Story Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about Dreams, Fantasy and Fiction
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Kidnapped
The rickety bus jolted as we were driven across the only real desert in Africa . I'm trying to stay positive pushing back thoughts of how easily it would be for the old bus to break down at any moment
I decided to dismiss the thought because we had finally reached Cape Town. I couldn't wait to see all of it and film everything in sight
But it wasn't in the cards as things changed in a split second. Suddenly , I feared the worse as our bus was flagged down by two men
They were white men that climbed aboard with guns in hand wearing nothing to disguise what they...
I decided to dismiss the thought because we had finally reached Cape Town. I couldn't wait to see all of it and film everything in sight
But it wasn't in the cards as things changed in a split second. Suddenly , I feared the worse as our bus was flagged down by two men
They were white men that climbed aboard with guns in hand wearing nothing to disguise what they...
#Africa
#anxiety
#fear #suffering
#fear #suffering
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Dragon Slayed
#funny
17 reads
10 Comments
Faerie's Visit
A whispered word
On a naughty breeze
Playful and joyful
Trying to please
Come to me
What did it say
I wanted to relax
On this sweet spring day
Come to me
There it was again
Insistent
Not to hard
Like an old friend
Come–To–Me
Louder it came
Drips with sweet
Molasses from
Sugar cane
I rose to my feet
Not...
On a naughty breeze
Playful and joyful
Trying to please
Come to me
What did it say
I wanted to relax
On this sweet spring day
Come to me
There it was again
Insistent
Not to hard
Like an old friend
Come–To–Me
Louder it came
Drips with sweet
Molasses from
Sugar cane
I rose to my feet
Not...
#funny
31 reads
11 Comments
The Ballad of Sonic and Tails
or Rainy Morning Imagination
The day broke grey and full of rain,
two boys were in the dumps.
They couldn’t run around outside,
they were a pair of grumps,
they fussed and fumed about their luck
and then the power went out!
Their video games could not be played,
they’d have to do without.
Big brother had a splendid plan
to help them cure their ails.
Sonic the hedgehog he would be,
his bro’, his sidekick, Tails!
Their mission was to gather rings
across the USA,
the rings were of the...
The day broke grey and full of rain,
two boys were in the dumps.
They couldn’t run around outside,
they were a pair of grumps,
they fussed and fumed about their luck
and then the power went out!
Their video games could not be played,
they’d have to do without.
Big brother had a splendid plan
to help them cure their ails.
Sonic the hedgehog he would be,
his bro’, his sidekick, Tails!
Their mission was to gather rings
across the USA,
the rings were of the...
#narrative
31 reads
2 Comments
She believed everything I said
I took her up to the roof and told her she could fly because I asked God to grant her a special aviator's license.
Did you ever hear of something so goddamn stupid?
She did it
She fell like a fucking stone
Pretty stupid, even for a girl that was an amazing poet!
She was on this site from time to time
Did you ever hear of something so goddamn stupid?
She did it
She fell like a fucking stone
Pretty stupid, even for a girl that was an amazing poet!
She was on this site from time to time
#God
#LifeAsAWriter
#WritingPoetry #ignorance
#WritingPoetry #ignorance
74 reads
17 Comments
Best Orgasms They Could Ever Have Without The Passion
They have their rituals like any other married couple
At night, he goes downstairs before bed and jerks off to the hottest porn on the internet
He can have any women he wants
She goes under the covers with her dildo and vibrator and fucks & pulsates herself to an amazing orgasm
They finish around the same time,
even though they're in different rooms
They have been married for so long that they have the perfect sex every time
After the lights go out, they sleep like real human beings.
At night, he goes downstairs before bed and jerks off to the hottest porn on the internet
He can have any women he wants
She goes under the covers with her dildo and vibrator and fucks & pulsates herself to an amazing orgasm
They finish around the same time,
even though they're in different rooms
They have been married for so long that they have the perfect sex every time
After the lights go out, they sleep like real human beings.
#loneliness
#marriage
#ShortStory
#emptiness
#orgasm
62 reads
10 Comments
Dirk and Davina shopping day 2
#romantic
#erotic
#BDSM
#vampires
#sexy
33 reads
2 Comments
Little Weed
hello little weed in my garden grown
toiling on nothing really
insistent on the affection of the sun
with you brute leaves blotting it out for the rest of us
your poison ivy climbing is tiring
shrinking into the shadows
yes I see you protruding
pollinated by every busy bee
well my little scrub it is your nature
popping up where you ought not
trying to choke the daisies
who in innocence opens for the sunllight
taking no notice of your deviant scaling
I pray the son to...
toiling on nothing really
insistent on the affection of the sun
with you brute leaves blotting it out for the rest of us
your poison ivy climbing is tiring
shrinking into the shadows
yes I see you protruding
pollinated by every busy bee
well my little scrub it is your nature
popping up where you ought not
trying to choke the daisies
who in innocence opens for the sunllight
taking no notice of your deviant scaling
I pray the son to...
#flowers
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Dirk and Davina go shopping.
#romantic
#BDSM
#vampires #sexy
#vampires #sexy
35 reads
7 Comments
CHO! (STFU)
Growing up,
I was never one to argue with grandma,
Then again I wasn't much of a smart ass,
But of the few times I ever gave her lip,
I quickly found out she didn’t take any sass.
The command that came from the little lady,
Was an unexpected and thunderous “CHO!”
It wasn’t Spanish or English, not even Chinese,
More like a coded shut the fuck up now and go!
My sisters and all my cousins also knew it,
At one time or another we felt the harsh blow,
It was like lightning fast reprimand not to argue,
When grandma got pissed off and yelled...
I was never one to argue with grandma,
Then again I wasn't much of a smart ass,
But of the few times I ever gave her lip,
I quickly found out she didn’t take any sass.
The command that came from the little lady,
Was an unexpected and thunderous “CHO!”
It wasn’t Spanish or English, not even Chinese,
More like a coded shut the fuck up now and go!
My sisters and all my cousins also knew it,
At one time or another we felt the harsh blow,
It was like lightning fast reprimand not to argue,
When grandma got pissed off and yelled...
#family
#memories
#tradition
440 reads
6 Comments
Poor thing, Clara, she was the perfect child
But sin is an effort to gain the ecstasy and the
knowledge that pertain alone to angels and in
making this effort man becomes a demon.” (Arthur Machen, 1904)
Poor thing, Clara, she was the perfect child.
The old bathroom is stripped down to the bone,
The prettiest skirts, and her little scraped-up knees,
only broken tiles and cobwebs remaining.
AND her infectious smile. Oh, what a shame.
The yellow stain where an imported
The losses we suffer in times like these.
marble vanity probably used to be.
She...
knowledge that pertain alone to angels and in
making this effort man becomes a demon.” (Arthur Machen, 1904)
Poor thing, Clara, she was the perfect child.
The old bathroom is stripped down to the bone,
The prettiest skirts, and her little scraped-up knees,
only broken tiles and cobwebs remaining.
AND her infectious smile. Oh, what a shame.
The yellow stain where an imported
The losses we suffer in times like these.
marble vanity probably used to be.
She...
#gothic
#ghosts
53 reads
5 Comments
Possessed
Embalm me
with your body
with your body
#passion
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1 Comment
DU Poetry : Story Poems Seeking Critique about Dreams, Fantasy and Fiction