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Orgasm Haiku

poet Anonymous

Write one or a series of haikus which describe how an orgasm feels. No judging will take place.

rayheinrich
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  good


poet Anonymous

Does one word strictly count as a haiku? Or is it just one word?

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:)

poet Anonymous

too soon
to know I wasn't finished
with you yet

rayheinrich
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"Does one word strictly count as a haiku? Or is it just one word?"

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Well, technically, words aren't sentient;  
so it's impossible for them to count.

But, joking aside, it's certainly possible for one word to be a haiku.
My 'good' probably isn't a haiku as much as an answer.

Haiku's are comparisons/realizations.
This usually requires a least two parts.
But when the second part can be inferred, then one word works just fine.

A one word haiku:

rain -

(of course this assumes you don't count the 'cut mark' '-' as a word)


To make my 'good' haiku into one that requires no assumptions of context
you'd have to say:


orgasm -
good


And while I thought my haiku: 'good' was, well, good;
I thought jaylyne's haiku ' ' was much better.

A non-contextual version of jaylyne's would be:

orgasm -



Are emoticons words or symbols?  If they're symbols, then the above
is a one word haiku and the one above that is a zero word haiku.
(Words, of course, are symbols.)


poet Anonymous

she rode the shotgun
BLAM
crickets chirped much louder

+

Cum
together
Come

+

The dark
your spark
a cigarette

+

your eyes not open
peaceful blossom
i did it anyway

+

morning
milk of the skin
again, again

+

feast
switching the bathroom light
i can see your back turned

+

In a word
i could not feel
so good

PierreTheMad
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Effulgent
She basks in quiet
In ascent

-----

Bright eyes closed
Flowers dropped onto a pond
Aloft on tiny wakes

Rae_Louise_Jones
Rachel Louise Jones
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Don't know how it feels,
Still waiting to discover,
Good things come to those...?

poet Anonymous

[quote]le rayon du biscuit said:
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"Does one word strictly count as a haiku? Or is it just one word?"

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Well, technically, words aren't sentient;  
so it's impossible for them to count.

But, joking aside, it's certainly possible for one word to be a haiku.
My 'good' probably isn't a haiku as much as an answer.

Haiku's are comparisons/realizations.
This usually requires a least two parts.
But when the second part can be inferred, then one word works just fine.

A one word haiku:

rain -

(of course this assumes you don't count the 'cut mark' '-' as a word)


To make my 'good' haiku into one that requires no assumptions of context
you'd have to say:


orgasm -
good


And while I thought my haiku: 'good' was, well, good;
I thought jaylyne's haiku ' ' was much better.

A non-contextual version of jaylyne's would be:

orgasm -



Are emoticons words or symbols?  If they're symbols, then the above
is a one word haiku and the one above that is a zero word haiku.
(Words, of course, are symbols.)



[font=Verdana]Yes, my central problem was with the context. I imagined reading a book of haiku, with the word "good" simply adorning one page. Though I suppose if you added the title, something like "How Orgasms Feel," then it would make more sense. I remember hearing somewhere that haikus are poems which "get to the point," so I suppose it should encompass everything it wants to say within its own self-contained sphere?

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yes,

the word good certainly denotes the time of year or a seasonal reference doesn't it.

"good" on it's own in any form does not denote a haiku no matter what it implies.

the haiku should contain a cutting word as well as the seasonal reference (which should be in the body of the haiku and not in a title.

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hailstones and thunder
crazy woman crying
boy becomes man

rayheinrich
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"so I suppose it should encompass everything it wants to say within its own self-contained sphere?"
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this brings up all sorts of things.
one is the old problem of where the boundary of a poem/idea/meaning/etc. is.

not a haiku but...

< like a fish in an aquarium >

   the meaning of a word
   is not inside it
   
   neither
   is the meaning of this poem
   
   you're reading it
   right now
   from the outside
   
   i'd like to think
   i wrote it
   from in here
   
   but i was
   where you are right now
   
   so this poem is
   (though i wish it wasn't)
   like a fish in an aquarium
   
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p.s. Mylum be ku'l

PierreTheMad
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breathless shaking
Supplanted spirit sundries
Pelvic candy suckling

Bright wave white
Leaving trails of sweetened soreness
Washed eyes brighter

rayheinrich
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billy spake:
"the word 'good' certainly denotes the time of year or a seasonal reference doesn't it"

Depends on where you are. On the Gulf Coast of Texas 'good' denotes winter;
in Winnipeg? — not so much.


"good" on it's own in any form does not denote a haiku no matter what it implies.

If it implies haiku, well, duh, of course it does.  In other words:
"Why is language so flexible?  It can eat its own tail." - Noam Chomsky
(He was talking about self-referential expressions.)

"the haiku should contain a cutting word as well as the seasonal reference
(which should be in the body of the haiku and not in a title)."

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hmm, yeah, well, here are some haiku guidelines (IMHO, of course):

Necessary:
A haiku must make an unexpected/novel/interesting comparison
(usually a description followed by a realization /
a cause followed by an effect).

Optional:
To approach the spirit of Japanese haiku add any/all of these:

* A location in nature
* A reflection on nature
* A comparison of life/self/spirit with nature
* Be plain, literal. (Metaphor is only created by the reader.)
* Use some indication of the transition between the two parts:
 a mark (usually a dash), a word, or just a line break.
* Use 12 or fewer syllables.
* Include a seasonal reference (can be direct: 'winter' or indirect: 'snow').

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