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Poetry Contest

Share romantic poems.
"[Romance is] a feeling of excitement and mystery associated with love. . . . love, especially when sentimental or idealized."- Google

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Here's some inspiration from last competition (https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10057/):

You Intrigue me


Funny how these words
Slipped out and then in

Into the conversation
Into my mind
Into my heart

Over and over
I mull them
Troubled
Teased
Obsessed

Though we just met
I long to know
What hides behind your eyes
While they lock with mine
Threatening to throw away
the key

But how can this be
I'm never this foolish
Guarding my heart
From any first sight
Caper

Still here I am
Smitten bound
Like a blushing school girl
with her first crush

Stumbling
tumbling headlong

into your intrigue


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Star Struck


She radiates this ever glowing electricity,
I canít help but be drawn to her,
She emanates this clever flowing energy,
Itís something that causes quite a stir.
I feel the commotion inside of me,
Like a flutter of butterflies in a field,
I lose all reason and track of time,
My mind is speechless, lost in appeal.
And yet in the zeal of the undying fire,
The flame lights up the dream and the vision,
The way she glances right into my soul,
Itís with complete and absolute precision.
And itís there where I dwell in a trance,
The fortune of this romance is more than luck,
Or destiny or fate or any happenstance,
Itís simply her glance that still has me star struck.


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seven heavens_______

We sit broad our river                          
As thoughts flow none resist                        
The world is now tempered                          
For me only you exist...                        
                         
A dove of light shines smoothly                        
Through our hand held minds                        
A love wave crashes slowly                      
Through our sensual time...                        
                         
The inner chase never finds                        
The objective point                        
A hollow chant down the line                        
No priest will anoint...                        
                         
I gently kiss your lips                        
Such a lovely new taste                          
And so delicious to sip                        
We both embrace no haste...                      
                     
Your eyes look into mine                        
Our stars stretch into one                        
A spiral door opens to rhyme                        
As we spin into suns...                      
                       
Transforming into light                        
Our synergy then splits                        
With hands left over right                        
The sun will never sit...                      
                         
Now a ocean of darkness                        
Is all covered in naught                        
Our heart becomes the river                        
Our soul will never stop...  


Here's more inspiration from last competition (https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10057/):

Cosmic Love
Night at the Pool
Emily's Confessions
Pabulous
One Last Time (?)

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oriental center


Under the crescent reflective moon      
An eastern cryptic lore    
The alabaster slopes      
Sit on the sun set shores...      
       
On its flank my ship goes inward      
My energy drawn down the ravine        
From my decent off the mountains      
My paradise lost in a dream...      
       
An inlet to the vesica pisces      
Found under a Tibetan sacred tree      
A generational spot to port      
Center in a sacred place to sea...      
       
Through a gateway to the holy city      
There sits two symmetrical planes      
From separation to oneness      
The female water it contains...      
       
An observer to the observed      
Her flower of life in a tree      
Is overlapping in spheres      
My sail spread on her ocean breeze...      
       
I now wash in the moon shine lake      
My soul journeys the silver river      
Slow motion of her hand to come      
As her heart now draws me in her...


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I felt there was little sentimental love. I like the last line.


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seven heavens_______

We sit broad our river                          
As thoughts flow none resist                        
The world is now tempered                          
For me only you exist...                        
                         
A dove of light shines smoothly                        
Through our hand held minds                        
A love wave crashes slowly                      
Through our sensual time...                        
                         
The inner chase never finds                        
The objective point                        
A hollow chant down the line                        
No priest will anoint...                        
                         
I gently kiss your lips                        
Such a lovely new taste                          
And so delicious to sip                        
We both embrace no haste...                      
                     
Your eyes look into mine                        
Our stars stretch into one                        
A spiral door opens to rhyme                        
As we spin into suns...                      
                       
Transforming into light                        
Our synergy then splits                        
With hands left over right                        
The sun will never sit...                      
                         
Now a ocean of darkness                        
Is all covered in naught                        
Our heart becomes the river                        
Our soul will never stop...  


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the rhythm felt a bit weak in some areas. i like the rhyming in some areas, as well.


