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DaisyGrace
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Poetry Contest

Write a minimalist poem about goodbyes.
I have been reading many different short form poems lately and getting all up in my feelings with writing. Specifically, Iíve been writing lots of westernized haiku and tanka. I know. I know. Donít come at me with how the haiku and tanka I write arenít real haiku and tanka. I know. I just like the challenge of expressing big emotions with very tight constraints and the western version of those forms does that for me. Let me have my cake!

So I want to conscript you people to write some minimalist poetry about saying goodbye. Science tells us that when we are feeling melancholy/sad/depressed/like the world is ending that listening to melancholy music and taking in melancholy art helps us release dopamine and feel better. Some say itís because we can see other people as worse off than ourselves so we feel better. Some scientists say itís because of the perceived notion that melancholy art is more beautiful because we see ourselves in it. The fact of the matter is that when we experience art, we get a hit of dopamine from our brains. Regardless if the art is sad, happy, or just somewhere in between. And when we get a dopamine hit, we feel better.

Basically, I need you to help me get a dopamine fix! I want you write about saying goodbye. Goodbye to a love. Goodbye to a job. Goodbye to a pet. Just make it about goodbyes and make it gut wrenching!

Iím not going to make you write a westernized tanka (though you can if you want), but I am going to limit you to the 31 syllable count. A tanka has five lines where the syllable count goes 5/7/5/7/7. But I donít care how many lines you have, just write me a gut wrenching poem in only 31 syllables.

The challenge here is to stop being so wordy and pack all your emotion into a single bite.

The rules:


1. Write a bite sized poem about saying goodbye.
2. No more than three (3) poems per DUP persona.
3. All poems must be 31 syllables. I will be counting!
4. Letís keep it PG-13. Basically letís not get all porn-y up in here.
5. New poems only
6. No collaborations
7. Link your poems from your personal page into the comp. Do not copy and paste into the comp thread.
8. Titles do not count in the syllable count.

This will be judged by me!

Here's a handy dandy syllable counter if you need one:
https://syllablecounter.net/count

DaisyGrace
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Goodbyes like

i.
....feathers on the wind.
I never thought you a ghost,
but you slipped away.  
And all I can do is dream  
of all the words left unsaid.

ii.
....raw, bloodied knuckles.
I imagined you solid -
something substantial
able to hold on to me
until I was exhausted.

iii.
....a wine fading bruise.
I feel the affect of you
right here, in my chest.
Iíve pulled your words from my veins
and let them swirl down the drain.

****
a non-entry.

Bluevelvete
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Within

the sun says hello  
most days
tantalizing
with her solar heat
flaring †

until †
farewell  
your eclipse †
darkens within †

~searing †

Written by Bluevelvete
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Ahavati
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DaisyGrace said:[ . . . ]Donít come at me with how the haiku and tanka I write arenít real haiku and tanka. I know. I just like the challenge of expressing big emotions with very tight constraints and the western version of those forms does that for me. Let me have my cake!

Ain't nobody com'n at you with anything because you ADMIT they're westernized haiku and tanka! Big difference, Lady!

Looking forward to entering this!

Bluevelvete
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If I knew


 
birthday phone call
always mom
put you on
chat
caught up
crude joke
'snortel'
laughs howl
goodbyes
just for now....
 
final words
 
~heartbreaking cries~
  

†  
Written by Bluevelvete
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Bluevelvete
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Wounded light



.... this heart-shaped prism
reflects my wounded light
dawn's arms reach out
ówhispering
goodbyes to the night
now harsh darkness
yields...
  to shine so bright




 

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DaisyGrace
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Ahavati said:

Ain't nobody com'n at you with anything because you ADMIT they're westernized haiku and tanka! Big difference, Lady!

Looking forward to entering this!


Good! I look forward to your entries!

BlueVelvete, thanks for kicking us off with some tasty bites!

da_poetic-edifier
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Saying Goodbye

Saying goodbye to you hurt my soul
Was angry at GOD for whom he stole
Since then I haven't been whole
Perservering's my goal
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Eerie
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Surrogate

I have known your growth,
Every heel an asteroid  
Across the night sky,
Chasing your affinity,  
Bound to consanguinity.  
Written by Eerie
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LunaGreyhawk
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Death Song Saved to Voicemail

never said goodbye    
you called me that night, singing
happened so damned fast
I never answered the phone
your death song saved to voicemail †
Written by LunaGreyhawk
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Magnetron
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Goodby[t]es

 
Social distancing † †
in three easy steps: † † † †  
1) Unblock † †
2) Refollow † †
3) Message virus unplugging that motherfucker's ass † †  
† †  
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JetNikolai
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Goodbye.

One last word
and then you left

left the food on the counter
rotten and sour

left me in my matter
to swelter and falter.
Written by JetNikolai
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DaisyGrace
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Ladies and Gents and Aliens, this is going to be difficult to judge. So many gut punches already! Thanks for playing.

Keep them coming!

slipalong
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Joined at the hip †(tanka)

Words carved on headstone
: missing shoe one of a pair
strife cant be appeased
just limping on , broken down
my inconsolable loss:
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Eerie
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Nuclear

All of the oxygen was
Sucked out of the
Room- creating a
Vacuum; taking with it
Your love- and
Probably one of the
Cats.
Written by Eerie
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