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Coldly
[center]How am I supposed to be, anything but cold and calculating.
Why did I lose my heart, when did the numbness start?
Surely it crept in slowly, making me act so coldly
I'm still sorry for anything I've done, I'm not the same one
Imitating it's abuse on me, I'll try to make you see
I'm not exactly what I used to be, this is a new demon
And it lives in me
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Why did I lose my heart, when did the numbness start?
Surely it crept in slowly, making me act so coldly
I'm still sorry for anything I've done, I'm not the same one
Imitating it's abuse on me, I'll try to make you see
I'm not exactly what I used to be, this is a new demon
And it lives in me
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Published 28th Feb 2015
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28th Feb 2015 6:56pm
Brilliant write.. beautifully executed.. maybe i was wrong you're very good with your rhymes.. i should change it you don't have to rhyme every line.. incorporate a little of both.. if that makes sense.. great ink..
Dave
Dave
28th Feb 2015 7:06pm
Thanks very much, rhyming just comes so naturally that it's so hard to not. I don't know if that makes any sense either XD
well, anyway, it does make sense, I get what you mean.
well, anyway, it does make sense, I get what you mean.
1st Mar 2015 8:34pm
This seems like your signature piece. I been writing for awhile and still don't know mine, lol. Maybe "Just a Puppet" if i would guess mine :-/
Anyway a great write :-) keep moving your writing with this style. It will get you far
Anyway a great write :-) keep moving your writing with this style. It will get you far
3rd Mar 2015 4:28am
I don't really know about signature piece, I think I'm still growing, I hope to get better. Thanks though, I will.