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She


The essence of woman    
A vision of the flower of life    
The sweetness of honey    
Beauty grown in the holy garden...
   
She walks with purpose    
And speaks with compassion    
A brown tipped flower    
With eyes of glassy soul...
   
In tune with herself    
In harmony with the cosmos    
The sound of lovely wind    
As she talks to the moon...
   
A witness of the maker    
A bringer of the night    
She shines brighter than the sun    
To dim the highest light...
   
Will the earth spin?
Or the world be fulfilled?    
A thought of substance    
She makes the deal...


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I felt the ellipses made the details in the stanzas feel more isolated than necessary. the beginning stanza is my favorite, especially with its powerful introduction with earth.


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the story of a dream


I had a dream, a dream that was soo amazing that it felt real
Although it was unbelievably a dream
A dream where everything was all good
A dream where although it sometimes rained and got tough,
There was no reason to ever complain
A dream of two individuals joining as one
Yes there were rainy days but together we create the sun
A dream where we could be doing absolutely nothing yet still it would be fun
There was a special connection where I absolutely loved every second
A dream where your touch was soo heavenly that we melt together
A dream of eternity because nothing breaks a bond of forever
You and I were meant to be together
Sun shinning in any weather with fingertips as light as feathers
A dream where our flaws were so small that to each other
They were nothing at all
Because our love defeats all
A dream where just like I do , you never hold the past against me
We help and encourage each other to succeed
This is the story of a dream
A dream of a true match made in heaven
Call it a dream team


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I felt the phrase "A dream" was repeated a bit too much. I like the emphasis of ideal love.


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Darling
She said to write a poem about romance

And I laughed

For How do I sum up all of what we have been and are and will be?

At the least
I can say

I miss you
And your lips grazing my ear when you say goodnight

I miss you
Pulling me closer even in your sleep
Even when your angry

I miss you
And watching movie after movie
Staying up until four am talking about our backyards as children
And fighting about utter nonsense

I miss you
Telling me about the weather
And reading my mind
Giving me that look when I know the things
About you
Someone else has dismissed

And I miss
Watching it snow
Your hand on my waist
Playing our guitars
Creating things together
Kissing eachother after
Never getting over ourselves

Mostly
I miss you loving me
I miss it so much
I hope itís not too late for us darling
I hope
Just because If I miss you for much longer
I might go insane


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I felt the ending could've been different, particularly that last line. I like the emphasized moments of nostalgia.


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BUT MORE

Two decades
Such a long time
Yes
It took us that much
Wasted time
Before
We touch

Young adults
Unsure
Push and pull
Finally
Turned away just to
Grow and live life
Apart

For granted
Not forgotten
Waiting in vain?
More like
Resigned to a memory
Of what could have been
Us, together

It took just a second
The moment you said your name
And this is it, the stranger
That never was
Becomes someone
As finally
The ONE

I lived, I toiled
I traveled and traveled more
Away, in sharp curves and rough roads
I didn't cry
Never blinked
Even in grief
But today, I feel like

Crying
If happiness could wretch my emotion
any more than the loud beats that it blinds
Then, sorrow and pain, is just a pinch in the gut
Do I love you?
My answer will be the same as all those years ago
I don't think so

More
This is way more
Than what I can say in words
Nor express in deeds
Numbness that hurts
And I go crazy
And angry

For the time
That we lost
To what?
Like a regret that I don't want to regret
but regretted that I don't, but still, I don't
Do I love you?
I don't think so.

But more.


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i didn't feel much love. there are definitely some strong emotions, even in the 6th stanza.

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o=====
Cosmic Love
Letís rest together
on the equator of forever
Our hemispheres touching distantly;
the divide maintaining our dignity

I want to lay beside you
inside the worlds burning core
because you are the centre of my world
you are my unlocked door

You burn brighter than the sun
and it may be factually incorrect
but youíre the one who performed my autopsy
took little pieces of my heart to dissect

When I look into the night sky
the moon and all the stars collide
because I know that when you stay
youíre sturdy by my side

Balance and harmony
you are my centre of gravity
you showed me the entire cosmos in
the strength of your love for me

I cannot be the one to nudge you awake
as the world collapses all around
our souls entwined together forever
in you I know what I have found.


