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[ HH ] Unclean
Can you please point out to me
which way the wind is blowing?
The weathervane atop the trailer
seems to be broken
Not quite certain whether I am coming or going
knowing I just can't seem to sit still
while time speeds up in a peculiar slowing
I'm not clean
neglected like an infected rash
I'm not clean
Doctor needles strewn about
a heaping of white trash
Can you please tell me
will the sun ever shine in the sky again?
The darn shades in my room
refuse to roll up for some odd reason
Maybe I should take it as a sign
It's no longer Sunny season
I'm not clean
---a life sized doll overgrown by crabgrass
I'm not clean
Beetles drowning in a discarded
glass beer bottle
Mama
She had a baby
and its head popped off
I said,
Mama had a baby
and its head popped off
Deflowered
by his loving hands
that began to choke and throttle
Nothing special
now just like any other weed
Papa,
Was it everything you hoped for?
Like your precious medicine
you insist you can't live without
and always seem to need?
Published 14th Apr 2015
| Edited 9th Nov 2021
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Anonymous
- Edited 14th Apr 2015 7:27pm
14th Apr 2015 7:25pm
this is deep and subtle, like a child crying in the closet.
Slight change suggested:
"a life sized doll lying overgrown in the grass".
do you mean "BY" the grass? The way you have it written with "in" reads like the doll is the thing overgrown. perhaps move "overgrown" in front of "grass"
Very touching poem.
Slight change suggested:
"a life sized doll lying overgrown in the grass".
do you mean "BY" the grass? The way you have it written with "in" reads like the doll is the thing overgrown. perhaps move "overgrown" in front of "grass"
Very touching poem.
Anonymous
14th Apr 2015 10:05pm
I wondered if it was a murder case, yes. I could see that. and the doll being her. I didn't mention it because I watch too many paranormal series on TV, and figured I might be just reading too much into it. But hey, you put it through to this reader successfully anyway. :)
