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faithmairee
Published
Yesterday 11:21pm
Yesterday 11:21pm
Flip Them Fish
Cajun fries
red beans and rice
salmon cooking
on the grill
I love good food
and always will
jambalaya and
gumbo too
There's plenty of
grub here for
me and you
red beans and rice
salmon cooking
on the grill
I love good food
and always will
jambalaya and
gumbo too
There's plenty of
grub here for
me and you
#food
#temptation
29 reads
6 Comments
wallyroo92
Published
11th Aug 2019 9:33am
11th Aug 2019 9:33am
Beneath The Surface
We have traveled across all these decades,
A pilgrimage of time and there’s no going back,
And yet my perception of us hasn’t changed,
Ever so placid when feelings never lacked.
But the emotions always felt so profound,
Locked in a bedrock paddock deep in the heart,
Beneath the surface silent without a sound,
Without pretense it easily falls apart.
And as we travel across all these decades,
Like golden pollen we’re scattered in the wind,
We look back and wonder how and why we’re here,
I reminisce of all the times I have sinned.
It’s...
A pilgrimage of time and there’s no going back,
And yet my perception of us hasn’t changed,
Ever so placid when feelings never lacked.
But the emotions always felt so profound,
Locked in a bedrock paddock deep in the heart,
Beneath the surface silent without a sound,
Without pretense it easily falls apart.
And as we travel across all these decades,
Like golden pollen we’re scattered in the wind,
We look back and wonder how and why we’re here,
I reminisce of all the times I have sinned.
It’s...
#anxiety
#memories
#SelfReflection
507 reads
2 Comments
monovox128
Published
Yesterday 10:11pm
Yesterday 10:11pm
BY INVITATION ONLY
We're only able to hear our voices
within waking hours & dreams
beackoning, softly whispering
behind a veil that's far beyond
unconscious & consciousness
or so that is what it all seems
It continues to entrincincally stir
the core of our being, our soul
left behind a neverending ache
and also ravenous thirst & hunger
any & all the pieces of you & me
that make us a complete whole
For your body as well as mine
were meant to be draped together
in our...
within waking hours & dreams
beackoning, softly whispering
behind a veil that's far beyond
unconscious & consciousness
or so that is what it all seems
It continues to entrincincally stir
the core of our being, our soul
left behind a neverending ache
and also ravenous thirst & hunger
any & all the pieces of you & me
that make us a complete whole
For your body as well as mine
were meant to be draped together
in our...
#erotic
#lover
#lust
#passion
#seductive
34 reads
2 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Published
Yesterday 10:08pm
Yesterday 10:08pm
Phony
directing my positivity mixed with reality
choosing genuine kindness over the phony
it's easy to be nice if it is returned to you
loving people and making an effort to see the good in people
even if after a while I thought they were worthless
for the sake of peace I put it aside and walk on
vengeance isn't in my hands and I'm grateful
not wanting to make the call
containing my hurt when others inflict harm with the intent to
all the while smiling at my face
I allow them to think I don't see their smile doesn't reach their...
choosing genuine kindness over the phony
it's easy to be nice if it is returned to you
loving people and making an effort to see the good in people
even if after a while I thought they were worthless
for the sake of peace I put it aside and walk on
vengeance isn't in my hands and I'm grateful
not wanting to make the call
containing my hurt when others inflict harm with the intent to
all the while smiling at my face
I allow them to think I don't see their smile doesn't reach their...
#friendship
#love
42 reads
12 Comments
Inside_Roare
Published
Yesterday 10:06pm
Yesterday 10:06pm
FIRST
INSIDE ROARE
FIRST
Pa - is the first, like snowdrops in spring
v - is like the second, like an eternal search.
lazy - like lazy, not lazy when she brings me coffee in the morning.
Her smile the sun wakes up
The smell of her skin drives me crazy.
In - her eyes I look in vain for what I lost,
laziness - we wash the dust from our eyes, Paolina.
Your eyes and your beautiful mouth that is silent.
i would like to kiss Forever.
Paolinaaaaaaa, the name resonates to the core.
Paolinaaaaaaa, it's no use sobbing, she's not...
FIRST
Pa - is the first, like snowdrops in spring
v - is like the second, like an eternal search.
lazy - like lazy, not lazy when she brings me coffee in the morning.
Her smile the sun wakes up
The smell of her skin drives me crazy.
In - her eyes I look in vain for what I lost,
laziness - we wash the dust from our eyes, Paolina.
Your eyes and your beautiful mouth that is silent.
i would like to kiss Forever.
Paolinaaaaaaa, the name resonates to the core.
Paolinaaaaaaa, it's no use sobbing, she's not...