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I felt more punctuation could've helped. I like the theme of cosmos.


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Face In The Crowd
A sea of faces swim around me
caught in a crowd my eyes blur
They move in and out of focus until
I settle on features I prefer

I first see you as a reflection
a figure adding lustre to a window pane
you look so beautiful I canít describe
your face distorts within the droplets of rain

I watch as the moisture collects
and your numerous faces blend
I wipe the window with my hands
and feel sparks between us transcend

The moment in slow motion
I see my future in the midst
and my inner world turned silent
as in my mind I can feel your kiss

We magnetise as we find each other
weaving through the throngs
We inhale each other just for one second
and the world is rid of its wrongs

A fleeting moment we fell in love
We are separated once again
carried away by the congregation
now you look like all the other men

I reach out my hand as youíre brutally torn
trying to keep you within my reach
I stutter to finds the words to keep you
the crowds extinguishing my speech

Since that moment when you dissipated
Iíve frittered away my energy
in mourning for the lovesick image that
I created to be you and me

My little piece of perfection
our spirit severed and lost
I wonít miss a fateful chance again
no matter what is the cost.


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I felt the ending was too sentimental. There's an interesting conflict within the second half of this piece.


o=====
Night at the Pool
 
Swim with me under the full moon Where flowerless petals bloom    
Night sky reflecting on the surface    
Stars swaying gently with the current    
   
Singing softly to a cricketing melody    
Shivering trees, echoing winds dancing in harmony    
The lyrics fall silent as she tightens her embrace, my arms set around her waist  
   
I attempt to ignore the pressure of her breast, bodies close a tear hits my chest  
Parting hair away from her face  
Sat dark glistening eyes transcending space  
   
Forehead to forehead we begin to tread deep  
Close breaths grazing each others lips with tease    
   
Submerging our bodies underneath,    
Eyes slowly close as our lips meet    
Clothes rising, bodies twisting beneath    
   
A kiss born from a moment found in dreams  
Surfacing I wished it was the only way I could breathe  
   
Staring at a butterfly dancing in the reflection of the moon    
I kiss her forehead, softly whispering  
"I love youĒ


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I like the subtle transition from the setting to the sensual act. i felt there could've been more line breaks.


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I love you is best said..
I love you is best said ...

The first time
The time after that
To the one that matters most
With every ounce of emotion
Sober maybe drunk
Whispered softly in the ear
Yelled at the top of your lungs
Whenever its time to go
After some corny jokes
Broken between kissing lips
Before during and after sex
When tears are flowing
When smiles are showing
Sunrise and sundown
Written in the sky
Drawn into the ground
Sound asleep or by the beach
Holding hands or cuddled in bed
On a notebook scribbled in pen
When it makes you feel alive
Even at the same time
Any moment you feel its right
Because I love you is best said not held inside

So go tell that person again or even if you haven't
Just mean it...because that's when I love you
Is best said.


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i felt this could've been divided into more stanzas. i like the polar contrasts underlined by rhyming, "When tears are flowing / When smiles are showing / Sunrise and sundown / Written in the sky / Drawn into the ground."


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A Collective of Love


Our love isn't measured by thrust
anymore

It's measured by understanding
and sharing

Pieces of a life so enthralling,
just brushing against each other
In the night is our erotic

Nobody can own universal romance

You take a vow and live within the glorious
and the bittersweet moments

Walking hand in hand, a union of spirits,
a collective of love

That's our love, brilliantly shining, dancing
in a summer breeze


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i like the theme of distinct love. i felt the poem title could've been different.


