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Spaceboy
Hey you, what are you looking for?
A star struck voyager on his way to Mars?
Hey you, what are you smiling for?
I thought we both were meant to sing the Blues.
And I’ve lost my mind again,
I must have flown far too close to the Sun,
But you were there by my side,
You took the wheels and flew me straight back home.
But Spaceboy you’ve got to go home,
Spaceboy, you’ve got to go on your own,
Spaceboy, you’ve got to go home ,
Time is running out.
I look back now now to the child I was,
Nothing seem to phase me in...
A star struck voyager on his way to Mars?
Hey you, what are you smiling for?
I thought we both were meant to sing the Blues.
And I’ve lost my mind again,
I must have flown far too close to the Sun,
But you were there by my side,
You took the wheels and flew me straight back home.
But Spaceboy you’ve got to go home,
Spaceboy, you’ve got to go on your own,
Spaceboy, you’ve got to go home ,
Time is running out.
I look back now now to the child I was,
Nothing seem to phase me in...
#LifeStruggles
#aging
#nostalgia
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Whisper of the Desert
INSIDE ROAR
Whisper of the Desert
hhhmmmmmm aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
It burns, like a thousand stings in the legs.
He will burn the vision of the oasis to ashes.
hhhmmmmmm aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
It burns, everything around, why did you want it.
Promised Land aaaaa, your compass has lost its needle,
he forgot the way long ago.
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
Baritone: Listen to what the sand whispers to you.
The whisper of the sand will tell you how long your journey will be,
the whisper of the sand will tell...
Whisper of the Desert
hhhmmmmmm aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
It burns, like a thousand stings in the legs.
He will burn the vision of the oasis to ashes.
hhhmmmmmm aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
It burns, everything around, why did you want it.
Promised Land aaaaa, your compass has lost its needle,
he forgot the way long ago.
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
Baritone: Listen to what the sand whispers to you.
The whisper of the sand will tell you how long your journey will be,
the whisper of the sand will tell...
#strength
#motivational
#inspirational
#respect
#emotions
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STEEL LOVE
INSIDE ROARE&NEVERMIND
STEEL LOVE
I feel the heat
the light, then the red cold.
My steel love. ooooh
My steel love.
Steel love, ooooh steel love.
The flexibility, the strength that protects me.
Steel love. oooooooo Steel love.
The profile you have in your hands
it's inside of me.
They cuddled with him
before you make something beautiful out of it.
Steel love, ooooh steel love.
The flexibility, the strength that protects me.
Steel love. oooooooo Steel love.
STEEL LOVE
I feel the heat
the light, then the red cold.
My steel love. ooooh
My steel love.
Steel love, ooooh steel love.
The flexibility, the strength that protects me.
Steel love. oooooooo Steel love.
The profile you have in your hands
it's inside of me.
They cuddled with him
before you make something beautiful out of it.
Steel love, ooooh steel love.
The flexibility, the strength that protects me.
Steel love. oooooooo Steel love.
#motivational
#inspirational
#gratitude
#respect
#emotions
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I can feel my heart beating in your hands
INSIDE ROAR
I can feel my heart beating in your hands
With scraped fingers I lift you from the dust
when my eyes met yours
I didn't believe it could happen.
He put warmth in my hands and I drown in your eyes.
He put luck in my hands and I still don't know.
What's next, hopefully he'll be here tomorrow.
I feel that someone has put a cup of coffee in my hands.¨
I perceive that you are here and I want to be with you further.
I feel my heart beating in your hands
i feel your wet eyes in my hands
I just wanted to hold...
I can feel my heart beating in your hands
With scraped fingers I lift you from the dust
when my eyes met yours
I didn't believe it could happen.
He put warmth in my hands and I drown in your eyes.
He put luck in my hands and I still don't know.
What's next, hopefully he'll be here tomorrow.
I feel that someone has put a cup of coffee in my hands.¨
I perceive that you are here and I want to be with you further.
