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When...
When time was young and fish were wise
a little boy would guard the boats
that his people used for gathering food
while their gods watched above from skies
that laid closer to the water & earth,
for this was where the wind came to rest
and the sea caressed the edge of the world,
and blessed those who trusted in the rhythm
of life until the cycle of death would
come and set them free, to watch over
a little boy who guarded the boats
when time was young and fish were wise.
Image: my poem was inspired by this photo from my friend Bernie Medina.
Published 22nd Nov 2015
| Edited 26th Mar 2017
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22nd Nov 2015 1:35pm
The voice in which this piece is written is so fluid and calming that the full circle the story takes makes perfect sense...
Wonderful job!
Wonderful job!
23rd Nov 2015 10:06am
Another insightful, delightful, and very supportive comment about my word craft... your words are so very much appreciated, thank you, dear!
p.s. btw, the voice you hear in this piece with its fluid and calming effects is exactly how the poem came to me when I began to compose it. <3
p.s. btw, the voice you hear in this piece with its fluid and calming effects is exactly how the poem came to me when I began to compose it. <3
23rd Nov 2015 9:32am
Beautiful photo to be inspired by. It reflects the endless nature of sea and sky, and the bountiful beauty thereof.
23rd Nov 2015 9:52am
Oh yes... the moment I saw this photograph, the poem came to me and I had it written and completed in about 20 minutes. Later, Bernie entered this photo in a National Geographics worldwide competition and it placed first in its category. Another photo he submitted won Grand Prize, and his success in placing with both photos got him a trip (with other photographers who had placed in other categories) to the Galapagos Islands. Bernie has been so many places around the globe. The photo featured here as the preview piece was taken somewhere in China.
23rd Nov 2015 8:39pm
25th Nov 2015 00:09am
I'm very glad that you shared your thoughts of this piece with me, thank you so much.
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