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White Tiger
I fantasize about your tapered fingers
Trailing and fisting my hair around your knuckles
Caressing down my sides, leaving glowing,
Sparking,
Blue embers in your wake
Thumb brushing the skin in between my hip bones
And lips, the color of an arctic
Sunset
Caressing the shadows over my neck
And the paleness of my thighs

Leaving stains, little constellations
Where you touched me
Spreading galaxies of purple, grey, blue
Across my skin,
Stars where your eyelashes fluttered against my cheek,
Shoulders,
Back,
Ribs,

Neon lights flickering
As I feel your heartbeat on my lips, tongue
Shivers running down your spine
And my own breath trembling
I get lost in the warmth of your eyes
The heat from your body
The utter safety, content, security
A safe haven in a world of
Chaos and terror
Volcanoes and lies
Wrapped in your arms
Listening to your soft, gentle voice

Leave your fire on my lips,
Burning in my eyes,
Stinging at my fingertips,
Creeping up my thigh,
Flaming inside of me,
And surrounding my heart and lungs
Exhaling fire lost in the shades of ice


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this reads more like an erotica than a romance. the animalism is interesting.


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His eyes are what got me
His hands are what swayed me
His kiss is what captured me
His words helped calm
His touch is what kept me around

When we fight we fight
When we make love there is more passion than any drug could ever muster
so what keeps me around this long?

When I look in his eyes I know he loves me
he doesn't have to tell me
but I like it when he does

the last thing I expected was to fall for a man like him

Sure he doesn't have much money
but I like that
he tells horrible jokes
I like that too

I hate when we fight
why can't we just make love?


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I felt the notes on fighting weren't needed. I like the shape of the poem, even its stanzas.

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o=====
Just Let Me Love You


We'll meet for coffee at 4am
All the city sleeping
Except for us
We've had this semi-romance forever  
Without spending any time together
Harsh fluorescent lighting
Won't dim my admiration  
We're lovers who never had time to love
Just coffee
Dark, no sugar


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I felt this was too short. I like the setting as well as modern-time details, even "Harsh fluorescent lighting / Won't dim my admiration  "


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Completion
Androgynous enticement of statuesque poise  
lips part to expose  
lemongrass breath  
medicated acetylcholinesterase kiss  
convulsions of psychotic trauma vacates  
 
curing  psychosis
 
Once used to drench self in tabun  
baptism of affection detoxifies;  
head of insanity  
 
Locked gaze defies earth's gravity  
which levitates  
heart to sun...mind to moon...

a chemical bond is formed
 
Liberation with libertine mindedness;  
turns ticks of clockwise clock  
to tocks of counterclockwised rebirth  
 
Of new beginnings...  
 
Together, we are absolute


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i didn't feel much sentiment. your diction is interesting.


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Where Was I The Night Of The 25th...?
         
Gaelic groves          
shawl your swollen            
irises - dense - dead          
& darkly deep;          
Wintered Zion          
polar nights          
of pine          
wreath like ice          
'round a new solstice moon          
           
Matching actually...          
My mom's fake tree,          
no spruce-y          
scent for me          
           
I'll wear            
nothing,          
'cept your emerald T...          
...make it easy...          
           
Sloe & honey hair          
spike 2 shots          
of gin            
gumming my mousey          
mind          
each time you walk near          
           
Gutter lights          
trace the house's            
rambling ranch frame      
like some kind of      
flashing      
flaxen lace    
     
Your palms            
line these  
tenderly clammy        
flushing in company          
with the wallheater's            
blush          
when we become bare          
           
~        
 
It was not          
& entirely was          
the end of nights          
that you weren't            
mine        
           
         
           
***          
Our anniversary is on the 26th, and I remember Christmas...so well.


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i felt there wasn't much sentiment. the descriptions were sensually interesting.


x=====
Dammit. Dammit. Dammit.

 
Retrospect is so...
racy
in suspense
strung up from
chimerical ceilings  
& so cheeky...
caught in little elastic things
 
Prim trots upon
cobblestoned corners
cracks caulked in ice
Taxpayers
only approved concrete
But you
are a patsy for pretentious
particulars
 
Soy in that latte  
(Right then I should've fled)
like a watery
show of coffee
could achieve  
fucking anything
 
Bloodless cheeks
screamed
when confronted
that chilled spring
 
...should've been my  
red-less  
red light
 
Should've told me
everything


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this did not feel romantic. i like your diction with "racy," and "chimerical."
 
