Dark Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Evil poetry and morbid poems about death and horror - Honest critique has been requested for these poems. Want to learn the art of critique? Join our Honestly Crafted Critique group.
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
Today 2:13pm
Today 2:13pm
The Evil That Men Do
Let me tell you a tale,
Of a long forgotten deed bleak and pale,
Yet harrowing was the wickedness of the deed,
Oh so many had to bleed,
'Twas a night like no other,
Where men actually acted like brothers,
Except for one little soul,
With a stirring dark beyond his control,
Hatred burned deep in his eyes,
In his mind people would viciously die,
He spent the night...
Of a long forgotten deed bleak and pale,
Yet harrowing was the wickedness of the deed,
Oh so many had to bleed,
'Twas a night like no other,
Where men actually acted like brothers,
Except for one little soul,
With a stirring dark beyond his control,
Hatred burned deep in his eyes,
In his mind people would viciously die,
He spent the night...
#dark
#betrayal
#death
#evil
#devil
13 reads
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SeaEntity1
Poem Published
Today 7:24am
Today 7:24am
Gallows
They know of me but don't see
Buried 6 ft. deep in their brain
Decimated dream pouring white rain...
Gallant ghosts pay company
In an abyss of onyx bliss
Demons portray love
Which blood has cast away
Crystal snakes slither like liquid mirrors
Across soft peaks,cliffs & plains
Of face...
To dribble and slip in, a deaf dam
On a lily pad of pink sand...
Hale hailed cascades
Slays the pregnant snow of
past memories...
Eyes cold and stark
To breathe rigged promise
As pirhanas belch on staunch heart ...
Buried 6 ft. deep in their brain
Decimated dream pouring white rain...
Gallant ghosts pay company
In an abyss of onyx bliss
Demons portray love
Which blood has cast away
Crystal snakes slither like liquid mirrors
Across soft peaks,cliffs & plains
Of face...
To dribble and slip in, a deaf dam
On a lily pad of pink sand...
Hale hailed cascades
Slays the pregnant snow of
past memories...
Eyes cold and stark
To breathe rigged promise
As pirhanas belch on staunch heart ...
#LifeStruggles
#TruthOfLife
19 reads
4 Comments
Stargazed
Poem Published
Today 3:38am
Today 3:38am
An intimate affair
You touch my face
The look in your eyes
That unrecognizable look
Your fingers begin to scrape down my lips
Your hands veer down further still
Wandering until finally
They reach my throat
You hesitate
For only a moment
Your hands contract
Leaving me less air every second
Until finally... you stop
Fear fills your gaze
Realizing what you’ve done
“It’s ok, it’ll all be ok”
STOP
REWIND
PLAY
You touch my face
The look in your eyes...
The look in your eyes
That unrecognizable look
Your fingers begin to scrape down my lips
Your hands veer down further still
Wandering until finally
They reach my throat
You hesitate
For only a moment
Your hands contract
Leaving me less air every second
Until finally... you stop
Fear fills your gaze
Realizing what you’ve done
“It’s ok, it’ll all be ok”
STOP
REWIND
PLAY
You touch my face
The look in your eyes...
#dark
#confusion
#despair #denial
#despair #denial
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SatansSperm
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:48am
Yesterday 00:48am
[ Criminal Minds ] or how I spent my Tuesday night
tonight I stepped into the mind of a killer.....let me tell you a story...I was sitting outside and my mind started thinking about killing somebody....and just then these two people walk by....and I can feel the temptation swimming like meth in my blood.....and I fight it .....and the people pass.....each time now this feeling grows stronger....I don't know if I am strong enough......but I dodged it this time....so I am good.....for now
#religion
18 reads
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Taurek
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:44am
Yesterday 5:44am
Everyone Knows What You’re Doing, Bro.
The best thing you can do
Is protect all the women
And children and artists
A real man catches all the lies
In the middle of the night
While drinking whiskey & rye
And provides an honest
Assessment of the path into
This cold cruel world
If you’re great, you’re going
To break through, only
The untalented think
Otherwise
Three vodkas
Three bong rips
Four beers
Countless vape hits
And that’s the night
On the edge of
This fucking city
I wanted to see phat asses
And big...
Is protect all the women
And children and artists
A real man catches all the lies
In the middle of the night
While drinking whiskey & rye
And provides an honest
Assessment of the path into
This cold cruel world
If you’re great, you’re going
To break through, only
The untalented think
Otherwise
Three vodkas
Three bong rips
Four beers
Countless vape hits
And that’s the night
On the edge of
This fucking city
I wanted to see phat asses
And big...
#sex
#death
#alcohol
#drugs
#illness
37 reads
2 Comments
ruedabeyga
Poem Published
18th Sep 2018 00:37am
18th Sep 2018 00:37am
midnight sessions
#love
#depression
#dark
#night
#memories
30 reads
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Sunshine666
Poem Published
17th Sep 2018 9:42pm
17th Sep 2018 9:42pm
Tore
She can't see her beauty
She doesn't know what she deserves
She is scared of a future
Where she isn't being observed.
She just wants him to see her
She just wants to be heard
She just wants to be happy
It shouldn't be that absurd
Love isnt a game of claims
Owning her or throwing the blame
Hitting her or calling her names
Yet she is the only one with the shame.
She isn't innocent
We all know it's true
She doesn't claim to be
Don't misconstrue
She does love him
She does care
she...
She doesn't know what she deserves
She is scared of a future
Where she isn't being observed.
She just wants him to see her
She just wants to be heard
She just wants to be happy
It shouldn't be that absurd
Love isnt a game of claims
Owning her or throwing the blame
Hitting her or calling her names
Yet she is the only one with the shame.
