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» note to my submissive
note to my submissive
i try to break you
bring you to your knees
you resist the thoughts
i say i need
i often try to make you show
the true submissive you bestow
you hold true to your beliefs
but never the less i know what you seek
you play the part but say you don,t like
the thought of me putting you down
for the wrongs you have done
you resist the facts that i want you to be
my sweet woman who listens to me
so just remember to do as your told
never talk back or criticize me
as you know what i will do
to take control of you
Written by carlg
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Published 10th April 2013 9:20pm
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Re: note to my submissive
Read Poems by CAOS737
on 10th December 2013 5:02pm
Had me for a bit... then kinda lost me? Some bumps in the tempo and it drifted further n further till it eventually went sour... keep grindin
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