 
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From Emily to Her Lord Byron

Imagine my childlike wonder
as tumbling parchments
cross and block my path
collecting like leaves at my unsure feet

Bending to stoop
I gather up the poems
filling these empty
yet still longing arms

Glancing about I
pause
hug them tight
before hiding beneath a willow

Under this pink muted gloaming
I read them one by one
letting my sighing breath
turn each scribbled page

How can it be
after all these centuries
you would once again

brush against my soul


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i felt the love was probably more for his poetry rather than him. nonetheless, i feel great sentimental love.


o=====
You Intrigue me

Funny how these words
Slipped out and then in

Into the conversation
Into my mind
Into my heart

Over and over
I mull them
Troubled
Teased
Obsessed

Though we just met
I long to know
What hides behind your eyes
While they lock with mine
Threatening to throw away
the key

But how can this be
I'm never this foolish
Guarding my heart
From any first sight
Caper

Still here I am
Smitten bound
Like a blushing school girl
with her first crush

Stumbling
tumbling headlong

into your intrigue


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i felt the "in," at the end of line 2, wasn't needed. the social simile is interesting, "like a blushing school girl with her first crush ."

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Star Struck

She radiates this ever glowing electricity,
I canít help but be drawn to her,
She emanates this clever flowing energy,
Itís something that causes quite a stir.
I feel the commotion inside of me,
Like a flutter of butterflies in a field,
I lose all reason and track of time,
My mind is speechless, lost in appeal.
And yet in the zeal of the undying fire,
The flame lights up the dream and the vision,
The way she glances right into my soul,
Itís with complete and absolute precision.
And itís there where I dwell in a trance,
The fortune of this romance is more than luck,
Or destiny or fate or any happenstance,
Itís simply her glance that still has me star struck.


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the capitalizations confused me a bit. your rhyming and rhythm are quite oustanding, in most areas.


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Emily's Confessions

I shrink to say in every way -
you caper and you hide
gamboling in my swirling mind -
making love our game to play

Whether on warm meadows shaded -
or upon a silver chilly field
I await your cursive letters -
secret verses soon revealed

All the while I long to spy -
such twinkles in your eye
long tufts on auburn bangs -
above impish dimpled smiles

Though the miles be ever long -
a fortnight's sail between
I take my evening comfort -
in each bird's mating song

As I sit alone upon my bed -
brushing out each kink and curl
reciting aloud all your poems -
tickling whispers must be said

Now our long impending union -
trembling bodies will entwine
to at last forever formalize -

a consummation of our souls


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i felt the rhythm could've been better, in some stanzas. where predictable, your rhyming is good in some stanzas.


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Dearest Man
I love everything about you. I love your mind, your heart and the way your broad shoulders were chiselled.      
     
Everything. Thereís nothing about you that I donít like.      
     
I love the way you pursue your dreams, and rise every time you fall. I love your passion for life, even when it wanes, and you feel defeated.      
     
Please know that it was never intended for you to be crafted in hues of cafard, and it pains me to see pain etched upon your face, and hidden behind those gorgeous eyes.    
     
I love the way youíre not afraid to cry, knowing that you have a soft place to fall and gentle kisses to nurture your wounded heart.    
     
Tears, are cleansing for your heart and soul. So please, don't suppress your sadness as that only turns into rage, and anger.    
     
I love your soft spoken words, and the belief in your own truths. I love the darkness thatís within you, as equally as the light in which you radiate.      
 
I love your scruffy 3 day growths, and the way you tickle my flesh with your gorgeous face.
     
I love the way you manhandle me to nurture my inner lioness, as equally as I love the gentleman thatís embedded within your inner faculties that shapes me as a lady.      
     
I love the fire in your belly and the love you have in your heart, about our art, beyond the bed of structured, and sometime, unstructured prose.      
     
I love the way you reach for me when you discover you have morning wood, and you need me to take care of you from that perspective.      
     
I love that you trust me to nourish you, when you feel at your most vulnerable.  
   
I live my life with no apologies, and I donít care about the opinions of others, and I think you should too.    

The love I feel for you in my heart & soul draws me to a timeless place, akin to aevum.
     
