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jezabel

Lost Thinker

Member Since: 02/15/10
Forum Posts: 29

The City
Posted on: 03/02/10 at 14:15:51 CST

I have just moved from London to Cardiff, one city to another if slightly smaller, to another.

Has anybody got any city poems up their sleeves?

The city for me
Bittersweet tea
Brewed often too long
Foul faces at sea
Blind and too free
What can I say
I love strong tea.

Creature of the night

le rayon du biscuit
(rayheinrich)

Thought Provoker

Member Since: 12/04/09
Forum Posts: 695

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/02/10 at 20:05:34 CST

here's a poem that's in a city, maybe that's good enough?

< hudson view >

up 26 floors visiting your apartment in manhattan
with its slight tiny crack of a view
of the palisades across the hudson
and it's seven minutes before sunset on the third of july
and there's a barge
and a gull
and a ship
and a river that's split by light
on our side it's day
on jersey's it's night

- - -

Mental illness isn't just a state of mind, it's a lifestyle. Let's market it. - - http://wordbiscuit.com

Cthonian

Twisted Dreamer

Member Since: 11/12/09
Forum Posts: 158

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/03/10 at 02:46:01 CST

Jezabel, this is a poem I wrote perhaps eight years ago, strangely enough about Cardiff and a place called Aberystwyth:

An old hotel and the sea
Ghosts with no footsteps walk across the road
Two old things shout at themselves in that code
For the future, this is me
People I can't greet
Faces I can't see
Walking bits of meat
This is beauty.

Great to see that we have a good few poets here representing Welsh or Walian verse!

Abracadabra

Guardian of Shadows

Member Since: 11/13/09
Forum Posts: 633

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/03/10 at 03:10:32 CST

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/5395/

- as relevant as I can get for now, Jezabel.

Poetry is : Painting with Words

anandosen

Thought Provoker

Member Since: 08/22/09
Forum Posts: 91

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/03/10 at 03:18:41 CST

I don't know your exact requirement...or what you are expecting in a city poem...but then I have some poems in my profile near to your need...you can check out my , "MANHATTAN DREAMS..."; "GHAZNI...THE FALLEN RETREAT"; "A CITY IN HEART"...read and comment on them if you like...

Anando Sen

jezabel

Lost Thinker

Member Since: 02/15/10
Forum Posts: 29

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/05/10 at 11:33:11 CST

Didn't put in exact requirements I was aiming for free verse, see what the very vague title jogged in peoples mind.

I have to admit I may have bitten more than I can chew, I can't choose so far. Each has a place with its own merits, here are my thoughts so far I'll leave for another day or so then choose.

le Rayon Du Biscuit - Hudson view is beautiful. An image imprinted and captured in words(they say a picture tells 1000 words, but who needs that many if you can pull on peoples experiences of a moment with just a few)

Cthonian - Are you Welsh? I am not sure if this is what you were going for, but for me your poem has summed up some of what I've seen in the elder Welsh people and their communities and the fact that I am enjoying a bit more solitude although it can make you a bit bitter at times.

Abracadabra - Identity Crisis - This depicts the inner battle that is so often mirrored around us in an urban setting. (although possibly the rural artist may also feel it about other things)

Anandosen - A city in heart would be my favourite out of the three. Its a great opening line and you know you are on a journey with you.

Anyway this was just a bit of fun, but will see if any more add their thoughts and then choose one.

Hope your weekends are shaping up nicely x

Creature of the night

anandosen

Thought Provoker

Member Since: 08/22/09
Forum Posts: 91

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/05/10 at 23:13:30 CST

Thank you Jeza for ur comments...keep reading me:-)

Anando Sen

anandosen

Thought Provoker

Member Since: 08/22/09
Forum Posts: 91

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/05/10 at 23:17:38 CST

Hey...I forgot to mention you one more poem in my profile...I don't know how you will interpret it...but then it bears a journey too with a much deeper feeling...it is closer to my heart and I will appreciate if you read the same and comment..."Entwined...Freedomm Ignored"...I am upset because I have not recieved any comments on this poem yet...

Anando Sen

priya dileep
(raindreams)

Fire of Insight

Member Since: 08/21/09
Forum Posts: 320

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/06/10 at 01:00:19 CST

Here is mine Jezabel...

The City
is a whore
that toys with
the rusted effigy of her foolish first love
in early morning-hours
of aloneness,freedom
and epiphany
and autopsies her could-have-beens.
Only the anorexic river sings its sighs
into her brackish dreams
scrambled by many fingers,
and blankets her wombish sleep,
since she has to be fresh and fetching tomorrow
for men who insist on value for their dough.

trysca

Lost Thinker

Member Since: 12/07/09
Forum Posts: 30

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/06/10 at 13:18:45 CST

http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/4532/

thats about the city and even has the word 'city' in it..!

me ny vynnaf ceusel sausnec

Cthonian

Twisted Dreamer

Member Since: 11/12/09
Forum Posts: 158

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/09/10 at 02:55:27 CST

@Jezabel - Yes I'm Welsh, and you managed to extract the meaning of my verse expertly. I wrote it on a Sunday whilst sitting on the sea-front watching gangs of old ladies roam around the promenade.

@Priya - I love that piece!

Abracadabra

Guardian of Shadows

Member Since: 11/13/09
Forum Posts: 633

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/09/10 at 03:03:51 CST

"Gangs" of old ladies roaming the seafront in Aberystwyth - that's pure Monty Python. I can just see them terrorising teenagers and bashing them over the head with their handbags.

Poetry is : Painting with Words

Cthonian

Twisted Dreamer

Member Since: 11/12/09
Forum Posts: 158

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/09/10 at 06:28:23 CST

You wouldn't be far wrong, A. The real reason why students are nocturnal.

Ceejay
(Astyanax)

Lost Thinker

Member Since: 02/23/10
Forum Posts: 14

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/12/10 at 04:57:41 CST

I like Rayon's poem, the hudson. I like its impressionistic picture, and I like poems that start as free verse and resolve into rhyme at the end (I just posted one that follows that form).

Austin Voll
(Character)

Strange Creature

Member Since: 03/12/10
Forum Posts: 4

Re: The City
Posted on: 03/12/10 at 12:01:20 CST

Trees don't behave in that way. Nor do feinds that feed on one another act in the manner of which these ones do. But fire still works in the same, joyous, murdurous ways. And the same goes for havoc as well.

She's somewhere over there

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