She isn't innocent
We all know it's true
She doesn't claim to be
Don't misconstrue
She does love him
She does care
she...
#sadness
#loneliness
#confusion
#despair
#disappointment
22 reads
1 Comment
crowfly
Poem Published
17th Sep 2018 8:49pm
17th Sep 2018 8:49pm
The Realm of Self
He takes a breath, then comes apart
Abandoning all hope of sleep
Just one beat of his crusted heart
Informs him there's not much to keep
He is still one to live alone
Hunkered down beside the door
Or waiting by his useless phone
With tears pooled on the bedroom floor
He takes a breath, goes up in smoke
Soon drifting over city lights
And he can't fail to sense the joke
Whispered beneath his solo flights
Then back in abject solitude
Resigned inside the realm of self
His written words remaining crude ...
Abandoning all hope of sleep
Just one beat of his crusted heart
Informs him there's not much to keep
He is still one to live alone
Hunkered down beside the door
Or waiting by his useless phone
With tears pooled on the bedroom floor
He takes a breath, goes up in smoke
Soon drifting over city lights
And he can't fail to sense the joke
Whispered beneath his solo flights
Then back in abject solitude
Resigned inside the realm of self
His written words remaining crude ...
#loneliness
36 reads
13 Comments
SilentWhisper22
Poem Published
17th Sep 2018 4:19pm
17th Sep 2018 4:19pm
Painful Silence
Angels fall in painful silence
Feathers fall in slow descent
The downy rain with no pretense
Coats the earth in a soft blanket
Like snow it falls.
Crimson stains the downy surface.
First the white now the red.
Blood it falls as war goes on.
Light against dark, good against evil,
Right against wrong.
Where is the line between the two?
What is light and dark?
No visible difference to discern
Both believe they are in the right
But to their origin they return.
There is no black or white, good or evil,
Right or wrong ...
Feathers fall in slow descent
The downy rain with no pretense
Coats the earth in a soft blanket
Like snow it falls.
Crimson stains the downy surface.
First the white now the red.
Blood it falls as war goes on.
Light against dark, good against evil,
Right against wrong.
Where is the line between the two?
What is light and dark?
No visible difference to discern
Both believe they are in the right
But to their origin they return.
There is no black or white, good or evil,
Right or wrong ...
#depression
#grief
#dark #death
#dark #death
21 reads
0 Comments
SilentWhisper22
Poem Published
17th Sep 2018 4:14pm
17th Sep 2018 4:14pm
Childhood Lost
We watch with disenchanted eyes
As the future comes to pass us by
What once brought joy
Is revealed as lies
And brings to light
The turmoil inside
We stagnate in our hollow lives
Lost from us are the enthusiastic drives
A dark cloud to eclipse the sun
Our childhood illusions
Have come undone
A restless soul in human guise
Dreams of freedom slowly die
With heavy hearts and severed ties
We see a future with blackened skies
And in the dark we see
A life lead in melancholy
We travel the world as ghosts ...
As the future comes to pass us by
What once brought joy
Is revealed as lies
And brings to light
The turmoil inside
We stagnate in our hollow lives
Lost from us are the enthusiastic drives
A dark cloud to eclipse the sun
Our childhood illusions
Have come undone
A restless soul in human guise
Dreams of freedom slowly die
With heavy hearts and severed ties
We see a future with blackened skies
And in the dark we see
A life lead in melancholy
We travel the world as ghosts ...
#dark
#despair
#disappointment
15 reads
1 Comment
anonymouslyhere
Poem Published
17th Sep 2018 10:59am
17th Sep 2018 10:59am
Wakeless
Never to awaken
I fell into the hole
Surrounding me
In spades, in graves
Death engraved
On lightless eyelids
Harken the darkness
Shy imagination
Pour me into skies
Bleeding blue and white
Midsummer passing
Warm as a lovers hug
Who am I?
Forgotten
Senseless
Blind
Each joy slowly taken
Midnight drowns me
Never again to awaken.
I fell into the hole
Surrounding me
In spades, in graves
Death engraved
On lightless eyelids
Harken the darkness
Shy imagination
Pour me into skies
Bleeding blue and white
Midsummer passing
Warm as a lovers hug
Who am I?
Forgotten
Senseless
Blind
Each joy slowly taken
Midnight drowns me
Never again to awaken.
#dark
#death
20 reads
4 Comments
Peganghoul20
Paganghoul3
Paganghoul3
Poem Published
16th Sep 2018 8:55pm
16th Sep 2018 8:55pm
Fifty shades of f**ked
Leather ball gagged mouth and razor blade shredded breasts.
Whores hanging from hooks like hogs begging for freedom while tears pool below them.
Tools of mass mutilation spread out on the table ready for my grasp.
Skin sliced thin, skewed, roasted and fed back to my victims.
Two girls one hollowed out chest cavity.One hungry mother fucker with a distinct pallet.
Smell of death and excrement filling the air gets me harder than stone.
I can't wait to get a taste of the blond ones boyfriend when he comes looking for her. ...
Whores hanging from hooks like hogs begging for freedom while tears pool below them.
Tools of mass mutilation spread out on the table ready for my grasp.
Skin sliced thin, skewed, roasted and fed back to my victims.
Two girls one hollowed out chest cavity.One hungry mother fucker with a distinct pallet.
Smell of death and excrement filling the air gets me harder than stone.
I can't wait to get a taste of the blond ones boyfriend when he comes looking for her. ...
#death
21 reads
0 Comments
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