When you feel as if life is fucking you over, just breatheÖ and let go of all the things you cannot change.      
     
Elevate yourself, by moving forward, and donít get stuck in the human condition of suffering because life is fucking brutal.      
     
Thereís no doubt about that.      
     
Just    
     
Donít let go, and check out.      
     
Itís not easy but finding inner strength, and channelling your energy towards people who are capable of nourishing you, instead of depleting you, is where you need to be.    
     
Yours Faithfully    
Woman


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the lines felt a bit uncomfortably long. I like the letter format.


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Pabulous
The soul hungers for what the hands long to touch.

The contrast of intensity begins with a sigh, and the trailing of goosebumps when subtle moments are translated into trembles that speak beyond the realm of touch, and the ache secretes from the heart as it reminisces in your bliss.

I draw upon your ragged and shallow breath, breathing you into my heart and soul as you plunge into the oceanic depths of me until we're both cascading and soaring upon the light we channel upon one another as you recognise me by the way I quiver beneath the weight of all you never said.

Devour me on the fringes of your fingertips as the scent of our love wafts in the air like an orchard of fruit, sweet and ripe for the palate to savor in times when distance is too much to contemplate, and your kiss is too far to taste as I reach for you from dusk to dawn.

Yearning to kiss you in the blossoming of our inner Spring, while you soak up the sunshine amongst falling leaves in the contrasting moments of Autumn.

You will always be the glimpse of nature, and the changing seasons that remain embedded within my heart.


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I felt this was a bit too erotic for a romance, in some areas. yet this prose has a lot of depth; as if two polar settings (lovers far apart and lovers upon each other) is meditated simultaneously, "Devour me on the fringes of your fingertips as the scent of our love wafts in the air like an orchard of fruit, sweet and ripe for the palate to savor in times when distance is too much to contemplate, and your kiss is too far to taste as I reach for you from dusk to dawn."


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One Last Time (?)
Quietly,
I lie in bed
and hang
on every word you said
I close my eyes,
I toss and turn
as in my head
these questions burn

if you could see me
one more time
then, would that make you
change your mind?
if I could simply
hold your hand
would that help you
to understand?

I toss and turn
right out of bed
I think I'll start my day,
instead
I know there's nothing
I can do
my heart will always
ache for you

I have to see you
one more time
to put at ease
my troubled mind
I would erase
this space apart
and hear the music
of our hearts

I'd say "I love you"
one more time,
and stare into
those deep blue eyes,
I'd lock you in
a passionate kiss
and hope my presence
would be missed

then we can go
our separate ways
and maybe meet again,
someday
and I'll make sure
that fire still burns
to light the way
for your return


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some of the end-rhyme words felt uncreatively recycled. the rhythm sings perfectly though.

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IF YOU REQUESTED NO COMMENT, IN THE PREVIOUS CONTEST, THEN SKIP THIS POST. because I don't have the url links to specific poems, this post was publicized solely for people who wanted comments in the previous contest (https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/10057/):


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Galactic Kiss
Aeons,
searching and yearning,
for that other perfect half,
coalescing, animating  
somewhere among the cosmos
so long they scream silent
truths,  
No such thing as time.
Please stop thinking linear, my dear.
 
They're frozen,  longing for union
finally, that was forever missing,
searched for you for too long my love
we remember nothing now of the
start of that inquiry..yet her energy
courses through the entirety of  
my being... cosmic dust
we are
I'm seeing.
 
auras collide,  
nowhere or desire to hide..
 
Imbue me..Imbue her now...life  
force ...chills..goosebumps..soft kisses
behind ears of swan necks..my wanton
has become eternal, forever
as I feel there can be only one..
the rest are just  
needs fulfilled, while waiting, longing
ghosts of selves ever present.
 
Finally she is here now...my soul is no longer torn, frayed, missing what it knows it needs...we all need as beings. to see those eyes that really want you
only you
forever, beyond it all
Unconditional, she'll wait forever for the kiss too
if she has to...
 
you feel so much more than just alive
for you know it's true.
 
Love so rare it's revolutionary.
Rejected, not accepted.
For its so ancient, sacred, felt, intuitive the  
cynics scoff at its existence..
 
