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Taste My Rainbow
The pink one is pretty,
Its for me to forget
That awful vengeful night
The one I will forever regret
The blue one tastes awful
but wow the high is real
To try not to remember
all that was forced to feel
The red is for the demons
that caused the most pain
Those never go away
and then its another pill, again
The yellow is the best, its my most fave
makes me able to not think
Sometimes I take 2 of these
And wash them down with a drink
The purple and green make me mean
and the white makes it alright
to try and wake up the next day, and begin another losing fight....
Its for me to forget
That awful vengeful night
The one I will forever regret
The blue one tastes awful
but wow the high is real
To try not to remember
all that was forced to feel
The red is for the demons
that caused the most pain
Those never go away
and then its another pill, again
The yellow is the best, its my most fave
makes me able to not think
Sometimes I take 2 of these
And wash them down with a drink
The purple and green make me mean
and the white makes it alright
to try and wake up the next day, and begin another losing fight....
Published 26th Sep 2015
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26th Sep 2015 9:44pm
26th Sep 2015 10:15pm
26th Sep 2015 10:55pm
All the colors of pharmaceuticals, a pill for every occasion. Sounds like my own stash. I'm having to get off the yellows at this point, sad to say.
"The purple and green make me mean
and the white makes it alright
to try and wake up the next day, and begin another losing fight...."
Trying to strike the right med balance is a complicated and often futile process. That's a grim conclusion to "Taste" but that's reality for you. Your sardonic tone is spot on. Excellent!
"The purple and green make me mean
and the white makes it alright
to try and wake up the next day, and begin another losing fight...."
Trying to strike the right med balance is a complicated and often futile process. That's a grim conclusion to "Taste" but that's reality for you. Your sardonic tone is spot on. Excellent!
26th Sep 2015 11:09pm
This rainbow no longer exists for me, however it did for many many a year....Theres only one left....its the white one and I only need them every so often. I am quite proud of myself....My love affair with my "rainbow" was a deep one....
Do I miss them...fuck yes I do....<3
Do I miss them...fuck yes I do....<3
27th Sep 2015 11:45am
I'd like to taste a rainbow, but of a different kind! Lol. This though was sad, still I'm happy you've overcome this darkness my dear :)
27th Sep 2015 7:27pm
Thanks deary. Some days are darker than others thats for sure, however...I feel damn good lately. <3
27th Sep 2015 10:03pm
good stuff here, lady
it's hard sometimes to write about a serious subject using an A-B scheme. I think, in a way, on some level our brains are conditioned to read such schemes with an air of nursary ryhme
the title is very clever and the way you explain each colour pill and what they do is very good also and I don't think any of the seriousness is lost to scheme
on a constructive note, I find that sometimes when using an A-B scheme a syllable count is important because sometimes an extra syllable on a line can knock the flow of a whole stanza
however, I think you've done a pretty good job here
fair play
it's hard sometimes to write about a serious subject using an A-B scheme. I think, in a way, on some level our brains are conditioned to read such schemes with an air of nursary ryhme
the title is very clever and the way you explain each colour pill and what they do is very good also and I don't think any of the seriousness is lost to scheme
on a constructive note, I find that sometimes when using an A-B scheme a syllable count is important because sometimes an extra syllable on a line can knock the flow of a whole stanza
however, I think you've done a pretty good job here
fair play
30th Sep 2015 1:55am
Thank you. I actually came up with in like minutes so yes I agree with you...and the whole sing songy way of reading it is true..Sometimes my bran just refuses to slow down. Seeing you in my comments is always a major compliment. <3
30th Sep 2015 2:00am
I've just realized that the poem is not an A-B scheme, my eyes just assumed such and my brain ran with the air. ...what kind of witch-craft have you crafted here!!
1st Oct 2015 3:37am
11th Oct 2015 9:39am
I love this poem and how it reads makes it feel a little like a song. You do have quite the rainbow of pills. I stick to white ones that are shaped like tic-tac but taste like dirt but lately they don't work. love the poem.
Thank for sharing
Thank for sharing
11th Oct 2015 8:33pm
Thanks for reading, DP. Yeah pills are bad for you. Even the ones that work. I dont take any as of today. <3
13th Oct 2015 10:46am
13th Oct 2015 9:31pm
19th Dec 2015 11:47am
Well I guess I'm gonna jump in with both feet... unfortunately, I have to take meds. Or in a straight jacket I'll go! It's always an exciting day! Get 'em, arrive home & switch old for new. Yeah, been on ' em since before forever. Settle in, pour over every detail in the info sheet, gotta get it right. Finally the deeds done, take a dose & chaos calms. Chillin, no padded walls today! LoL. I've accomplished massively cutting the dose & staying out of the hospital for 7yrs.. Pat on the back for me. But it reminded me. How I identify which is which by color & taste so as not to confuse my dumbass! I know this is a serious write, but for me, it was an enjoyable read! I know I know, I'm crazier than an outhouse rat. LoL! Your an engaging tempt of a true poetess!💊 SURVIVOR➰
20th Dec 2015 11:50pm
I still have the white ones. They help with my PTSD. Talking about it helps to, however not too many people in my real life know about it. I vent and get it out here, in my writing. Thank you sweetie. And you are no crazier than any of us here darlin. <3
22nd Dec 2015 2:30pm
Nobody but my husband & doctor's know of my personal struggles. Only thru DU & anonymity I've felt safe enough to let it go! I'm starting to realize, in here, everybody's a nut LoL! ➰
23rd Dec 2015 3:07am
I agree with the personal struggles and only your husband knowing. Only mine and my therapist knows about mine and both thought it would be good for to let some of out here. So I am.Its not easy and makes me have anxiety really bad, however, I am feeling better about it. <3 hugs
