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A Brunch Feedback
No empty tables on the first floor-
Space only for more giggles from chatter,
And the sleek modular steps in wooden,
Spread upwards like the leaked cheese,
Providing an interim greeting to my eager tongue,
I am confused and I am hungry.
The silence broke the discipline-
Amidst confusing china walls,
Full of complicated and so-called craft,
Peeping me in a curious way,
While I glanced at the chrome-plated legs,
Sexier than those blonde ones downstairs.
The burger arrived in juxtaposition-
And I crushed the build with the French army,
Appropriately delicious in my country of taste,
The only intruder that diminished my glory,
Intervened my coke in its medicated smell,
I walked outside & I hated the wet-clean floors.
Jack & Viddax inspired me to compose this one even though I never thought of doing it before. So I have not been able to impart complete justice to the same but then I thought not to hide it from my DUP readers.
Space only for more giggles from chatter,
And the sleek modular steps in wooden,
Spread upwards like the leaked cheese,
Providing an interim greeting to my eager tongue,
I am confused and I am hungry.
The silence broke the discipline-
Amidst confusing china walls,
Full of complicated and so-called craft,
Peeping me in a curious way,
While I glanced at the chrome-plated legs,
Sexier than those blonde ones downstairs.
The burger arrived in juxtaposition-
And I crushed the build with the French army,
Appropriately delicious in my country of taste,
The only intruder that diminished my glory,
Intervened my coke in its medicated smell,
I walked outside & I hated the wet-clean floors.
Jack & Viddax inspired me to compose this one even though I never thought of doing it before. So I have not been able to impart complete justice to the same but then I thought not to hide it from my DUP readers.
Published 10th Mar 2011
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10th Mar 2011 10:44am
i was just about to comment that the poem reminds me of Jack's one!!
it was amazing!
it was amazing!
10th Mar 2011 10:47am
Jack spake of a vivid description of the staff, Viddax about his jet-lag, so I tried to concentrate on the non-living objects in the burger-joint and that too from my own point of view. I am more than excited even if I can be compared to one third of Jack's one:-)
Anonymous
21st Mar 2011 9:45am
I like it a lot. Filled with the most colourful details, and a lot sweeter than my cynical piece. A pleasent and witty and clever poem.
21st Mar 2011 9:52am