Yet onward after tens of thousands of years,
it endures. Mystical energy
mysterious ways
chaos theory,
undying, not created, immortal
energy.
Finally, the ONE!!


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this felt quite lengthy. I like the themes of time and space.

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okanna93
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Love and Lover

your breath on my skin is intoxicating
your kisses leave me speechless
your touch drives me crazy

When our bodies meet I can't believe it's happening
I've always thought you could find better than me
apparently I'm all you desire

When we are alone in your space
in that bed
we let out all our frustration

the heat
the sweat
the flying emotions

nothing feels better than when we are one

spiritually you lift me up
emotionally you take me to places my younger self would never have been able to imagine it could go to
psychologically and physically you make me a better person
someone I never thought I could be

When we are in your domain you make the rules but I like to bend them
just as much as my petite body does for you

I make noises for you I make for no one else
they tell you I enjoy your company
they tell you I long for so much more
I don't want you to stop
I never want you to stop
the thing that turns me on the most is when you whisper sweet nothings in my ear
promises of satisfaction and praises no one else can whisper

Every night I long for you in so many ways
physical
mental
and emotional

I am attached
I am obsessed

Your touch melts my very core
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Passion

You've mistaken the whims of the heart
For the passions of the mind
And expect my mind to align
To the confines you find yourself in
All the time
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RoseJasmine
Fire of Insight
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The City Moonlight

Sprinkling and splashing †
the silver moonbeams † †
strews over the gurgling streams † †
and pours into the drifterís dreams † †
† †  
Through the sash window † †  
it shines upon his pillow † †
woke him up to sing a solo † †
at a distance, it echoed † †
hummed with a weeping willow † †
† †  
He walked closer † †
stares into the hollow † †
meets the moonshine below † †
His lonely heart has a special halo † † †
where carries memories † †  
and his midnight prayers † †
† †  
Under the moonlight † †
He is writing his self-poetry † †  
with a pen of the fairyís mystery † †
which gives birth to hopes † †
again, it echoes † †
through the winter hallway † †  
up to the spring Milky Way † †
† †  
The moon knows † †
how much I remember him † †
When the moon projects † †
I embrace his dreams † †
They are beautifully woven † †  
and never fall apart at the seams † †
† †  
The moon realizes † †  
how much I wish him well † †
I ask for its darting radiance † †
break through time and space † †
to light up his dream † †
and watch over him † †
† † †
In the two cities † †
at different directions † †
The separated hearts meet † †
soaking in its bright glories † †  
† †  
No matter where and when † †
the city moonlight always shines forth † †  
at the same place, never miss † †
for the two of us
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Just a crush

What is this
This feeling I get
When you look at me
That feeling I get

Something inside tells me
"Take it before it's gone"
But how do I approach
I'm being drawn

It's just a crush
But I feel like my heart's
going to jump out of my chest
You are to me, high priced art

It's been two years
Nothing has changed
I still feel the same
Never want to change

This crush doesn't go away
But if I'm honest I don't want it to
I don't mind it
So what's a guy to do
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Feeling Love

Love can surround you and take away your woes,
it can make you feel so lonely like a petal on a rose,
it also provides you with the cuddles that you need,
and gives you the strength to flourish like a seed.
Love is invisible but it's effects can still be seen ,
It's smell is overwhelming like a fresh ground coffee bean,
takes you on a journey to places †you won't †forget,
the twists and turns are endless, even makes you feel upset.
But it has no boundaries, no fences to contain,
Many different feelings, ones I canít explain,
tingles and the shivers and contentment of the heart,
but once it starts to leave you, things just fall apart,
the warmth that it gives you could heat a stately home,
Or light up all the houses from London down †to Rome .

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Colors

Colors
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What You do (for Me)

At our table with coffee or tea
With smiles between you and me
The conversation sets us free
The bonding is the key
And I feel the distant thunder
Fueled by pleasuresí plunder
Oncoming passionate wonder
Not stopped for any blunder
Catalyzing passions
With fuel too flammable to ration
Thatís how it came to be
That you set me crazy-free
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