Poetry competition CLOSED 30th January 2020 8:50pm
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Jade-Pandora (jade tiger)
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ROAST, the RUTHLESS

clewluss
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Poetry Contest

Critique Overboard
UPDATE  THIS COMP WAS DBL POSTED,
so two winners.

Have you grown weary of receiving Overly sweet comments praising your art?
By posting your poem here, you realize you have entered CRITIQUE THUNDERDOME, a no holds barred rip fest of your work.
But there is one catch. Before you cut up somebodies poem posted here in this competition, YOU MUST FIRST POST a poem of your own, welcoming harsh critique.



This thread is only for a very few,
If not to your taste well, you knowl.

Also please squeeze in a touch of humor, and self depracation while roasting.
Ultimately I hope this all amongst friends, where we learn and laugh and love each other all the Moore.

With that said,
HAVE AT IT


PoetsRevenge
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It's a cool idea, can the poems submitted be funny? Also, what are the criteria for judging the winner, best poem, best critique responses or both? Are the critiques to be posted in this thread or on the poem pages?

Ahavati
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Why are there two threads of this?

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Ahavati, I just want to take a moment to relish in the very idea that you feel
CONFRUSED,
for it is not everyday a self confident
Highly prized lady like yourself is found in such a tizzy.
So I'll have to get back to you...

clewluss
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Hey PoetsRevenge, take this thread where the
Spirit leads you, I will take note of your particular angle
Just DO it

Ahavati
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clewluss said:Ahavati, I just want to take a moment to relish in the very idea that you feel
CONFRUSED,
for it is not everyday a self confident
Highly prized lady like yourself is found in such a tizzy.
So I'll have to get back to you...


* Flips hair *

I am human; I promise.

EdibleWords
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Need Mo Whiz, Dumb

I tol u
Yur back-wurd

Get smarts
No bumazz
Smartur

I C yew
Dats wear u gunna
B
If U can spale

Dis is stoop-id

Tryin ta talk 2U
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BigG
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Jog on

Booze filled body Sweety and clammy
I lay next to you Pristine and calm
Once was lovers Such magical times
Our bodies once tangled But my head's so mangled
I think I should leave before I do you harm,

The Voices have ceased calling my name
But all I remember are the words you said
On my way to rehab I wish you was dead
Is this the life we must carry and share
Just because we have a child now their.


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Jade-Pandora
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I Have A Plan

 
 
I simply said ĎI have a planí,
ĎTwas off the record, did I say?
Itís early and I just began,
Donít want the muse to go astray.
 
It doesnít mean weíre on a clock,
I simply said ĎI have a planí.
Itís promising no writerís block,
In fact you may become a fan.
 
No guarantee itís better than
The competitionís good intent.
I simply said ĎI have a planí,
Iím not revealing where it went.
 
So hold your horses, wait a spell,
Watchíd pots donít boiíl says a pan.
A magic potion? who can tell,
I simply said ĎI have a planí.    

†  
†  
( a non-entry )
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Jade-Pandora
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I Never

 

I never get depressed but Iíll suffer,
A year-longís worth of months go sailing by.
Christmas as my woes are stocking stuffers
To hang around my waist like pecan pie.

I wish thatís all it was, I hardly eat,
I never get depressed but Iíll suffer.
A day of letting go would be a treat,
God help if the remedy proves tougher.

The devil how I work for my supper,
Itís never gonna matter anyhow.
I never get depressed but Iíll suffer,
Someday Iíll take on less than I do now.

And yet I wonder if Iíll find the timeó
Like cigarettes, will quitting be rougher?
Cold turkey writing verse Iíll miss the rhyme,
I never get depressed but Iíll suffer.

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Depressed

(In response to Jadeís "I Never")  

Now that the Christmas solstice,
Suffering has come to past  
Prepare for the Spring Equinox †
Tiss the time of depressing Lent  

When the Yuletide season  
Of painful kayas is replaced  
With boring days of morose  
When the soul is oppressed  

Then, like Christ during Passover †
Enjoy your last tasteless supper  
Of bitter herbs and boiled meat  
Before we walk the trail of somber  

Strolling the Garden of Gethsemane  
Among the fruiting Pecan trees  
Realize the little pain we suffer  
Then going through life gloomily † †

So, take up your cross to climb,  
Calvary in determination    
After your suffer crucifixion  
And your subsequent resurrection †

Youíll discover it is better †
To experience pain and abide  
Then to live in an endlessly †
Unhappy and depressed †
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Kinkpoet
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Bent Questions

iíve been trying
to bend mind
to see how far it flexes
without breaking

the question is
if it bends
to the point of fracture
how will I know?

is reality existent
only in my mind?

and if so
then
from inside
will it appear intact?

if i break my mind
will lost loves be found?
will dead friends come alive?
will the world be at peace?

or will it be worse?

(C)2019 Raibeart Bruis
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Response to Need Mo Whiz, Dumb:

R yew talking two me?
lern tu spel
U maroon!

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