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Rensaku: linked verse

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Poetry Contest

Haiku and †reply
Rensaku is an old Japanese tradition. Here is my version.
One author writes a haiku on any topic. (5-7-5)
Another author writes a reply of two lines of 7 syllables each.

Here is an example:

Author 1
Holding your hand while
Walking in the park and then
Stopping for a kiss

Author 2
Plum blossoms fall to the ground
So I don't quite close my eyes

You can reply to a previous haiku, or submit one of your own. But it is more fun to write one of each!

I would suggest you "copy and paste" the haiku before you add your reply, so it is clear which one you are replying to.

There is no limit to the number of entries. It will be open for the entire month of March.

I will choose winners for 1) best Haiku, 2) best reply, and 3) best combination (2 authors)

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Here is a haiku to get you started. Or feel free to write one yourself, and I'll reply.

Innumerable
Stars under heaven's dark veil
The brightest is you

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To the host, respectfully, what you have arranged to have participants do is called a Rensaku, which is linked Tanka.  This can consist of two Tanka, or dozens, depending on how many haijin participate for however much time.  Tanka is 3 + 2 lines with sound symbol count (not syllable) of 5/7/5/7/7.

On the other hand, a Renga is linked Haiku (which are not written the way the examples here have been written that are more Tanka in expression. To do more traditionally correct, you need to adjust the guideline you set, plus make the challenge an endless competition without a deadline, and without a solitary winner.

I hope this helps. Thank you **bows**, and welcome to DUP.⛩

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Jade,

I appreciate your comments. I'll change the name to rensaku. I like the two line reply, which indeed does make a tanka. And I am not that excited about a continuous chain as you suggest. I wanted to take a traditional idea and modify it in a creative way. Thanks and I look forward to your entry.

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Scuba64 said:Jade,

I appreciate your comments. I'll change the name to rensaku. I like the two line reply, which indeed does make a tanka. And I am not that excited about a continuous chain as you suggest. I wanted to take a traditional idea and modify it in a creative way. Thanks and I look forward to your entry.

Yes, I totally get what you are hoping to do. †In the time iíve been a member of The Deep, Iíve seen this particular modified version of a Rensaku tried before. †For the most part, I was pointing out the difference between linked Haiku, and linked Tanka (which is very ancient compared to Haiku).

Regards🎏

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Innumerable
Stars under heaven's dark veil
The brightest is you

surrounded by your starlight
despite the chill it warms me

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It's my confusion
the darkness has become light
I embrace them both

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David_Macleod said:It's my confusion
the darkness has become light
I embrace them both

For darkness hides afterlife
And the light reveals the truth

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in spite his braveíry
he wore a gold talisman
Costing him his life

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Jade-Pandora said:in spite his braveíry
he wore a gold talisman
Costing him his life



the talisman stopped working
he'd forgotten his charger

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it's when I am dead
I will be the last to know
because I'll be dead

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David_Macleod said:it's when I am dead
I will be the last to know
because I'll be dead

the first or last either way
I'll be seeking the Father

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I was young as spring
and held to an autumn's wind
like pomegranates

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Thanks David. These are all great!

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Thank you for your contributions, Pandora-Jade. I am working on a reply to the last one.

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