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Hi all ... second time out for this competition ...

On the Coursera Course, "Sharpened Visions" they have an exercise called, 'Biting Rhymes'.  In this exercise you take the end rhymes from a published poem and use them to make a different poem.

For example, from

Don Juan Canto the fifteenth, LI by Lord Byron

     And wherefore not? A reasonable reason,
      If good, is none the worse for repetition;
    If bad, the best way 's certainly to tease on,
      And amplify: you lose much by concision,
    Whereas insisting in or out of season
      Convinces all men, even a politician;
    Or—what is just the same—it wearies out.
    So the end 's gain'd, what signifies the route?

We have: reason, repetition, on, concision, season, politician, out, route

Which I used to make the following ...

   Thoughts ...

    There is a clear and sensible reason
    that some things work well with repetition.
    A thought to be spoken should be based on
    logic that is sharpened by concision.
    The thought should be left to stand and season
    unlike ramblings from a politician.
    The idea should be slowly worked out
    like any other complicated route.

This is for practice and for fun; the better poets no doubt will make poems that will compare or contrast with the poem from where the end rhymes originate.

It is also a good opportunity to practice rhythm and meter.

If the competition is of interest I'll repeat it when it seems appropriate to do so.

Lastly, good luck!

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Dream On

This time next year, no hope & no reason,
Foretelling votes for which politician
Will fill the seat for next 4-year’s season,
And prayers, asking, for no repetition.

No enduring derision to go on,
When the Trump administration we route.
To recall back in office, concision,
To shout as one Nation, “Fucker, get out!”




Jade says:
This piece uses the end rhymes in the rhyme scheme of A/B/A/B in both quatrains. Using 10-syllabic count per line. The end rhyme words are from our competition host’s example piece (inspired by Lord Byron): “Thoughts”.


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Thanks for entering ... (that was quick!).

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AnonymousBystander said:Thanks for entering ... (that was quick!).
Maybe, but when the muse speaks (or whispers), I stop & listen.  I trust it’s okay. Perhaps I’ll enter a second offering later, but I’m doing the Napo in April, so I may just coast.

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Omnopinous  

for whatever reason
there will be repetition
of that we can count on

there ends concision
puts blurs upon the season
like a wile politician
sets smoke to a shout out
then takes it on another route  










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Thanks for entering the competition.  For a moment I was about to ask what poem you chose but then I realised it was the one from the example given by me.  Good luck.

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sorry, man

misread the opening post. if you prefer I can pick a different set of words

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Not at all ... quite happy to receive your contribution.

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