lost Thinker
United States
Joined 22nd June 2013
Forum Posts: 14

- sorry soul -

When I met you, what I should have
said was: "Goodbye" instead of "hello"

My life's a tragic
With no magic
Which drain
Into pain

I shouldn't have drag u
Into a sorrowful life
I'm a curse to be around
Misery is all I know
And that's all I will know

Page_Writer
Mad Girl
Thought Provoker
United States 19awards
Joined 25th Nov 2011
Forum Posts: 183

You Had Me At Hello

When I first met you, I wish I had said something.
But I just sat there and stared at you instead.
I didn't say anything because you were so different.
Than the usual people that speak to me.
You weren't putting me down.
Or making fun of me.
So I wish that I had said something witty.
Instead of just sitting there with a blank stare.
Too caught up my own sorrow and poetry.
To notice the sweet guy standing in front of me.
So I wish I had said anything.
Than there wouldn't have been pain.
And the tears and sorrows.
Than followed because I didn't ask your name.
And when we met again it would be on darker terms.
Me belonging to someone else.
But liking you all the same.
I wish I could play back to tears.
And the pain.
And I wish that I could go back to that day.
That we sat in the cafeteria.
And you talked me for the first time.
And instead of looking at you with my lack of trust.
I should have put my past feeling of other people aside.
Saw you for you.
And than instead of saying nothing.
I should've took the dive, into the unknown.
Because for some reason that I don't know.
You my dear, had me at hello.


It goes over the number of words. But I hope it's still okay.

poet Anonymous

"The Fall Still Stings"
http://2.bp.blogspot.com/-J8-VIzw5LIo/UBt5K8mYKOI/AAAAAAAABzU/xC5iDBpdvpI/s1600/0819_broken-heart-630x510.jpeg
When I first met you, I should have said,
I’m blind and not nice.
But, I pursued and pursued,
you gave and you gave,
harder and harder we moved in unison,
it was heaven.
Until I saw me
a shadow of myself
and now
you think me the latter.
The fall still stings,
‘tis true.

55 words.

Deathpuppy
Thought Provoker
United States 4awards
Joined 17th May 2013
Forum Posts: 306

How to should be

When I met you, what I should have said was...
My life has been a incline of Happiness. The problems with who I was I am proud to say were corrected. Feeling it was a healthy exercise to build my self-esteem. My belief was the prize at the end of this accomplishment would be the love of a great woman.

oldmanadeus
Lost Thinker
Canada 2awards
Joined 24th June 2013
Forum Posts: 31

RUN

When I met you what I should of said was run,
I'm too much for you to handle and you should not be exposed to a soul such as mine
But I didn't I stayed and never left your side,
I am too you as I have been to man for generations
That devil on your shoulder and the sword at your side.
When I met you what I should of said was... Run

kriticool
Fire of Insight
32awards
Joined 1st Nov 2011
Forum Posts: 596


.:Flash of Memory:.



when I met you,
what I should have said was..


“I’m so glad to finally meet you..
             my dreams & premonitions..
                    they just haven’t been able to cut it”


right then
maybe they both
could’ve remained there; me
sucking up to
honest remembrance

and you

with
that brilliant
flesh
of mammary




http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DxMkza1FE1o
   


poet Anonymous

Thank's everyone! The entries so far are wonderful-great reads :-)

Arcane_Scribe
Thought Provoker
United Kingdom 1awards
Joined 1st Mar 2013
Forum Posts: 205

When I first met you, I should have said,
You are an English rose set in the winters snow
a rare beauty surrounded by the bleak
You are beyond my dreams
Soft gentle and so sleek
Now looking back i just feel sorrow
for the only words to leave my lips
was hello..

Yudhajeet_Sinha_09
Yudi
Twisted Dreamer
India 2awards
Joined 3rd Apr 2013
Forum Posts: 107

              The Lust Stand

A lustre a little,impetuous a wind,
Vindictive to my sleep,my night queen.
Gleaming knife,golden edges sharp,
Thirsty you are too,
Desires,enigmatically tough.
Try I to cut myself,
But you never give up.
Misty lake gloryfying the night sky
Lusty blood o' mine,
slipping to flow inside!

poet Anonymous

Thank's to everyone so far-time left for a few more , if anyone is interested:-)

Carpe_Noctem
Tyrant of Words
Spain 8awards
Joined 3rd Mar 2013
Forum Posts: 2915





[/quote] Nothing to see here

When I met you, what I should have said was
You have very pretty eyes, I just melt
gazing deeply into your soul
how your smile brightens my day
I could have played it coy, winked and said hey
come here often?

What I should have said was...anything

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