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What separates a good erotic poem from a shitty porn poem?

chump
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they are separated by about 10 inches...

Vandel_Viaclovsky
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they are separated by about 10 inches... - ha admittedly i laughed at that, course i assume we are talking about internet inches here....err but nevermind.

As to the topic at hand, there are ways to write beautiful crassness and crassness beautifully.  Most "erotic" writing is absolute rubbish, of course, and should probably automatically send a fatal shock thru the computer to anyone who tries to publish it in any fashion.  And besides, using poetry to get your jollies is daft anyway, as there are a great many better ways available.

JohnnyBlaze
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A successful poem in itself is one that is read multiple times and revisited again and again. That is the goal you should be aiming for, no matter what your subject is. The quality of an erotic poem like any other poem suffers when its exists only for the sake of filler in your portfolio or to make you the day's topic of conversation at the water cooler.


poet Anonymous

The way people see it is what makes the difference. But the way who writes it is more important.

poet Anonymous

Erotica:
Shitty/Porn/Smut = written with a target audience, for an audience in mind with very plain direct language, most often its read as a step by step guide.
Good/Subtle/Eloquent=  Written from the soul with very personal references, most often ambiguous/metaphorical imagery as if its a language only between the writer and his/her muse.

The best way I can summarize, smut takes everything off and walks around naked, the good, the bad and the ugly 'hangin'.
where Good Erotica shows hints of nudity layered with fine gauze tempting the reader to pursue to uncover slowly the layers of beauty.

MllePogany
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Not sure, but I hope to learn by practicing... the points Johnny Blaze and Rina made resonate with me!

UnleashedHeathen
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The size of the cock.

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Vocabulary

Poetryman
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Poetryman
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My first rule of erotic poetry, for me to follow, not necessarily everyone else, is to not use dirty words, especially the 3 C's. I've developed my style over many years and have made a list of my erotic poems in my library. Reading them is the best way I can suggest to understand how I like to write them. Metaphors and analogies that suggest passion with imagery that does more than paint nudity. Here's my list, though not all of them are strictly erotic,
some just have sexual themes that I categorized as erotic because there are not enough categories to be more specific.
Not sure if the links are clickable but you can copy and paste them if they are not.

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/236083-erotic-poems-list/

you be the judge...
 
a Flower BLOOMS to Spring into the Flames of Summer's Heat!  
5/1/2016  
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/237097-a-flower-blooms-to-spring-into-the/  
 
unseen in a dream            
4/12/2016            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/235283-unseen-in-a-dream/  
         
the Muse and the Mate            
4/8/2016            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/234904-the-muse-and-the-mate/          
           
Seducing the Muse            
4/6/2016              
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/234747-seducing-the-muse/          
           
Erotica Pornographa            
3/20/2016            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/233148-erotica-pornographa/          
           
Who Me? Maybe...            
2/8/2016            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/229276-wh-me-never/          
           
Natural Delights            
1/29/2016            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/228520-natural-delights/          
           
Last Meal            
/127/2016            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/228316-last-meal/          
           
Funny Bone            
1/20/2016          
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/227735-funny-bone-for-calamity-gins-comp/          
   
Taste the Poetry Within My Rhyme            
11/10/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/220921-taste-the-poetry-within-my-rhyme/          
           
blue eyes arise            
10/29/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/219979-blue-eyes-arise/          
           
of thunder and lightning            
8/7/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/212654-of-thunder-and-lightning/          
           
Bored with Porn            
6/6/2015                      
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/206630-bored-with-porn/          
   
burning desire            
5/29/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/205899-burning-desire/          
         
Cherry Blossoms            
5/24/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/205378-cherry-blossoms/          
   
Selfie-Porn            
5/25/20/2015                    
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/205002-selfie-porn/          
   
Enthralled            
5/4/2015                                                
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/203346-enthralled/          
   
Under the Skin            
4/8/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/200680-under-the-skin/                                            
   
Last Supper                        
2/27/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/196540-last-supper/        
           
Strings Attached            
2/13/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/195001-strings-attached/                                              
   
Whatever Happened To, "and then you die"?  (DARK)                  
2/7/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/194220-whatever-happended-to-and-then-you-die/            
   
Graybows Spill Teardrops Across My Thirsting Lips            
1/29/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/193109-graybows-spill-teardrops-across-my-lips/                                            
   
Vampires Tore You Apart  (DARK)                      
1/22/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/192345-vampires-tore-you-apart---for-comp/            
   
Sleeping Beauty                      
1/20/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/192157-sleeping-beauty/            
   
Deep Secrets            
1/18/2015            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/191932-deep-secrets-anonemouse/      

Poetryman
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Mechanically Inclined (collab w Naathalie)                      
12/18/2014            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/188406-mechanically-inclined-collaboration/            
   
Masturbating Reminds Me I Am                      
10/24/2014            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/181686-masterbating-reminds-me-i-am/            
   
I Remember When                      
8/26/2014            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/175072-i-remember-when/            
   
Rain Drops On My Head                      
7/12/2014            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/169535-rain-drops-on-my-head/            
   
Myst-air-E-girl                      
5/13/2014            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/161953-myst-air-e-girl/            
   
Rain Beneath the Rainbow                      
5/11/2014            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/161663-rain-beneath-the-rainbow/            
   
Secret Sins                      
11/10/2013          
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/135452-secret-sins/            
   
Scratch Your Mark on My Tree                    
7/7/2013            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/116659-scratch-your-mark-on-my-tree/            
   
Madam Lark of Night                      
5/20/2013            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/107822-madam-lark-of-night/            
         
Unwrapping Your Toys                      
12/20/2012            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/81059-unwrapping-your-toys/            
   
T 4 2                                                
10/18/2012            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/72869-t-4-2/            
   
Crescent Blu Moon            
4/1/2011            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/30475-crescent-blu-moon/        
                                     
of Feathers and Fantasy            
3/28/2011            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/26128-of-feathers-and-fantasy/            
   
Fair Lucy St. Anne                                                
6/9/2010            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/34665-fair-lucy-st-anne/            
   
Swing Set            
7/22/1999          
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/209327-swing-set/          
   
Un-stately Swans                                                
2/15/1995            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/232115-un-stately-swans/            
   
As A Matter Of Fact Or Fiction                                                  
12/4/1989            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/27172-as-a-matter-of-fact-or-fiction/            
   
Odd Years          
1989          
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/59305-odd-years/            
   
Bar Fly                  
8/12/1989            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/27948-bar-fly/            
   
The Difference Between Night And Day                                                
12/21/1987            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/26147-the-difference-between-night-and-day/            
   
Two Friends From the Past            
1/3/1987            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/211172-two-friends-from-the-past/          
   
Off The Wall Lovers                                                
11/11/1986            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/26148-off-the-wall-lovers/            
   
Two Hearts Melt Like a Box of Chocolates on a Steaming Radiator            
1986          
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/229125-two-hearts-melt-like-a-box-of/                            
           
Too Hard To Overlook          
1986          
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/209244-too-hard-to-overlook/          
   
Tickle My Nose            
1985          
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/59307-tickle-my-nose/            
   
Fantasy Lovers                  
11/1/1983            
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/26422-fantasy-lovers/

Well, there you have it, 33 years of sexual dysfunction...
JJ

Whispers
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Haha I agree
The size of the cock

CasketSharpe
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If it doesn't leave an aftermath mental feeling of wanting to be balls deep. Then its just a hole without a crack.

Eric_Campbell
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For me, I'd say not knowing its erotic. Making the reader question why they're aroused when really you've said nothing straight forward enough to excite that in them

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The words used

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