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Soft Breathing
Soft breathing in the dark,
Warm body next to me
You shift and moan softly
Reliving our earlier passion?
Warm body next to me
You shift and moan softly
Reliving our earlier passion?
Published 13th Dec 2015
| Edited 17th Dec 2015
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13th Dec 2015 7:42pm
I like this a lot..the sounds of a lovers solo sex an arrousing..yet invasive feeling..you have penned it lovely.
The last question..is that supposed to be our? Or...the or is an interesting
Take..
Either way..
Well done
Thank you for your RL and comp entry..loved it!
Jennifer
The last question..is that supposed to be our? Or...the or is an interesting
Take..
Either way..
Well done
Thank you for your RL and comp entry..loved it!
Jennifer
17th Dec 2015 6:26pm
The "or" is interesting isn't it? But alas I didn't intend that.
Thank you for the comments and the crit, I have added a "u" but kind of reluctantly. It may change again as your comment was very thought provoking.
Thanks for your warm welcome, I am enjoying this experience.
Richard
Thank you for the comments and the crit, I have added a "u" but kind of reluctantly. It may change again as your comment was very thought provoking.
Thanks for your warm welcome, I am enjoying this experience.
Richard