I feel my heart beating in your hands
i feel your wet eyes in my hands
I just wanted to hold...
#love
#motivational
#inspirational
#respect
#emotions
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Lonely day
INSIDE ROARE
Lonely day
The last spoonful of coffee, the last spoonful of tea.
The last slice of bread to split.
The coffee is bitter, the tea has gone cold a long time ago.
I'm still waiting for the doors to open.
And you'll be back.
A lonely day, it's cold and cruel.
It grips me like a stomach medicine,
why don't you pick up the door handle, it's still open.
I know you will come and I will be able to hug you.
Maybe I should have chosen different last words,
maybe i wasn't honest with you
But my love was...
Lonely day
The last spoonful of coffee, the last spoonful of tea.
The last slice of bread to split.
The coffee is bitter, the tea has gone cold a long time ago.
I'm still waiting for the doors to open.
And you'll be back.
A lonely day, it's cold and cruel.
It grips me like a stomach medicine,
why don't you pick up the door handle, it's still open.
I know you will come and I will be able to hug you.
Maybe I should have chosen different last words,
maybe i wasn't honest with you
But my love was...
#love
#strength
#motivational
#respect
#emotions
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Onzijnen
Another Dutch/English one:
Er is veel eer gerelateerd geweld
Tegen Syrische vrouwen en meisjes
Mogelijk ook nog femicide
Toch nog sex toerisme reisjes?
Thailand spant de kroon - klinkt morbide
Hoe je als man munt uit hun kruis kunt slaan
Het uithuwelijken is bonafide
Gegadigden komen te voet en gaan
Pijlsnel als ze horen hoeveel geld…..
Beschaving komt al gauw in het nauw
Wie neemt het op voor de Syrische vrouw
W9jan2024
There is a lot of honor-related violence ...
Er is veel eer gerelateerd geweld
Tegen Syrische vrouwen en meisjes
Mogelijk ook nog femicide
Toch nog sex toerisme reisjes?
Thailand spant de kroon - klinkt morbide
Hoe je als man munt uit hun kruis kunt slaan
Het uithuwelijken is bonafide
Gegadigden komen te voet en gaan
Pijlsnel als ze horen hoeveel geld…..
Beschaving komt al gauw in het nauw
Wie neemt het op voor de Syrische vrouw
W9jan2024
There is a lot of honor-related violence ...
#MothersDay
#HumanRights
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Dentist
Hoi hoi
Hope this finds you well…
This time, another Dutch/English one:
Dentist
It was in late December around
The time the Savior was born
That my dentist kindly asked me
Gus, didn’t your girlfriend shave?
Tandarts
Het was eind december rond
De tijd dat de Heiland was geboren
Dat mijn tandarts mij vriendelijk vroeg
Gus, heeft je vriendin zich niet geschoren?
Hope you’ll like it!
Kind regards, Gus
Hope this finds you well…
This time, another Dutch/English one:
Dentist
It was in late December around
The time the Savior was born
That my dentist kindly asked me
Gus, didn’t your girlfriend shave?
Tandarts
Het was eind december rond
De tijd dat de Heiland was geboren
Dat mijn tandarts mij vriendelijk vroeg
Gus, heeft je vriendin zich niet geschoren?
Hope you’ll like it!
Kind regards, Gus
#myself
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The world of children's eyes.
INSIDE ROARE
The world of children's eyes.
What is hidden in your beautiful eyes?
A world of balloons and lots of sweets.
Maybe a chocolate castle, a marzipan prince.
A pink room, full of toys.
I know I can't do everything you want.
I know I can't live with you forever.
That a prince will come on a white horse
and he will take you away and I will be alone.
Only your twinkle in your beautiful eyes will remain.
What is hidden in your beautiful eyes?
Full of love and small sacrifices.
A mouth...
The world of children's eyes.
What is hidden in your beautiful eyes?
A world of balloons and lots of sweets.
Maybe a chocolate castle, a marzipan prince.
A pink room, full of toys.
I know I can't do everything you want.
I know I can't live with you forever.
