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I See You

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Tell me how you feel about me  
Even though we might've just met.  
Where you're from and where you will be,
And I'll tell you that I see you.  
   
If you ask me how I'm doing,  
And you hope I'll say I'm fine too,  
Let's pretend you're dying to know  
And I'll tell you that I see you.  
   
Rolling along, are we merely    
Rolling along, just to only  
See where it blows, anything goes,  
Sail the ocean, seasick motion.  
   
Walking the tide, shoes in our hands,  
You've got a taste, a frosty brew  
While I kick at crabs at my feet  
Till the moment when I see you.  
   
Passing the time, are we merely    
Passing the time, just to only  
Keep us apart, no heart-to-heart,  
Skip the factors, we two actors  
   
Sit 'neath a tree sharing the shade,  
Clearing your throat just like before,  
Combing my hair, don't have it made  
For the moment when I see you.  
   
   
   
This is a humorous song I wrote, a take on some cultures that when you're greeted, instead of giving a list of how you're doing, you simply reply "I see you."  I love that.  
   
The song has a cadence, a meter where each line throughout is 1-2-3-4, 1-2-3-4. Stanzas 3 & 5 are the refrains.    
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Written by Jade-Pandora (jade tiger)
Published | Edited 28th Jul 2016
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