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Hey hey hey ! No one fucks like you!!!!!
Who makes love to you, like me?
Who sucks your dick like me?
Who loves you like me ?
No mother fucking no one !!!!!
My love for you is unique
The way I make love to you baby! unique !!!
My pussy always wet by a sentence of yours !
When you are inside me Hahahhaha fireworks !!!!!!
So bitches!!!! Hear this !!!
I don't give a fuck about you!!!!!
My man! Is all mine and you bitch ; you! Can't compete hahhahahahha because I am the real deal and you! You Are a big question mark only!!!!
Drama Queen Hahahaha Get alive and move out of the way so you don't get runover by my Range Rover!!!!!
Published 25th Sep 2016
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25th Sep 2016 5:08am
25th Sep 2016 9:42am
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25th Sep 2016 7:23am
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25th Sep 2016 9:41am
25th Sep 2016 9:21am
Latina hackles rise - good ranting way to speak to the rivals, especially those guilty of cosmetically enhancing themselves in ways you have not.
Like the appeal to the uniqueness of true one-man-one-woman love.
Like the appeal to the uniqueness of true one-man-one-woman love.
25th Sep 2016 9:40am
25th Sep 2016 6:56pm
25th Sep 2016 10:15pm
I get that this is obviously straight-off-the-cuff, you-write-as-you-think-it stuff, with no editing or attempt at style, and writing like that can produce some good poetry. This, however, is just a rant. It feels like the record of one half of a conversation in a Facebook chat box. I don't really like saying what is and isn't poetry, but I feel that a poem should have strong images, a consistent structure, and something which makes it unique.
Not necessarily original - I doubt that any English poems are well and truly, 100% original these days - but unique in that it creates a distinctive voice, a persona, or even just an image that sticks in the mind, as in haiku. If you want to write poetry that's memorable, I suggest that you work on producing straightforward sentences, thinking about imagery, how many verses you want, etc. All critique is JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read. - Jack xxx
Not necessarily original - I doubt that any English poems are well and truly, 100% original these days - but unique in that it creates a distinctive voice, a persona, or even just an image that sticks in the mind, as in haiku. If you want to write poetry that's memorable, I suggest that you work on producing straightforward sentences, thinking about imagery, how many verses you want, etc. All critique is JMHO, of course. Thank you for the read. - Jack xxx
26th Sep 2016 3:33pm
...you should seriously think about condensing your unique good loving into a liquid form and make a profit. lol... Do yo thang! :)
Pen On~
Pen On~
30th Sep 2016 11:31am
I though about it!!! I love your comments and yours poems are amazing. They inspire me. Thanks
