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Going.

Dark shoulder of sky on moors
shrugs
I sink under its sullen pool,
quick to heal in one heavy dive.
Tomorrow I will lie down with the king.

Written by Merda

Published on Feb 7 2010 at 16:18 CST. Read all poems by Merda
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Metaphorical and classy

Written on 02/08/10 at 05:58:06 CST by Jack Heslop

Your metaphorical imagery astounds here, and the central meaning is wrapped in haunted layers. Classy and hypnotic.

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Written on 02/08/10 at 11:36:23 CST by Merda

Thanks Jack :]

i've read this one a few times now

Written on 02/12/10 at 16:46:32 CST by tijean

and it pulls me in every time.

I'm not sure that i get it, but the last line makes me think very deeply indeed.

The visual imagery at the start hits me and this little verse (and I don't mean that as condescending at all)....says SO much.

I like - one for my list!

S

wow

Written on 02/12/10 at 22:06:41 CST by priya dileep

i almost kick myself why i missed this, its just fine classy poetry with astounding brevity, love it every bit Merda!

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