That a prince will come on a white horse
and he will take you away and I will be alone.
Only your twinkle in your beautiful eyes will remain.
What is hidden in your beautiful eyes?
Full of love and small sacrifices.
A mouth...
#happiness
#love
#motivational
#respect
#emotions
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Long-Legged Woman - Blues Lyrics
She was a long-legged woman and she broke my heart
Took all of my lovin and then she tore it apart
She was a long-legged woman. Lord please deliver me!
She was a long-legged woman she was black as sin
Knocking on my door till I finally let her in
She was a long-legged woman. Lord, please deliver me!
She was a long-legged woman with a pretty pair of jugs
I asked her pretty please, can I have a little hug.
She was a long-legged woman, Lord, please deliver me!
She was a long-legged woman, she climbed on for a ride
I...
Took all of my lovin and then she tore it apart
She was a long-legged woman. Lord please deliver me!
She was a long-legged woman she was black as sin
Knocking on my door till I finally let her in
She was a long-legged woman. Lord, please deliver me!
She was a long-legged woman with a pretty pair of jugs
I asked her pretty please, can I have a little hug.
She was a long-legged woman, Lord, please deliver me!
She was a long-legged woman, she climbed on for a ride
I...
#love
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I NEVER BELIEVE
INSIDE ROAR
I NEVER BELIEVE
I watch the handle daily to see if it doesn't move,
every day I can barely breathe when the bell rings next door.
You already annoy me with your eternal promises
I don't trust you anymore.
I don't believe you'll find my door
I don't believe you'll ever ring.
you just used me
and I have a surprise for you.
After nights of tears and early awakenings
I realize how disappointed I was in you.
You don't care about me or your little happiness
you're just a cocky dustman ruining girls'...
I NEVER BELIEVE
I watch the handle daily to see if it doesn't move,
every day I can barely breathe when the bell rings next door.
You already annoy me with your eternal promises
I don't trust you anymore.
I don't believe you'll find my door
I don't believe you'll ever ring.
you just used me
and I have a surprise for you.
After nights of tears and early awakenings
I realize how disappointed I was in you.
You don't care about me or your little happiness
you're just a cocky dustman ruining girls'...
#love
#motivational
#inspirational
#respect
#emotions
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Blue Until Black
Boy grew up quick
In a home without warmth
Memories of a mother he never met
A gypsy lady long drowned
His father remained
Half alive from the Great War
So he turned to liquor to kill the ones
That haunted his bedroom
The mines gave life
But stole everything in return
So many coughing up what kills them
Black lung laughing along
The boy went without
His clothes hanging onto ribs
Blacked up from his father’s warning
The boot is love as they say
One day he said enough
Took a rod and...
In a home without warmth
Memories of a mother he never met
A gypsy lady long drowned
His father remained
Half alive from the Great War
So he turned to liquor to kill the ones
That haunted his bedroom
The mines gave life
But stole everything in return
So many coughing up what kills them
Black lung laughing along
The boy went without
His clothes hanging onto ribs
Blacked up from his father’s warning
The boot is love as they say
One day he said enough
Took a rod and...
#narrative
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The Spoils
Led to temptation
Born low in uncertain times
Where society chooses who lingers
And who gets forgotten
Men are no longer men
They assassinate and duplicate
Push down on all who differ
Rabid like starving rats
The women regress
Rather kill then grow together
They become ever quick to assimilate
Change don’t come in hate
Slander rules the realm
And so goes human decency
Traded in for fortune and validation
Empty like we the people
Who recalls your name
Who helps you when your down ...
Born low in uncertain times
Where society chooses who lingers
And who gets forgotten
Men are no longer men
They assassinate and duplicate
Push down on all who differ
Rabid like starving rats
The women regress
Rather kill then grow together
They become ever quick to assimilate
Change don’t come in hate
Slander rules the realm
And so goes human decency
Traded in for fortune and validation
Empty like we the people
Who recalls your name
Who helps you when your down ...
#dystopian
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