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I'm a noob. I need honest feedback.
For the moment be more relaxed,consider writing about every day events/things. Withdraw the word Jew say stingy if you think you are but do not pass the description to others Jew or gentile; However you have some ideas . It takes time and do not be pushed too hard.it does not work, you are or, you are not !Good luck.
your boyfriend probably just wants you to write because he knows how good of a thing writing can be. and if it makes you happy why shouldnt you write? 
if you don't like your poetry though don't worry so much about writing it. poetry doesn't have to rhyme or be good or do anything for you to enjoy it 4real 4real carry on. i'll give your poetry a read
if you don't like your poetry though don't worry so much about writing it. poetry doesn't have to rhyme or be good or do anything for you to enjoy it 4real 4real carry on. i'll give your poetry a read
I agree with Kexby about the 'Jew' simile, BPE. I don't think one can say that just because a word is used as a slang term, that makes it OK. There are plenty of words that were once common slang, the 'n' word being a glaring example, but which are now seen as highly racially offensive terms, and 'Jew', in the way you used it in that simile, definitely falls into that category. I've suggested an alternative in my comments on that poem.
Apart from that I've made few technical suggestions on your individual poems which I hope will be of general help with your writing. I also agree that it would be a good idea to try to vary the tone and subject matter of your writing. You certainly have some ability, but poetry doesn't always have to be a torrent of extreme emotional anguish. There are other things to write about.
Apart from that I've made few technical suggestions on your individual poems which I hope will be of general help with your writing. I also agree that it would be a good idea to try to vary the tone and subject matter of your writing. You certainly have some ability, but poetry doesn't always have to be a torrent of extreme emotional anguish. There are other things to write about.