#emotions
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
#respect
25 reads
1 Comment
I_was_rare_once
Frododile
Frododile
Published
Yesterday 9:28pm
Yesterday 9:28pm
Softly, slowly as the light falls.
Light.
Every good moment begins with pure light.
But like the tides turning,
The light fades into night.
A simple change.
Its just one letter.
One rule changed.
One where all is and one where nothing becomes truer and deeper.
I open my eyes at last.
This year.
This day.
This moment.
I meet my friend again as I breathe in the stiff air of my bedroom.
Another day begun.
Another day to think, to dream, to be.
"You have much to do Mark."
I do!
"We should get up quickly so we don't drift...
Every good moment begins with pure light.
But like the tides turning,
The light fades into night.
A simple change.
Its just one letter.
One rule changed.
One where all is and one where nothing becomes truer and deeper.
I open my eyes at last.
This year.
This day.
This moment.
I meet my friend again as I breathe in the stiff air of my bedroom.
Another day begun.
Another day to think, to dream, to be.
"You have much to do Mark."
I do!
"We should get up quickly so we don't drift...
#anger
#confusion
#denial
9 reads
0 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Published
Yesterday 9:22pm
Yesterday 9:22pm
Night Prayer
#dirty
#erotic
#sex
31 reads
9 Comments
Northern_Soul
-Missy-
-Missy-
Published
Yesterday 8:58pm
Yesterday 8:58pm
Hymn to Druids
That Midsummer evening
I crossed Salisbury Plain on foot
thousands of people
bag checks
sniffer dogs
they blurred into the background
as I saw them there—
the great sarsens, sentry in the Earth
yoked to one another, some toppled
I pressed desperate palms against them
and soaked in all I’d imagined
in every documentary
every school book
felt those blue stones reverberate
as women in red sang melodies
harmonising with the sunset
and the darkness...
I crossed Salisbury Plain on foot
thousands of people
bag checks
sniffer dogs
they blurred into the background
as I saw them there—
the great sarsens, sentry in the Earth
yoked to one another, some toppled
I pressed desperate palms against them
and soaked in all I’d imagined
in every documentary
every school book
felt those blue stones reverberate
as women in red sang melodies
harmonising with the sunset
and the darkness...
#Britain
#pagan
31 reads
1 Comment
Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Published
Yesterday 8:39pm
Yesterday 8:39pm
descrated
(Note to readers: overnight, I seem to have developed a profound injury to my right hand, so I've had to write a poem that just uses the left hand letters. Apologies.)*
beasts at seeded grasses grazed,
at vert swards, barbed warfare crazed,
bravest, wettest crawdads fazed:
zebra, badgers, steeds bedazed.
reeded area: waders tweeted.
vexed debaters cede, reseated.
steadfast traders swayed, retreated;
carers, stewards, beasts - defeated.
afterwards...
ravaged streets were desecrated;
trees, deceased, sat...
beasts at seeded grasses grazed,
at vert swards, barbed warfare crazed,
bravest, wettest crawdads fazed:
zebra, badgers, steeds bedazed.
reeded area: waders tweeted.
vexed debaters cede, reseated.
steadfast traders swayed, retreated;
carers, stewards, beasts - defeated.
afterwards...
ravaged streets were desecrated;
trees, deceased, sat...
#dark
#environment
#NaPoWriMo2024 #war
#NaPoWriMo2024 #war
23 reads
0 Comments
Solomon_Song
Published
Yesterday 8:17pm
Yesterday 8:17pm
A STRIP AND DIP
#holiday
#rhyming
5 reads
0 Comments
Solomon_Song
Published
Yesterday 8:12pm
Yesterday 8:12pm
HOLIDAY LIAISON (NOT AUTOBIOGRAPHICAL)
#holiday
#rhyming
#sex
14 reads
1 Comment
CasketSharpe
Published
Yesterday 8:09pm
Yesterday 8:09pm
Sinister Sins of Poetry
I’m considered by many as half man and half motherfucka
So to you sensitive ass bitches both sides will never love ya’,
“On that starting line so to the disrespectful fucka I’m going in first
Putting in the work so bruh-bruh prepare for the hurt,
“Not only do I have one middle finger, but I have two
No explanation-you know what the sign language translates too,
“So it’s on a motherfucka if they wanna catch a double disrespect
If not take your medicine and go get some uncomfortable rest,
“I send motherfuckas to bed...
So to you sensitive ass bitches both sides will never love ya’,
“On that starting line so to the disrespectful fucka I’m going in first
Putting in the work so bruh-bruh prepare for the hurt,
“Not only do I have one middle finger, but I have two
No explanation-you know what the sign language translates too,
“So it’s on a motherfucka if they wanna catch a double disrespect
If not take your medicine and go get some uncomfortable rest,
“I send motherfuckas to bed...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
24 reads
0 Comments
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